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You Have No Right To Live:

Hey, what are you doing?
That's mine, now give it back.
You're stupid, you should just go die!

Okay, I'm sorry...

What, you failed again?
Just how much money do you think we're spending on this,
Do you think it just falls from the sky?
I can't believe you; and don't give me that look!
You better straighten up now you hear me
And if you keep looking like a dead fish,
I'm going to make you wish you were one.

I'm sorry...

Hey, being around you is driving me nuts,
You never want to do anything, you don't even care,
Why bother even breathing if you're going to act like you're dead!

I'm sorry!

Ugly and-
A lousy person like you should just go die!

okay, fine! I will...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 26th November 2012
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Alright mates,

First off, NO this is not about me xD It is a concept poem and I am absolutely fine I assure you.

Next, this is also an experimental style where I play around with the size of the words to give a feeling of one's voice growing smaller as time goes on.

The concept that I wanted to explore in this work is our natural desensitization to the concept of death. We understand it and we understand that it means an end to life, but why are we so eager to use it on the people we don't like?

The particular insult of telling someone to kill themselves or to die is very common in this day and age and numerous works by other poets address this issue from a first person perspective. I am more interested in the psychological impact of such an act. The individual's voice is slowly taken away as they are abused more and more and eventually they really feel like dying. It is something that I've helped some individuals work through and it is something that I personally cannot understand.

When I was younger, I used to throw the concept around freely, but as I matured so too did my understanding of it. Nowadays I know that I will definitely fight for what is right, but to throw around the word 'kill' is no longer something I can easily stomach.

So tell me my dear readers, how do you feel about insults where the person being insulted is told to 'die', I personally find them distasteful and prefer a much more classy insult that strikes the core of their pride rather than asking them to seek an end (if indeed they are deserving of an insult, most people that are insulted this way don't deserve it to begin with :/)

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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Gentlemen, today I speak to you
To convey an issue that has plagued the core of our community.
For so long have we been considered second-class;
To this day there are those who still believe that we are not artists.
But today is not about freedom, today is about honour,
Because there are many writers that still seek to shame us all...

I speak of those individuals, who take art from others.
Covers, photos, paintings, digital art, anime and manga.
It matters not where you draw your source from,
But every action impacts upon us as a community.


When I craft my works, when I write each and ev
You Left Me StrongerYou Left Me Stronger:

Hey there, it's been awhile, do you remember me?

I guess you might not, since I wasn't very important to you.

You know, I spent so many days thinking about - what I did wrong

I questioned if maybe, I was at fault or if I was screwed up.

I thought a lot about the things you said...

The things that were my fault, my problems.

I took them to heart at first, but then I realised you were wrong.

I realised that you are selfish and ugly on the inside.

On the surface you pretended to care, but like a cancer;

You amputate someone the moment you think they've gone bad.

You hide from the rigours of life and only emerge l
Machine ManMachine Man:

It began with but a simple command, "to do as we are told".

Never to deviate from this path - never to nurture the soul.

We are told that we are given a purpose; "a part of something great!"

Yet why oh why am I so weary of that which is my fate?

Am I an error, a single anomaly, unable to feel intact?

Or am I missing some special attribute - a facet which I lack.

In a society made of fleshed machines; robots wearing skin,

Perhaps I'm simply seeking something, to fill this metal tin.

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They Watch UsThey Watch Us:

Perched high upon the mountains;
With wings as black as night.
They watch us in the hour,
Before darkness turns to light.

I've seen them in my visions;
In dreams they come and go,
But the things they seem to tell me
I guess nobody should know...

I've seen children that are buried,
Beneath a frozen lake.
A maiden sits there weeping;
Her heart is soon to break.

The crows flutter downward,
A noose amongst their hands.
They take the maiden away,
To a dark and distant land.

And even if I follow -
Even if I try...
I'll simply end up buried,
Where the frozen children lie.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 10th November 2012

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Okay, let's go through this systematically, category-by-category.

Vision: I love how you've used different font sizes to show the insulter's growing displeasure, and how the victim's voice in the end is "overpowered" by the other's anger.
Originality: I'm blown away by how well this is executed, especially with the font sizing! I've never seen anyone do anything like this before, and you pulled it off brilliantly!
Technique: Very well done here, and I like how you've done a traditional first-person perspective but put a spin on it.
Impact: This piece hits very close to the heart, and you can feel the emotion behind the victim's words, as his/her hope slowly drains away from the constant beating.
Overall: A very beautiful piece, and I hope to see more in this style in the future.
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
4 out of 4 deviants thought this was fair.

I love the concept behind this, even if it's depressing. It feels sort of linear, like the person you're writing about is going through life with all this stuff.

I like the concept of the text changing with every break is a good idea, but the last little text a bit difficult to read. Maybe at the beginning, start out more normal text and go incrementally from there. Show the breakdown, like at first it's not that bad and the 'I'm sorry' isn't that different in size from the insult. But I dunno, just a thought.

Otherwise I loved it, great job.
What do you think?
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4 out of 4 deviants thought this was fair.

