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You Left Me Stronger:

Hey there, it's been awhile, do you remember me?

I guess you might not, since I wasn't very important to you.

You know, I spent so many days thinking about - what I did wrong

I questioned if maybe, I was at fault or if I was screwed up.

I thought a lot about the things you said...

The things that were my fault, my problems.

I took them to heart at first, but then I realised you were wrong.

I realised that you are selfish and ugly on the inside.

On the surface you pretended to care, but like a cancer;

You amputate someone the moment you think they've gone bad.

You hide from the rigours of life and only emerge like a parasite

When everything is good - when everything is fine and dandy.

I used to think that I was afraid of you leaving,

But now I know, that you've left me stronger than I was before.

You know, this was supposed to be an emotional whine; an emotional spill,

Maybe I was supposed to cry tears and beg you to come back, but you know what

I just don't need you anymore.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 20th November 2012
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Author's Comment:

Alright mates, I actually tried to do an emotional poem fer you guys, but unfortunately it turned into a rather urban sort of slam poem.

So when reading, try it with a strong street/urban accent and I think it will sound a lot better.

Other than that, I hope you enjoyed it and I'll be clearing messages slowly. This will be one of the poems I'll be reading out during my comeback episode of Word of Chen Live tomorrow.

As for the idea behind it, well...I wanted to explore the issue of someone feeling stronger after emotional trauma or a break up, as opposed to feeling broken and helpless. There are plenty of romance/emotional poems that talk about how sad they feel afterward, but of course there's always the recovery rather than the downward spiral. Hence, this was a take on the recovery where you realise that, the simply weren't the right one for you and of course you move on from that ^^

Thankfully, this has nothing to do with my personal life, else I'd probably be extremely weepy and sad if my current girlfriend left me :/ and you'll see teenage level poems for a few days haha xD

Enjoy mates :3 Captain Chen out ;3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Trying out an Australian Pirate accent...sort of xD

Other Poems by Me:
Machine ManMachine Man:

It began with but a simple command, "to do as we are told".

Never to deviate from this path - never to nurture the soul.

We are told that we are given a purpose; "a part of something great!"

Yet why oh why am I so weary of that which is my fate?

Am I an error, a single anomaly, unable to feel intact?

Or am I missing some special attribute - a facet which I lack.

In a society made of fleshed machines; robots wearing skin,

Perhaps I'm simply seeking something, to fill this metal tin.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th November 2012
They Watch UsThey Watch Us:

Perched high upon the mountains;
With wings as black as night.
They watch us in the hour,
Before darkness turns to light.

I've seen them in my visions;
In dreams they come and go,
But the things they seem to tell me
I guess nobody should know...

I've seen children that are buried,
Beneath a frozen lake.
A maiden sits there weeping;
Her heart is soon to break.

The crows flutter downward,
A noose amongst their hands.
They take the maiden away,
To a dark and distant land.

And even if I follow -
Even if I try...
I'll simply end up buried,
Where the frozen children lie.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 10th November 2012
Sensual TortureSensual Torture:

You are but a simple pawn;
Caught in a maelstrom of ill feelings and turmoil.
You were not meant to be here -
But unfortunately, here you are my friend...

Now then, I do not wish to drag this out;
There is no purpose in badgering someone who knows so little.
However - without your confession - I'm afraid that
I would not know whom I should share my - pleasures with...

Though I'm certain that you will be sharing plenty...

Of course, it will probably be a poor idea to make you scream,
At least not while I'm still enjoying your fear.
Instead we'll begin with a simple agony;
A quick taste of your pain to whet my appe
An Oath to My FatherAn Oath to My Father:

The chill of winter is nothing, when compared to the cold inside my heart.

A fire, once stoked by the warmth of family, has quietly died, five falls past.

I dream of my father, who watches from beyond the realms - and my ancestors

Who fought against an endless army of giants, to win the lands we have today.

Just as a devout man honours his God through worship, I honour them through my axe!

Each stroke of the whetstone, each screech of the metal, brings me closer to them -

Even as I draw closer to my doom. Oh how I can feel him, for the anger in my blood

Boils evermore as I sense him approaching my camp. He is hun


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Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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Something everyone has gone through, and something I think everyone should go through: a tough relationship-- or furthermore, a tough breakup.
It's painful, but ultimately I find you learn the most from a relationship once it's over. It's a learning experience and a token of wisdom. You're feeling a very reasonable way and expressing it. Your poem is and doesn't condescend.

