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My brain is sick.
It only thinks of twisted things.
Like how we burn our eyes out,
And we rip our wings.

And then we sit in the dark,
Staring blankly at each other.
Our eye-sockets bleeding,
On a wounded brother.

Then we kneel down,
Praying to the sun.
Hoping things get brighter;
But we don't know what we've done!

We take our tongues out,
We scar them with razors.
Spitting every blade
Across other people's faces.

And if you start feeling, 
My words are getting dark;
I'm just painting pictures 
But you are making them stark!

And now you feel dead;
Surreal in your mind.
So listen to this preacher,
From the land of the blind.
Please, if you enjoyed this, read the following and leave a COMMENT. I need to know what my readers think...and it's pretty serious.

Alright ladies and gentlemen,

I know I haven't responded to all your comments and replies yet. I'll get around to it tomorrow-ish, but in the mean time...I need your input in order to make a decision.

Now, as you might know, I'm having some masks designed and I'm considering having my main-mask associate with a particular personality. I think it would fit best with a dark, twisted and emotional rap-persona, which I've decided to name "Holy Man"

The name itself is meant to be ironic, since he'll rap about and deal with surreal, twisted things as well as a little bit about demons, cruelty, all that nasty stuff. Basically it's going to be acid rap and I NEED TO KNOW, honestly, if you think I can pull it off.

If you as my readers tell me, that I can do the twisted stuff and that you want to see me do the twisted stuff...then there's no need to wait.

Fear has always been a great inspiration to me. I admire acid rap because the good ones scare the living hell out of me. I fear them deeply and I know that fear makes me think. Much more so than inspiration, which is gone in a few hours after the presenter leaves to a round of applause. I want to do the kind of work that people don't really see on DA since a lot of the poets are very...'light-hearted' so to speak.

So if you'll cheer me on as I walk down the dark alley. Then please show some appreciation for Holy Man. He's going to be the dark preacher and I welcome you all to his Confessional in Hell.

-Word of Chen :iconwordofchen:
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FMLunicorns Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014
This is how I feel everyday. 
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minssi Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is amazing wow
i really love how descriptive and twisted and symbolic it is.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^ This work is done in the 'Holy Man' style, which I intend to make my main persona. It has it's roots in acid rap, which means I will try to get inside a person's head as much as I can and express their darker, twisted feelings :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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minssi Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love it and i love the idea! i really think you'll pull it off greatly ♥
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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IHateSallyAcorn4Ever Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
"We take our tongues out,
We scar them with razors.
Spitting every blade
Across other people's faces."

This is a really powerful metaphor and definitely my favourite part!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Shocker7776 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think it would be nice. The Holy Man would be a cool thing to see.

Shocker Approves: +10
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Good, I've got some Holy Man stuff prepped and ready to go over the next few day, just need a little bit moe time :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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evillramen Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
how did you get in my mind?!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Cause we think alike .3.

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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RebeccaMArt Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow very dark and descriptive. well done :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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RebeccaMArt Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :)
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MikixKaneko Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear Chen,
This is fantastic. I would love to join Holy Man in his Hellish Confessional. I applaud you as to walk the dark alley to Unholiness. Devilish speed. >:3
Yours,
Miki Kaneko
P.S. In other words, I support you in your decision. Good luck!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you for your support. The Holy Man stuff is definitely all coming soon ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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MikixKaneko Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :3
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Demision Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this poem actually, and from reading your description, you can definitely pull off the deep, emotional fear of acid rap. You're pretty good c: I thoroughly enjoyed this, and the first stanza really pulled me in
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Well I hope to keep doing more :'3

Thank you so much for supporting the "Holy Man" persona

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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YokoShiniz Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The force is strong with this one :iconguaahplz:

haha no but um.. I honestly think you can pull this off. Holy man is a great name and I would love to see more of this kind of poetry on dA. So what I'm saying is Go for it. And for the Holy Man, I'll be waiting for his Confessions in the pits of Hell. :iconsmartyplz:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you :'3 His stuff will be coming very soon, just a bit more filler ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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YokoShiniz Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha no problem. You guys really deserve it :meow:
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IIMikuruII Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
holy stars..amazing poetry!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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IIMikuruII Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Np~
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Saga-Sage Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
I think indeed you can pull that off. I like the sound of it actually.

