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Yeah I'm Stupid!:

Indeed you are absolutely superior. A divine being, more intelligent,
Learned and completely right in everything you say about me.
However, if I might be permitted to — as they say in slang —
"Drop the beat", then I'd like to show you my own style of doing things.
Art thou ready for this my sibling from a different parent?


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Sir can I have just a moment of your time? I think I lost
My will, let me sit and bust a rhyme — rappin' like I'm
Edgar Allan singin' Raven songs, thank god I have a
life and love that keeps me really strong. See I
Understand the fact that you may not like the things I do,
Structure in your brain is wrapped tight like a metal screw.
But this is what you do when you are young —
I'm breaking all the rules until I finally get sung!

Yeah...
So pass it on over if you're done with the whiny mic,
I'd like to show the world a new style — it's the Chen life;
So everyone go 'Chen boo', this all the 'Chen boo',
I'm droppin' each and every verse to the tune of 'Chen boo'!


Now everybody stop and try get into my rhymin' style,
My rhythm might be crazy but at least I make the kiddies smile;
My rhymes are soundin' forced but that is me...
I don't know how you read it but sounds good to me?

Yeah...
So bappo-bow'wah-booie do you hate me cause I work with sound?
Rhymes with each and every line, I run your brain into the ground;
Let me show you 'Chen boo', this is just my 'Chen boo'
I bet you always hate it when I rhyme with my 'Chen boo'!


A moon and candle song...
(Oh it's a taste of real that we were meant to feel.)
A moon and candle song...
(Oh it's a lonely dream of everything I've seen.)
The moon hears my song...
And lights the way before me baby—
Oh baby, speak to me, yeah, yeah, yeah...


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I'm sorry but that's all I've got for you right now,
And since we've gotten that out of the way...
I think I'd rather remain stupid. Especially if it means
That I am able to continue entertaining all these lovely people.
Yes, my work is absolutely flawed, filled with holes like Swiss cheese,
Possibly more worthless than the dirt beneath your golden boot heel;
But at least it still tastes good with a spot of wine.
Good day to you sir!


-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th October 2012
If you enjoyed this piece, please take a moment to fave it ^^

If you'd like to hear me read poems and do a little comedy live then then check out episode 3 of my live show here: [link]

Author's Comment:

Okay soooo I wasn't actually going to do anything today. Instead I was just studying and feeling frustrated about my literature in general. The reason for this is that...I've been searching for an urban style (i.e. rap) that doesn't involve swearing and talking about money, sex and drugs =__=. When I got into Korean rap I realised that it was excessively clean most of the time and the style is really good...but it can generally only be done with Korean/Asian languages because two words can sound the same but depending on the context and adjoining words...have a totally different meaning.

So as I listened to BIG BANG (specifically the song BAD BOY here: [link]) I found that I was really digging the sound of G-Dragon and T.O.P. Why? G-D has a smooth rap style that is good for long-drawn out sections, while T.O.P. has a deep/lazy sort of rapping style that can carry a lot of impact.

Randomly, I started to work with it and this was the eventual result (I mixed G-D's style with T.O.P. for chorus and a short sung bit in the style of the original song, I think it was sung by Seungri). It may not make much sense, but then again it's not really designed to. In essence this is like a practice run of a completely new style trying to put together sentences in a specialised 'Chen Style' structure that combined with formatting allows for more effective transitions between verses.

Now I was originally just making this for fun, but after running it by my co-cappy we decided..meh we'll let the rest of DA see it and see what they think xD. So enjoy my utterly random nonsensical rap experiment :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Waking Nightmares Waking Nightmares:

It begins in the same way, every single night
Fire spreading from an altar in the darkness—
As all living beings are slowly consumed,
The coruscating flames appear wet with blood…

The scene then changes to a flooded hallway
Live wires dangling just above the water,
Like venomous serpents slithering in the darkness—
A single pounce would end my life…

Eventually the hallway ends with a door,
One that reminds me of forgotten yore—
And my thoughts shall be in rhyme at this point
As though lips and tongue are eternally joint…

What maddened schemes have they in mind?
It is not a questio
This is for the Reader This is for the Reader:

With the soft touch of his fingers
The piano begins to play, a heart untouched for so long
Bares its secret melody...