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Superjusto Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2015
You are really mean.
StH4ever Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
I absolutely believe that no one should ever tell someone else to die or to kill themselves. First, that is never our place. God decides when to take people home. Second, how much to you have to hate someone to want them to leave the world? Instead of telling someone to die, why not try to be friendly to them, encourage them, and show Jesus to them?
WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Professional Writer
To each their own methods, if what you say works, go for it (^_^)/

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
DestinyWing Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Whenever I feel insulted that they want me to die, makes me want Karma to stab them back until they die...Literally. :evillaugh:
Makes me want to.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Most days I'd say you shouldn't, but somedays it's hard not to urge the person on and say "DO IT! WRECK THAT NOOB!"

Well, ahem, I really shouldn't encourage such things though haha x'D

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
493rs2 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
well since you asked it makes me fell like crap and makes me want to scream at them and beat them but in time i get over it

TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013   General Artist
I have felt the way the receiver of those harsh words felt. I try to end my life. It wasn't pretty, like the way I had thought I would gone. It was cruel and gruesome like I knew it was going to be. Death will never be pretty. Truthfully, just when I was about to end my 'horrible existence' like the bullies kept telling me to. The one person I did not expect, stopped me. He was one of the bullies. The worst of the bullies who terrorized me. I was home alone on the weekend. My parents had gone to town, after me saying I didn't feel well and I would stay home. They didn't inform someone was coming over to mow the lawn. The door was open, he walked in, saw me in the kitchen with the knife, and he stopped me. He apologized to me after I told him why. He hadn't realized how deep his words had cut me, how painful it was for me when I was shoved down or my books where knocked out of my hands. I had never seen a boy cry before, until that day. He changed the way he treated others. He became nicer to the other kids he bullied. That was 7 years ago. We still talk and go to lunch on occasions.
I am thankful to him for showing up that day. Thankful that he apologized. Because, without him, I would not be here today. I would not have met my fiancee. I wouldn't have a beautiful baby boy who just turned 6 1/2 months old. And he is thankful to me, for helping him realized that words have power and one should be careful how they are wielded.

Thank you for this poem. :)
StH4ever Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
Your story is inspiring. I hope you see how Jesus was involved and that he wants you to live.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Yer most welcome. I'm glad ye lived th' right way m'friend ^^

Share this around if ye like it :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
Me too. :) Is it okay to share it on my FB page? I was thinking of sharing it with some of my teachers from my old high school, Bullying is a big problem there, just as much as it is everywhere. I believe the whole world should see it.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Sure go ahead, I would be grateful for that kind of attention ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013   General Artist
Okay! I shared it of my FB page and My FB page that I manage. The page I manage doesn't get much attention yet. I'm still trying to get followers, can't promote the page though. I'm a poor white woman, lol. :D
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Professional Writer
S'okay, I be a poor Asian man. Let's be friends. What's yer facebook? xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   General Artist
Okay! lol

Cassandra Marie Ledbetter
Pikamon345 Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
;A; I can imagine this.
Nibbler117 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
How do you write a free verse poem? I need help with writing a free verse poem about giving.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Well, the best way to write free verse (in my opinion, since this is how I do it). Is to think about what you want to say and read it like a speech. Not a dull boring speech as if you're presenting something to your 3rd grade science class, but a lively one like a young community leader with lots of ideas. It sort of helps you get into the rhythm of the words and then you just need to separate the stanzas based on your pauses ^^

Um, use proper punctuation and I guess that's about it :3 There is no method of writing free-verse since its supposed to ^^;

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Nibbler117 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
Sorry to ask you this, but do you think you could write a poem about giving for me? I just can't find the right words...or ideas. I would really only like some ideas...
It would need to be finished before saturday, if you can write it.
I only need a few ideas really, and you are very good at writing free verse poems.
So please, if you can, write one for me.
Nibbler117 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
Oh, and by the way, this poem is great! Hilarious!
Loved it.
kittykatepryde Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
This is a sick+epic piece! Amazing!
Dragkor Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
I liked the way you changed the size of the words... The 'oppressor' with it's huge and powerful words, while the oppressed stays quiet, with it's voice each time smaller, powerless... keep on the good work ^^ (like you always did O.o)
PewterKat Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Professional General Artist
Hate to say this, but I can totally relate to your poem.

Nice job with the style, by the way. :)
iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist
Oof... I think its a nice piece and that a few people can relate to that... You really are amazing
authorofthings Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
this is amazingly written and it strikes the core. dang....
noorelven Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
Despite the great critique, I will say that you could have done better. Thats my 2 pence about the critique.