However, I personally think your poem could use some individuality. I feel like it's lost in basics and clumsy metaphors.
I can definitely feel this is running on raw emotion; a lot of hurt and anger and self-righteousness. You state that you have found yourself and now stand on your own two feet, but I remain unconvinced as a reader.
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First off, I would just like to tell you how much I love this type of poem, so if the rest of this is horribly biased, that's why.
The beginning of the poem gives a good sense of slight confusion and it sounds like the speaker is almost incredulous. It move into a more sarcastic tone towards the middle before jumping straight to the heart of the problem, the cancerous parasite. You use great descriptive words to show just how messed up and hypocritical this person is. I really like the end especially because you go back to focusing on the speaker and his thoughts. The last two lines in particular are excellent. The biting, harsh reality of the last line is very final and a fitting way to end the poem and any last vestiges of attachment that may have lingered on either side of the relationship. Very vivid overall.
What do you think?
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PokeBW4Evr Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
This is EXACTLY how I felt when my first boyfriend left me for another girl because I didn't give it out to him, that was about 4 years ago now. It took me some time to realize these things, but I'm so glad I did =) Thank you, Chen, for writing something so deep and meaningful once again. You do all the time, but I just don't have the time to comment on most of it XD
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Swann-shooter Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
There's nothing I can say about this that probably hasn't already been said, but thank you.
Thank you so much for putting my past year and a half into words.
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Babbitman Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I'm not ashamed to say that I nearly got teary eyed reading this; but for the exact reasons you summed up - it's an awe inspiring 'recovery' poem.

You, my friend, have summed up exactly how I feel, and for that, I thank you. :salute:
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Fangette Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Hey, this was me and my first boyfriend exactly~
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EverybodysFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem helped remind me that leaving someone behind can be a good thing, and that the things they made you believe about yourself are not true at all. Thank you; this poem is true, and truth is what a lot of people in this situation need.
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WickedHands Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
you know what? i fucking needed this tonight. thanks.
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OldFashionSecrets Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem means so much to me. This is exactly how I feel about someone and I really connect with this. Thank you.
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writingpoetryforlife Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is good
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Rin-Suzaku Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This was great! I can really relate to this, I'm going through a terrible falling-out with my supposed best friend, and this poem really describes how I feel at this point. Love it!
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X-RAES Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist
I love your writing :D
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TheBattyCrow Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This sounds like me after four years of my parent's separation.
Beautifully brilliant and appropriate^^
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Sphalerite-Recourse Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
that sent chills up my spine
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Sirhardcoreelite Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing... explain my current mood... so perfectly
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DecepticonThoughts Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
You know, I would be glad to share this on Facebook. Some one I love... Loved should know this, because this is how I feel.

I do feel stronger and I don't see any reason to cry for that person. Thought that I would maybe want to cry but there is not enough with emotions.

Thanx for an beautiful work. I fave it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Professional Writer
By all means, share it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DecepticonThoughts Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
Thank you, dear.
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ahhsummer Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Professional Photographer
The world needs more poets- good job.
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Rutgerman95 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
You what makes this at least three times as awesome?
Imagine GLaDOS saying this. :)
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Fly-gonz Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
I don't feel something like this should be contained within a poem. I'm reading as a paragraph with some flowery language thrown in. (Of course, it's got a lot of emotion and the good stuff that makes a piece)

I also agree with most things in CSticco's critique (it's a bit harsh IMO, this piece isn't too bad technique-wise), so I won't write my own.

Keep writing and stop worrying about the number of views you get.
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Los825 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
u made me speechless!!
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FrozenAngelBrony Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
oh my goodness. its as if I read part of my lifes story. this is the most legit poem i have ever read!! I add you to the list of people I admire. Right under Shakespeare, and above Spongebob.
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NocturnRavyn Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
I want to think that I can relate to this, but I can't see my ex as ugly on the inside. He never blamed me for anything, he just... left. I've said all I needed to say to him, but I still can't let him go because no one's ever loved me as much as he did :( Of course now that I write this down I realize how much of an "it's not you it's me" breakup it was. That bastard ._.

