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You Lift Me Up:

When first I fell from the grace of the light
Tumbling endlessly through an uncaring sky
With wings torn from me, blotched and bloodied;
It was time for me to die...

But a bed of flowers, with the scent of lillies;
Caressing my heart with its soothing fragrance
Left me stronger and healed my wounds;
In the dark it was my radiance

It brought me back from the brink of despair
And made me forget that I would never fly
Instead I am content with these broken wings
If I may sleep where you still lie...

Here upon the ground, having faced my judgement
I am calm and collected without burden to bear
Someday I wish to return to my home
And when I do; may I take you there?

For it is a wonderous place, of miracles and mercy
Though gripped by those who are blinded by greed
I weep for them, as anyone should
For they have followed the devil's creed

It is sad to know, that they have been corrupted
Sadder still, to be denied a home
Yet the warmth of the hearts that choose to surround me
Can melt even the strongest of stone

It is this light, this loving warmth
This care and support with which I am graced;
To those who continue to support this man
I am truly humbled, by your loving embrace...

"Though broken, I am still unbowed and I shall wait until I may fly once more..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 17th July 2012
BREAK THE LIMIT! Faves Needed: 250

Want to know what the above line is about? Read my appeal: [link]

Author's Comment:

As DA continues to shuffle my work, I will continue to post new pieces and upgrade the fave break limit. If you have not yet read the appeal, here is a summary:

DA is forcefully shuffling the work of deviants and therefore denying some deviants a chance for their work to be seen despite it being the 'most popular' at the time. It is sad that they would do this to anyone who works hard on their piece and the only way to break through this is to hit the fave limit.

I hope that everyone will just take one moment to click the fave button and help me break the limit. Doing so would mean far more than anything else in the world to me right now, for I only hope to restore fairness to the system and receive an answer for why I am being silenced ^^

-Chen

HONOURABLE MENTIONS:

Prophet :iconforgotten-reaper: is helping to spread the word to the community as actively as possible.

:iconmangamanda: was referred to the appeal by :iconsandramonster:

:iconuntamedunwanted: a big name in the literature community has supported my appeal and even given me a premium membership. Why? Because bullying and oppression is wrong and everyone deserves the chance to be recognised for the hard work they do. No one tells Roger Federer to stop winning at tennis, he'll stop when he's lost his game. No one should be penalised for being too popular or too clever. Do we tell our scientists they are too smart? Do we tell Stephen Hawking that he is too intelligent? Do we tell Justin Bieber that.....yeah y'know what, let's not go with the last one .___. Anyway, the important thing is everyone tries hard, not just one person. To penalise someone for working hard is wrong and I'm glad to have such a big name supporting me ^^
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I am personally not concerned with the favorite stuff. I just like your work and as usual am giving my critique.

This is a well written work. The theme and the title both complement each other and so in a way it is a perfect harmony of the two.

The start is well posed; you left WHY he fell and all those details and stressed on the story ahead. You kept things subtle by not going over WHO or HOW he was uplifted but it just happened.

This subtlety is really good.

Then the expressions at places are also praiseworthy. The way ti takes you to the end is also beautiful and so I don't see many flaws (it was a free verse with a little rhyming) so i would say a pretty good job!

And I do hope your work gets back where it belongs :)
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7 out of 7 deviants thought this was fair.

:iconshehrozeameen:
I find myself in a conundrum while reading this particular masterpiece. It isn't that I support bullying, nor for that matter take it upon myself towards fighting a cause which I (honestly speaking) am as guilty of as the wrost amongst us. Its as you summarized best in your work:

For it is a wonderous place, of miracles and mercy
Though gripped by those who are blinded by greed
I weep for them, as anyone should
For they have followed the devil's creed


The problem is simply a matter of capitalist tendencies merged with a mandatory requirement of our governing bodies towards "improvement". To them, improvement can be provided when, and only when, the community is made to rise up to the occasion (i.e. "budding talent provided space to show their work"); this acts as a double-edged sword. All the more reason why, however biased I may sound (relatively speaking), a fair deal is needed - freedom is, after all, a very misunderstood right.

Good luck with what you support, and may you be successful in your endeavor.
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
This is Beautiful. Great Job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry about the late reply :iconorzplz: I have no excuse for my phail :iconhomelessonionplz:
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animel0vur Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
bravo :clap:
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The fave break has been broken. Congrats! :D
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Kristy-B Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student General Artist
Simply astounding. I must say that I've read a lot of pieces of literature, but this has to be one of my favourite poems.
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
A very well written piece ..
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i didnt feel like adding the "but" ... but its there and so ... despite the great word bending at work here ... i think i shall leave the "but" out this time :D
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I-Lost-My-Way Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your Prophet has indeed been effective! He's the one who wrote the poem that had a link to you. And without that, I would never have found your wonderful works.
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GAcrewmember4life Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its beautiful
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautiful piece of literature. :)
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FairyDusty Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
It's so beautifull!! :iconiloveitplz:
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