Good luck with your progress.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
My thanks friend ^^ I will be sure to release quality works of that kind soon :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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MistaMishMash Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you could pull it off. Honestly, I think it may take you a little time to get into the sort of mindset necessary for communicating such dark things and to attain the effect you want, but you certainly are capable of this if you set your mind to it.
I think I would be interested to see, but I am not entirely sure what, exactly, to expect, so I can't say with complete certainty that I would prefer this. So long as you continue to dabble in other themes, too. ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly for your support. I will be mixing in other stuff because "Holy Man" is just one persona, there is another in the works, in addition to my own 'Chen' person who does the serious free-verse stuff :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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MattyXJeevas4blue Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
epicness :D Clap you're so amazing.... Meow :3 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly :'3 More twisted stuff will be coming soon ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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MattyXJeevas4blue Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
Yayz ^-^ haha
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Daid-27 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you could definitely pull off acid rap. I like this, to me it expresses a beautiful melancholy. I'm not sure if you've listened to Eyedea and Abilities, but I find this reminds me of them for some reason. 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
I listen more to ICP and Esham, but I'll definitely give those guys a go ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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SolsticeCarol Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
THIS!! *__* (I rarely write two exclamation marks, you can feel honored xD)

Seriously, this is wonderfully amazing!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much ^^ I greatly appreciate your support...and the double exclamation marks x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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BrutalBone Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
This is definitely a great piece, and considering everything I've read from you, you could definitely pull the Holy Man persona off. I'm really looking forward to what you come up with next. Nod 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly ^^ There will be a lot more "Holy Man" stuff coming very soon :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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driftingimmortal Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You speak words of beauty from the hidden soul. I thank you.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly as well for reading this ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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NekoNeko1331 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are great at this! Keep up the good work and I'm sure you would be great at acid rap. The whole thing paints a picture that's surreal and terrifying, but instead of scaring people away, they wait in anxiety and fear for an encore that will never come. They want to run, but it's like your rhymes are chains binding them to their spot, making them unable to leave whether they want to our not. Seriously, keep up the great work and don't let that talent go to waste.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you, I hope to keep painting those kinds of images and more Holy Man stuff will be coming soon ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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CourageousPrincess Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is really lovely, words cannot describe it
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much for enjoying it :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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CourageousPrincess Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
your very much welcome :iconhappymeowplz:
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DanseAvecLesRenard Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Student General Artist
I really enjoyed it, especially the last stanza, and I'm not about to stand here and act like I know the difference between acid rap and any other form of rap. However, in my humble opinion I've always enjoyed your raps that are more of a social commentary. I realize that the same message can be given through more of a dark tone, but I would hope that you would avoid being dark just for the sake of being edgy. Again, don't mean to step on any toes, just wanted to offer some input. 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Professional Writer
No problem, thank you for enjoying it ^^.

Acid rap is different from normal rap because the idea is to try and use surreal images or ideas (essentially turning a rap into one long acid trip).

So the darkness is definitely heaped on with the idea of painting a more surreal picture. It's definitely not just to be edgy x'D. The main idea is really just to bring out lots of symbolism so people can see and say 'oh, I get what he means' without me explicitly saying it :'3

That's the main idea anyhow. Hope that makes it a bit clearer about the direction I want to take. It's more about painting surreal images, rather than anything.

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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deli73123 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow.

This is the closest anything has ever come to describing the darkest corners of my mind.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Professional Writer
Well, let's see if we can delve a little deeper. Can I say that you're voting for the Holy Man persona? x'D

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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deli73123 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Student General Artist
I....what?
I don't even know what that means.
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