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You Left Me Stronger:

Hey there, it's been awhile, do you remember me?

I guess you might not, since I wasn't very important to you.

You know, I spent so many days thinking about - what I did wrong

I questioned if maybe, I was at fault or if I was screwed up.

I thought a lot about the things you said...

The things that were my fault, my problems.

I took them to heart at first, but then I realised you were wrong.

I realised that you are selfish and ugly on the inside.

On the surface you pretended to care, but like a cancer;

You amputate someone the moment you think they've gone bad.

You hide from the rigours of life and only emerge like a parasite

When everything is good - when everything is fine and dandy.

I used to think that I was afraid of you leaving,

But now I know, that you've left me stronger than I was before.

You know, this was supposed to be an emotional whine; an emotional spill,

Maybe I was supposed to cry tears and beg you to come back, but you know what

I just don't need you anymore.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 20th November 2012
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Author's Comment:

Alright mates, I actually tried to do an emotional poem fer you guys, but unfortunately it turned into a rather urban sort of slam poem.

So when reading, try it with a strong street/urban accent and I think it will sound a lot better.

Other than that, I hope you enjoyed it and I'll be clearing messages slowly. This will be one of the poems I'll be reading out during my comeback episode of Word of Chen Live tomorrow.

As for the idea behind it, well...I wanted to explore the issue of someone feeling stronger after emotional trauma or a break up, as opposed to feeling broken and helpless. There are plenty of romance/emotional poems that talk about how sad they feel afterward, but of course there's always the recovery rather than the downward spiral. Hence, this was a take on the recovery where you realise that, the simply weren't the right one for you and of course you move on from that ^^

Thankfully, this has nothing to do with my personal life, else I'd probably be extremely weepy and sad if my current girlfriend left me :/ and you'll see teenage level poems for a few days haha xD

Enjoy mates :3 Captain Chen out ;3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Trying out an Australian Pirate accent...sort of xD

Other Poems by Me:
Machine ManMachine Man:

It began with but a simple command, "to do as we are told".

Never to deviate from this path - never to nurture the soul.

We are told that we are given a purpose; "a part of something great!"

Yet why oh why am I so weary of that which is my fate?

Am I an error, a single anomaly, unable to feel intact?

Or am I missing some special attribute - a facet which I lack.

In a society made of fleshed machines; robots wearing skin,

Perhaps I'm simply seeking something, to fill this metal tin.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th November 2012
They Watch UsThey Watch Us:

Perched high upon the mountains;
With wings as black as night.
They watch us in the hour,
Before darkness turns to light.

I've seen them in my visions;
In dreams they come and go,
But the things they seem to tell me
I guess nobody should know...

I've seen children that are buried,
Beneath a frozen lake.
A maiden sits there weeping;
Her heart is soon to break.

The crows flutter downward,
A noose amongst their hands.
They take the maiden away,
To a dark and distant land.

And even if I follow -
Even if I try...
I'll simply end up buried,
Where the frozen children lie.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 10th November 2012
Sensual TortureSensual Torture:

You are but a simple pawn;
Caught in a maelstrom of ill feelings and turmoil.
You were not meant to be here -
But unfortunately, here you are my friend...

Now then, I do not wish to drag this out;
There is no purpose in badgering someone who knows so little.
However - without your confession - I'm afraid that
I would not know whom I should share my - pleasures with...

Though I'm certain that you will be sharing plenty...

Of course, it will probably be a poor idea to make you scream,
At least not while I'm still enjoying your fear.
Instead we'll begin with a simple agony;
A quick taste of your pain to whet my appe
An Oath to My FatherAn Oath to My Father:

The chill of winter is nothing, when compared to the cold inside my heart.

A fire, once stoked by the warmth of family, has quietly died, five falls past.

I dream of my father, who watches from beyond the realms - and my ancestors

Who fought against an endless army of giants, to win the lands we have today.

Just as a devout man honours his God through worship, I honour them through my axe!

Each stroke of the whetstone, each screech of the metal, brings me closer to them -

Even as I draw closer to my doom. Oh how I can feel him, for the anger in my blood

Boils evermore as I sense him approaching my camp. He is hun


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Something everyone has gone through, and something I think everyone should go through: a tough relationship-- or furthermore, a tough breakup.
It's painful, but ultimately I find you learn the most from a relationship once it's over. It's a learning experience and a token of wisdom. You're feeling a very reasonable way and expressing it. Your poem is and doesn't condescend.

However, I personally think your poem could use some individuality. I feel like it's lost in basics and clumsy metaphors.
I can definitely feel this is running on raw emotion; a lot of hurt and anger and self-righteousness. You state that you have found yourself and now stand on your own two feet, but I remain unconvinced as a reader.
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First off, I would just like to tell you how much I love this type of poem, so if the rest of this is horribly biased, that's why.
The beginning of the poem gives a good sense of slight confusion and it sounds like the speaker is almost incredulous. It move into a more sarcastic tone towards the middle before jumping straight to the heart of the problem, the cancerous parasite. You use great descriptive words to show just how messed up and hypocritical this person is. I really like the end especially because you go back to focusing on the speaker and his thoughts. The last two lines in particular are excellent. The biting, harsh reality of the last line is very final and a fitting way to end the poem and any last vestiges of attachment that may have lingered on either side of the relationship. Very vivid overall.
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PokeBW4Evr Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
This is EXACTLY how I felt when my first boyfriend left me for another girl because I didn't give it out to him, that was about 4 years ago now. It took me some time to realize these things, but I'm so glad I did =) Thank you, Chen, for writing something so deep and meaningful once again. You do all the time, but I just don't have the time to comment on most of it XD
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Swann-shooter Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
There's nothing I can say about this that probably hasn't already been said, but thank you.
Thank you so much for putting my past year and a half into words.
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Babbitman Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I'm not ashamed to say that I nearly got teary eyed reading this; but for the exact reasons you summed up - it's an awe inspiring 'recovery' poem.

You, my friend, have summed up exactly how I feel, and for that, I thank you. :salute:
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Fangette Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Hey, this was me and my first boyfriend exactly~
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EverybodysFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem helped remind me that leaving someone behind can be a good thing, and that the things they made you believe about yourself are not true at all. Thank you; this poem is true, and truth is what a lot of people in this situation need.
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WickedHands Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
you know what? i fucking needed this tonight. thanks.
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OldFashionSecrets Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem means so much to me. This is exactly how I feel about someone and I really connect with this. Thank you.
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writingpoetryforlife Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is good
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Rin-Suzaku Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This was great! I can really relate to this, I'm going through a terrible falling-out with my supposed best friend, and this poem really describes how I feel at this point. Love it!
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X-RAES Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist
I love your writing :D
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