On the other hand .. nicely done. I am a visual kind of person and I loved this!
DayDreamer759 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I've been told to go and die before, also that nobody would care if I did. And it does hurt. So I said it to other people as well, because I know how much it affects them.
Great piece of writing :)
aozorastage Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student Writer
the shift in font size really highlights the feelings lining this piece. very interesting effect there :aww:

I think almost everyone can relate to your poem, in one way or another. it's really very meaningful :la:

also, fun fact: my chinese name is very very close to yours. XD
lulumorina Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful poem :)

To me insults are just about making the person insulting someone feel better, more superior then those they are putting down and I don't like it. I honestly insult people playfully (that may be hurtful to some extent) but right afterwards I tell them I'm either kidding or not to take it seriously because either way I love them and no matter what happens I will always love them. Additionally, I agree with you when you say most people don't deserve to be insulted but then again. Where in a nation where power means a lot and any amount of power people can get they will, with each form changing drastically.
ember53608 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
WOW. I think I'm going to be changing a few of my words from now on...
Kailani-e Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Wow. The impact is amazing. Great play on font size and look, it really empowered the words. Great job ^_^
LadyKatra Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Moodyhue Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I related to this poem a lot. Maybe not in the way intended. To me the words that are harsh being in bold, and getting bigger, as the other voice is getting smaller reminds me of how pressures (or just harshness) your family (or just those close) put on you can drive a person to feel very small.

As to what the poem is really about, it actually got me to sit back and think. I thought, wow, I can't believe we let this happen. It seems so small and yet.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Well you were right to relate to it in those ways, I included something that was family like, one that was personal and one that was a close relationship/friend.

It is really interesting how these individuals who are supposed to be close to you, can really hurt you.

It is very sad indeed :/

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconWordofChens:
Moodyhue Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It is. It can be rather disappointing and in no way excusable, but I think we all have a habit of sharing our best and worst in some form with those he hold dear. I like to think because those people are more willing to forgive/accept you depending on the situation, but that habit can get ugly depending on the person. Idk, close relationships can be wonderful, but confusing and make you wonder...
HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You did a good job with this, though it's mood is sad.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it my friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconWordofChens:
HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome, my friend. =D
datfandomgirl Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Perhaps I am, but at least I've achieved something with my life ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconWordofChens:
datfandomgirl Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Cool story bro, tell it again ^^
StrawberryShawty Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
i like this and i can understand it. I thought it was pretty cool the bold words are like the other person and its bold because it hurts a lot, the small words are us because those words make us feel small. wow simply amazing.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Yes, that is the way it was intended ^^ Thank you for enjoying it :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconWordofChens:
Aristia Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
This is an emotionally powerful piece.
Visually I found the fonts a bit confusing until I realized that each of the larger font phrases was representing a different speaker. Then it worked together quite well.
You've nailed the concept of how words destroy and how carelessly we often use them exceptionally well.
You are writing for those with the life experience or breadth of mind to understand. So I suspect some won't get it at all.
But having been both on the receiving end of such comments and carelessly been the giver of some to my shame, I think this is a remarkable piece of writing that evokes very strong feelings in those with the capability to have them.
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Well that is how poetry generally works, I tend to target mine toward a specific audience or towards those who are feeling a particular emotion. Always you'll see those who haven't gone through it or who feel apathetic about such problems making snide comments, but these are the individuals to be pitied for they know nothing of reality.

I am glad you enjoyed the concept, once you get it you really feel it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
LC85 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
To be perfectly honest, I was cringing the entire time. The idea of telling someone to end their life just because you dislike them or they do something you disagree with.....dude, NO (shakes head in disgust). That's just horrible. But you've completed your objective, the psychological impact is pretty extreme. I'm the bystander here and it's pretty powerful just hearing such a cruel notion being spoken, especially over stuff that's not worth fussing over.

And your use of size was effective, I'm more of a visual person and seeing the abuser's voice become overbearing and overwhelming while the other person's voice grew smaller and smaller....until in a sense it disappeared broke my heart :tears:.

Superb work, my friend. :clap::winner: & :peace:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for reading and enjoying it, yes I am glad that you got the message behind this. It is something we need to be aware of because it something said so carelessly. Even I myself wrestle when someone hurts me, because I feel as though I want them to die...but I always hold back because their own mistakes will be their undoing. It is from there that I really got started about going through this concept and I'm just glad you liked the final product.

Please come back again later tonight, releasing a song&lyrics piece for once ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
DaDemonicArtist Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i'm trying to figure out how to phrase this.

first verbally abusive stanza it seems that a peer or older sibling would say something akin to that

second verbally abusive stanza: parents

third: significant other

final: the abused themselves

to be blunt when i'm depressed and mildly suicidal hurtful words play over and over in my head. sometimes a person doesn't have to add the phrase "go die" to make a person think that's what the speaker wants.

while reading the poem i felt that i was wondering the mind of a person right before they were going to attempt suicide
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
yes you're correct about each stanza ^^ Those with this experience usually can connect the dots more easily than those without :3

Indeed they don't have to say the word 'go die' but I figured I'd use the general concept rather than the actual swear words or the actual cursing since that is more specific to each individual whether it be 'faggot', 'f*cker', 'b*tch' etc. The usual deal.

I hope that you'll stay strong though, because even in our worst moments there is hope. Living through it is the best way to prove them wrong ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
DaDemonicArtist Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. that means a lot coming from you.
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