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Yeah I'm Stupid!:

Indeed you are absolutely superior. A divine being, more intelligent,
Learned and completely right in everything you say about me.
However, if I might be permitted to — as they say in slang —
"Drop the beat", then I'd like to show you my own style of doing things.
Art thou ready for this my sibling from a different parent?


Sir can I have just a moment of your time? I think I lost
My will, let me sit and bust a rhyme — rappin' like I'm
Edgar Allan singin' Raven songs, thank god I have a
life and love that keeps me really strong. See I
Understand the fact that you may not like the things I do,
Structure in your brain is wrapped tight like a metal screw.
But this is what you do when you are young —
I'm breaking all the rules until I finally get sung!

So pass it on over if you're done with the whiny mic,
I'd like to show the world a new style — it's the Chen life;
So everyone go 'Chen boo', this all the 'Chen boo',
I'm droppin' each and every verse to the tune of 'Chen boo'!

Now everybody stop and try get into my rhymin' style,
My rhythm might be crazy but at least I make the kiddies smile;
My rhymes are soundin' forced but that is me...
I don't know how you read it but sounds good to me?

So bappo-bow'wah-booie do you hate me cause I work with sound?
Rhymes with each and every line, I run your brain into the ground;
Let me show you 'Chen boo', this is just my 'Chen boo'
I bet you always hate it when I rhyme with my 'Chen boo'!

A moon and candle song...
(Oh it's a taste of real that we were meant to feel.)
A moon and candle song...
(Oh it's a lonely dream of everything I've seen.)
The moon hears my song...
And lights the way before me baby—
Oh baby, speak to me, yeah, yeah, yeah...


I'm sorry but that's all I've got for you right now,
And since we've gotten that out of the way...
I think I'd rather remain stupid. Especially if it means
That I am able to continue entertaining all these lovely people.
Yes, my work is absolutely flawed, filled with holes like Swiss cheese,
Possibly more worthless than the dirt beneath your golden boot heel;
But at least it still tastes good with a spot of wine.
Good day to you sir!

-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th October 2012
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If you'd like to hear me read poems and do a little comedy live then then check out episode 3 of my live show here: [link]

Author's Comment:

Okay soooo I wasn't actually going to do anything today. Instead I was just studying and feeling frustrated about my literature in general. The reason for this is that...I've been searching for an urban style (i.e. rap) that doesn't involve swearing and talking about money, sex and drugs =__=. When I got into Korean rap I realised that it was excessively clean most of the time and the style is really good...but it can generally only be done with Korean/Asian languages because two words can sound the same but depending on the context and adjoining words...have a totally different meaning.

So as I listened to BIG BANG (specifically the song BAD BOY here: [link]) I found that I was really digging the sound of G-Dragon and T.O.P. Why? G-D has a smooth rap style that is good for long-drawn out sections, while T.O.P. has a deep/lazy sort of rapping style that can carry a lot of impact.

Randomly, I started to work with it and this was the eventual result (I mixed G-D's style with T.O.P. for chorus and a short sung bit in the style of the original song, I think it was sung by Seungri). It may not make much sense, but then again it's not really designed to. In essence this is like a practice run of a completely new style trying to put together sentences in a specialised 'Chen Style' structure that combined with formatting allows for more effective transitions between verses.

Now I was originally just making this for fun, but after running it by my co-cappy we decided..meh we'll let the rest of DA see it and see what they think xD. So enjoy my utterly random nonsensical rap experiment :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Waking Nightmares Waking Nightmares:

It begins in the same way, every single night
Fire spreading from an altar in the darkness—
As all living beings are slowly consumed,
The coruscating flames appear wet with blood…

The scene then changes to a flooded hallway
Live wires dangling just above the water,
Like venomous serpents slithering in the darkness—
A single pounce would end my life…

Eventually the hallway ends with a door,
One that reminds me of forgotten yore—
And my thoughts shall be in rhyme at this point
As though lips and tongue are eternally joint…

What maddened schemes have they in mind?
It is not a questio
This is for the Reader This is for the Reader:

With the soft touch of his fingers
The piano begins to play, a heart untouched for so long
Bares its secret melody...


