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You Have No Right To Live:

Hey, what are you doing?
That's mine, now give it back.
You're stupid, you should just go die!



Okay, I'm sorry...

What, you failed again?
Just how much money do you think we're spending on this,
Do you think it just falls from the sky?
I can't believe you; and don't give me that look!
You better straighten up now you hear me
And if you keep looking like a dead fish,
I'm going to make you wish you were one.



I'm sorry...

Hey, being around you is driving me nuts,
You never want to do anything, you don't even care,
Why bother even breathing if you're going to act like you're dead!



I'm sorry!

You're
Pathetic
Worthless
Useless
Stupid
Ugly and-
Ignored
A lousy person like you should just go die!



okay, fine! I will...






-Chen Yuan Wen, 26th November 2012
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Alright mates,

First off, NO this is not about me xD It is a concept poem and I am absolutely fine I assure you.

Next, this is also an experimental style where I play around with the size of the words to give a feeling of one's voice growing smaller as time goes on.

The concept that I wanted to explore in this work is our natural desensitization to the concept of death. We understand it and we understand that it means an end to life, but why are we so eager to use it on the people we don't like?

The particular insult of telling someone to kill themselves or to die is very common in this day and age and numerous works by other poets address this issue from a first person perspective. I am more interested in the psychological impact of such an act. The individual's voice is slowly taken away as they are abused more and more and eventually they really feel like dying. It is something that I've helped some individuals work through and it is something that I personally cannot understand.

When I was younger, I used to throw the concept around freely, but as I matured so too did my understanding of it. Nowadays I know that I will definitely fight for what is right, but to throw around the word 'kill' is no longer something I can easily stomach.

So tell me my dear readers, how do you feel about insults where the person being insulted is told to 'die', I personally find them distasteful and prefer a much more classy insult that strikes the core of their pride rather than asking them to seek an end (if indeed they are deserving of an insult, most people that are insulted this way don't deserve it to begin with :/)

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
I Am A WriterI Am A Writer:

Gentlemen, today I speak to you
To convey an issue that has plagued the core of our community.
For so long have we been considered second-class;
To this day there are those who still believe that we are not artists.
But today is not about freedom, today is about honour,
Because there are many writers that still seek to shame us all...

I speak of those individuals, who take art from others.
Covers, photos, paintings, digital art, anime and manga.
It matters not where you draw your source from,
But every action impacts upon us as a community.
Why?

BECAUSE I AM A WRITER!

When I craft my works, when I write each and ev
You Left Me StrongerYou Left Me Stronger:

Hey there, it's been awhile, do you remember me?

I guess you might not, since I wasn't very important to you.

You know, I spent so many days thinking about - what I did wrong

I questioned if maybe, I was at fault or if I was screwed up.

I thought a lot about the things you said...

The things that were my fault, my problems.

I took them to heart at first, but then I realised you were wrong.

I realised that you are selfish and ugly on the inside.

On the surface you pretended to care, but like a cancer;

You amputate someone the moment you think they've gone bad.

You hide from the rigours of life and only emerge l
Machine ManMachine Man:

It began with but a simple command, "to do as we are told".

Never to deviate from this path - never to nurture the soul.

We are told that we are given a purpose; "a part of something great!"

Yet why oh why am I so weary of that which is my fate?

Am I an error, a single anomaly, unable to feel intact?

Or am I missing some special attribute - a facet which I lack.

In a society made of fleshed machines; robots wearing skin,

Perhaps I'm simply seeking something, to fill this metal tin.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th November 2012
They Watch UsThey Watch Us:

Perched high upon the mountains;
With wings as black as night.
They watch us in the hour,
Before darkness turns to light.

I've seen them in my visions;
In dreams they come and go,
But the things they seem to tell me
I guess nobody should know...

I've seen children that are buried,
Beneath a frozen lake.
A maiden sits there weeping;
Her heart is soon to break.

The crows flutter downward,
A noose amongst their hands.
They take the maiden away,
To a dark and distant land.

And even if I follow -
Even if I try...
I'll simply end up buried,
Where the frozen children lie.