Anyhoo ^^;
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leming400 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
I'm sure everyone has one or more experiences where this is appliable, I think that's the beauty of your work, how relateable it is
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Abstergo-Assassin Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really needed to read something like this.
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vasanoja Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist
I'm not into poetry, myself, but I can relate to this.
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MyScatterBrain Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I once met a guy and this descriped what he did so well. We were just friends but it was still like in your poem. In the end he left me because he thought I was obsessed with him. I wasn't.. I just needed him..

Thank you for sharing your feelings in these awesome poems
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RotzYap Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
When I saw the title, I already had a feeling that I might relate to what I am about to read. While reading the poem, I automatically found myself looking back at something that has truly left me stronger.

Hope you stay strong Captain!
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
I really love this one, I really can related this to some people!
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BraveTamerMicko Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
I guess I can relate to this as I also lost a friend in the past, but the difference is that I've also made large mistakes that I regret during our friendship.
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eriksnow Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So inspiring right now. My ex makes me feel exactly like this, even though at the moment I love her more than anything in the world.
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Atlantech Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Scary, this sounds like something I could've written myself.

during those times in hell, I wrote a lot poetry and lyrics very much like this.
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Tango-Wolf Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I sat here and sung the whole thing just to see what it sounded like.
Sure, if someone who was a sweet jesus load better at singing then me, they could have a go, but it was pretty nice as lyrics, even though its a poem.
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Uraptora Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is really off topic, but i love your signature!
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Tango-Wolf Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Why, thank you :D
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Miyuki-Miamoto Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Australian pirates? Where? All I see is beaches and denim underwear. Seriously, help me out here, it's so boring!
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Hexe-Cobalt Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
You know...this speaks to me not just about romance, but also of friendship. Sometimes it can be just as hard to recover from losing a strong friendship as it can be a relationship. Especially when you're betrayed in some underhanded way or dumped like so much trash. Because it's exactly the same: you wonder what you did wrong, what you should have done better and then eventually you realise it wasn't you, it was them, and then you move on, you make new friends, maybe even find someone better. :)
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bringcastle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Why always I feel like another day hasn`t sense without simple poem has energy question "why", may I ask myself? Not simple to take this simple poem, be couse it name of construal of own anger, but someone put it clear. I though, maybe you shouldn`t be "so close", so it`s a recept. :).
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Xuruki Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   Digital Artist
There really were times where i thought like that, it was very long ago and it was for quite a while too~
I was hatin myself for how weak i was.. but i was not the problem, but the fact that it was too strong for me.
So i avoided the problem and began to live...
All amazing now~ C:

Also, truthfully spoken ! Wonderfuly and realistic as well as emotionally strong~
Keep it up ya Piraté !
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
<3
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KitzelTheMuse Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written and composed. If only you wrote this back when I too came to the very same conclusion about some people that used to be in my life. I relate very much to this, on several levels. This is, at best from my honest assessment a wonderful point of view with short, blunt, to the point realistic observations.

Bravo Mate, very well done!
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DaDemonicArtist Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you. this more or less covers something that happened in my life recently.
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gameanimemangachibiX Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This poem reminds me of love relationships and friends. I mean sometimes people just hang out or go out with you and stuff just to see you fail in life. I mean true friends and true lovers help you with problems that you have, they stick up for you, and want you to succeed in life, unlike fake friends and lovers. Overall I really love this poem. :happycry:
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Pink-Green-Pixie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
my opinion of this poem reminds me a lot of friends I thought were very important to me. Not only a relationship. People who leave you at your worst and come around when things are dandy or you're smiling/laughing. I have met too many people like that. In this poem though, you express what everyone goes through at least once, if not more in life...and I personally enjoy how raw it was, because that is how it really is when experiencing this.
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm completely biased towards you, so I like this piece. But even still, if I wasn't biased, I would still like it.
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Ice-Nimbus Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
great writing:) it really speaks to me because it doesn't just exemplify a tough relationship or break up but other conflicts that I've gone through as well both personally and professionally.
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ShellyTheZombie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really nice imagery :) leaves a powerful message
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
Hard break up or just some douche from some hard time in High School.
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chalitooo Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Wow, this is just how i'm feeling right now, I really like it =)
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rebelpeng227 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Very interesting poem. Expresses all the pains of leaving a past love, and learning to move along without it.

In all, I like this poem.
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