When I first started out I couldn't avoid just bein' cold
My life revolved the things that I was always told—
I never knew the warmth of standing up to take a bow
It was not a joy that I would ever-ever be allowed
Through all the days I feared that everything would disappear
You held me up and held me close like I was something dear
I never knew I had a part of me that you would like
I guess that's what you feel when you can't even see the light…


So this is the only way, that

Frantically he scrambles away from the dark
Eager to be free of his waking nightmare
Acting only upon the instinct within him;
Reminded constantly that he is prey

For some time he hides in the pervasive shadows—
Earnestly praying that he will not be discovered
A single sound is all it takes to jar him;
Running from a creature that he can barely see

From head to toe it is certainly monstrous
Enshrouded in an aura of absolute repugnance
As the acid drips from its cruel jaws,
Rapidly dissolving the ground below

Fearful, he cowers, beneath boxes and cardboard,
Escaping away into a tiny corner of his mind
Alone with only
She's Not Your Toy She's Not Your Toy:

Mmm, it's okay sweetie
Just stay quiet
It'll all be over soon...

Creaking springs and quiet eyes
Cold without emotion
The smell of fear is mixed with sweat
Breath like a churning ocean

The waves and tide will push and pull
as water fills the cave
The heart longs to stop itself
when there is nothing left to save

Happy birthday to you
Happy birthday to you
Happy birthday dear Jenna
Happy birthday to you...

A shock of pain brings her back to the present
The muscular form above her contracting in the dark
She remembers now that her limbs are pinned
but she would not move them anyway...

Happy birthday sweeth

Other Literature by Me:
Mercenary 1-1 MERCENARY

Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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The technique is good, but it changes slightly as you near the end, going from a more proper speech to slang . Also, reading it aloud, the rhythm changed a bit as well, and I am sorry if this was your intended effect, but it did not work well with the firmer beginning of the piece. Again, this is your vision, so perhaps I just did not hear it the same. Spare that, I thought the piece was quite brilliant. The rhymes were good and the beginning held to a satirical stance against the idea you were ignorant... All in all very good piece.
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I rather enjoyed reading this piece. Every time going through, I would hear myself rapping to the rhythm of the words. But there are several occasions where I do need to go back and reread a line to keep the beat. And especially, unless this was your own specific choice, the flow of the poem (rap) was broken during the sixth stanza "A moon and candle song...".

I would hear it much better through sound and through your own personal voice, allowing you to give the emotion behind the piece.

But I especially liked the point of emotions raging around, and the fact that it's easy to feel them, even if they aren't powerful or very angry. It's in quite a polite tone, mocking even, but most definate would be the rebellious edge to the piece.

The repitition of "Chen boo" adds a strong character, and I feel as though you're trying to make this "superior existence" feel intimidated with a chant.

This honestly sounds like a rap, coming straight from you (or your character) and freestyling the entire piece on stage, involving the crowd and everything. I know you have said that this is a rap, combined of two artists, but I'm reading it as a poem; I'm not listening to it.

There is an excellent use of idioms and similes, allowing for a great poem, but perhaps too much for a rap. I know that most people don't speak as such when casually talking. But then again, I don't know about raps either. But the use of so many expressions, especially so many that are uncommon, makes the rap seem a little bit unrealistic. I'm not saying that there is no one who wouldn't just say these things, but maybe not out of their heads.

All in all, I'd say that this piece is a wonderful one. Not too much to improve on, if any at all. The sixth stanza seems to be not a big issue, especially if purposefully done, and the overuse of expressions are so slight that it wouldn't matter either way. Great character and show of voice. It's something to be kept and something to be proud of!
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Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Hmm, if you are still looking for clean rappers, I quite like the one who raps for the band, Linkin Park. He raps in English (sorry, forgot his name) and his raps are usually pretty meaningful. He hasn't sworn in any of his raps, (not that I know of) and I just really like him. Hope this helps a little...
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
M Shinoda is alright, but I think that his meaningful raps are mostly in tandem with linkin park which doesn't suit an overall rap vibe. His fort minor stuff does have swearing a lot xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Ah, I didn't know that, thanks. Sorry about the faulty referral. ^^;
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Nah its cool :3 I'm happy you tried to help out, it means a lot to me :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome. By the way, your writing is really awesome, the first poem I read by you just blew me away and earned an instant watch and fave. I could die happy if I could write as well as you. *aspiring writer* ^^;
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, i'm aspiring too, I ain't been around long. One day I hope to be able to start a company to get people noticed. Let's keep walking this path ^^

Thank you for watching me, you should check out my new event 'In Blaq!'

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Okay, I think I will. If you ever start your company, can I join?
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Certainly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MasterTofu96 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Student General Artist
this is pretty good, I felt myself rapping to it in my head and I liked the rhythm of the poem. :D
SplitNinja Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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