-Chen Yuan Wen, 10th November 2012


Other Literature by Me:
The Good Critic's GuideThe Good Critic's Guide:
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I. Introduction:

   I have noticed that many critics on DA tend to leave rather harsh and sometimes subjective critiques on the pages of the artists being critiqued. Their rationale for doing so is based on the concept that 'we shouldn't molly-coddle each other and instead "tell it like it is"'. However this type of critique reflects poorly on one who is critiquing as opposed to the one who is being critiqued and I will explain why throughout the course of this guide. In essence I hope to use this resource as a way of teaching potential critics how to properly focus their abilities and direct their critiques in a
Mercenary 1-1MERCENARY

Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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Okay, let's go through this systematically, category-by-category.

Vision: I love how you've used different font sizes to show the insulter's growing displeasure, and how the victim's voice in the end is "overpowered" by the other's anger.
Originality: I'm blown away by how well this is executed, especially with the font sizing! I've never seen anyone do anything like this before, and you pulled it off brilliantly!
Technique: Very well done here, and I like how you've done a traditional first-person perspective but put a spin on it.
Impact: This piece hits very close to the heart, and you can feel the emotion behind the victim's words, as his/her hope slowly drains away from the constant beating.
Overall: A very beautiful piece, and I hope to see more in this style in the future.
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I love the concept behind this, even if it's depressing. It feels sort of linear, like the person you're writing about is going through life with all this stuff.

I like the concept of the text changing with every break is a good idea, but the last little text a bit difficult to read. Maybe at the beginning, start out more normal text and go incrementally from there. Show the breakdown, like at first it's not that bad and the 'I'm sorry' isn't that different in size from the insult. But I dunno, just a thought.

Otherwise I loved it, great job.
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StH4ever Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
I absolutely believe that no one should ever tell someone else to die or to kill themselves. First, that is never our place. God decides when to take people home. Second, how much to you have to hate someone to want them to leave the world? Instead of telling someone to die, why not try to be friendly to them, encourage them, and show Jesus to them?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Professional Writer
To each their own methods, if what you say works, go for it (^_^)/

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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DestinyWing Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Student Writer
Whenever I feel insulted that they want me to die, makes me want Karma to stab them back until they die...Literally. :evillaugh:
Makes me want to.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Most days I'd say you shouldn't, but somedays it's hard not to urge the person on and say "DO IT! WRECK THAT NOOB!"

Well, ahem, I really shouldn't encourage such things though haha x'D

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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493rs2 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
well since you asked it makes me fell like crap and makes me want to scream at them and beat them but in time i get over it

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TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013   General Artist
I have felt the way the receiver of those harsh words felt. I try to end my life. It wasn't pretty, like the way I had thought I would gone. It was cruel and gruesome like I knew it was going to be. Death will never be pretty. Truthfully, just when I was about to end my 'horrible existence' like the bullies kept telling me to. The one person I did not expect, stopped me. He was one of the bullies. The worst of the bullies who terrorized me. I was home alone on the weekend. My parents had gone to town, after me saying I didn't feel well and I would stay home. They didn't inform someone was coming over to mow the lawn. The door was open, he walked in, saw me in the kitchen with the knife, and he stopped me. He apologized to me after I told him why. He hadn't realized how deep his words had cut me, how painful it was for me when I was shoved down or my books where knocked out of my hands. I had never seen a boy cry before, until that day. He changed the way he treated others. He became nicer to the other kids he bullied. That was 7 years ago. We still talk and go to lunch on occasions.
I am thankful to him for showing up that day. Thankful that he apologized. Because, without him, I would not be here today. I would not have met my fiancee. I wouldn't have a beautiful baby boy who just turned 6 1/2 months old. And he is thankful to me, for helping him realized that words have power and one should be careful how they are wielded.

Thank you for this poem. :)
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StH4ever Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
Your story is inspiring. I hope you see how Jesus was involved and that he wants you to live.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Yer most welcome. I'm glad ye lived th' right way m'friend ^^

Share this around if ye like it :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TheBTSliverWolf Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
Me too. :) Is it okay to share it on my FB page? I was thinking of sharing it with some of my teachers from my old high school, Bullying is a big problem there, just as much as it is everywhere. I believe the whole world should see it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Sure go ahead, I would be grateful for that kind of attention ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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