-

When I first started out I couldn't avoid just bein' cold
My life revolved the things that I was always told—
I never knew the warmth of standing up to take a bow
It was not a joy that I would ever-ever be allowed
Through all the days I feared that everything would disappear
You held me up and held me close like I was something dear
I never knew I had a part of me that you would like
I guess that's what you feel when you can't even see the light…

-

So this is the only way, that
FEAR FEAR:

Frantically he scrambles away from the dark
Eager to be free of his waking nightmare
Acting only upon the instinct within him;
Reminded constantly that he is prey

For some time he hides in the pervasive shadows—
Earnestly praying that he will not be discovered
A single sound is all it takes to jar him;
Running from a creature that he can barely see

From head to toe it is certainly monstrous
Enshrouded in an aura of absolute repugnance
As the acid drips from its cruel jaws,
Rapidly dissolving the ground below

Fearful, he cowers, beneath boxes and cardboard,
Escaping away into a tiny corner of his mind
Alone with only
She's Not Your Toy She's Not Your Toy:

Mmm, it's okay sweetie
Just stay quiet
It'll all be over soon...

Creaking springs and quiet eyes
Cold without emotion
The smell of fear is mixed with sweat
Breath like a churning ocean

The waves and tide will push and pull
as water fills the cave
The heart longs to stop itself
when there is nothing left to save

Happy birthday to you
Happy birthday to you
Happy birthday dear Jenna
Happy birthday to you...

A shock of pain brings her back to the present
The muscular form above her contracting in the dark
She remembers now that her limbs are pinned
but she would not move them anyway...

Happy birthday sweeth


Other Literature by Me:
Mercenary 1-1 MERCENARY

Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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The technique is good, but it changes slightly as you near the end, going from a more proper speech to slang . Also, reading it aloud, the rhythm changed a bit as well, and I am sorry if this was your intended effect, but it did not work well with the firmer beginning of the piece. Again, this is your vision, so perhaps I just did not hear it the same. Spare that, I thought the piece was quite brilliant. The rhymes were good and the beginning held to a satirical stance against the idea you were ignorant... All in all very good piece.
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I rather enjoyed reading this piece. Every time going through, I would hear myself rapping to the rhythm of the words. But there are several occasions where I do need to go back and reread a line to keep the beat. And especially, unless this was your own specific choice, the flow of the poem (rap) was broken during the sixth stanza "A moon and candle song...".

I would hear it much better through sound and through your own personal voice, allowing you to give the emotion behind the piece.

But I especially liked the point of emotions raging around, and the fact that it's easy to feel them, even if they aren't powerful or very angry. It's in quite a polite tone, mocking even, but most definate would be the rebellious edge to the piece.

The repitition of "Chen boo" adds a strong character, and I feel as though you're trying to make this "superior existence" feel intimidated with a chant.

This honestly sounds like a rap, coming straight from you (or your character) and freestyling the entire piece on stage, involving the crowd and everything. I know you have said that this is a rap, combined of two artists, but I'm reading it as a poem; I'm not listening to it.

There is an excellent use of idioms and similes, allowing for a great poem, but perhaps too much for a rap. I know that most people don't speak as such when casually talking. But then again, I don't know about raps either. But the use of so many expressions, especially so many that are uncommon, makes the rap seem a little bit unrealistic. I'm not saying that there is no one who wouldn't just say these things, but maybe not out of their heads.

All in all, I'd say that this piece is a wonderful one. Not too much to improve on, if any at all. The sixth stanza seems to be not a big issue, especially if purposefully done, and the overuse of expressions are so slight that it wouldn't matter either way. Great character and show of voice. It's something to be kept and something to be proud of!
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Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Hmm, if you are still looking for clean rappers, I quite like the one who raps for the band, Linkin Park. He raps in English (sorry, forgot his name) and his raps are usually pretty meaningful. He hasn't sworn in any of his raps, (not that I know of) and I just really like him. Hope this helps a little...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
M Shinoda is alright, but I think that his meaningful raps are mostly in tandem with linkin park which doesn't suit an overall rap vibe. His fort minor stuff does have swearing a lot xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Ah, I didn't know that, thanks. Sorry about the faulty referral. ^^;
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Nah its cool :3 I'm happy you tried to help out, it means a lot to me :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome. By the way, your writing is really awesome, the first poem I read by you just blew me away and earned an instant watch and fave. I could die happy if I could write as well as you. *aspiring writer* ^^;
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, i'm aspiring too, I ain't been around long. One day I hope to be able to start a company to get people noticed. Let's keep walking this path ^^

Thank you for watching me, you should check out my new event 'In Blaq!'

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Mangaotakuchan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Okay, I think I will. If you ever start your company, can I join?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Certainly ^^

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MasterTofu96 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this is pretty good, I felt myself rapping to it in my head and I liked the rhythm of the poem. :D
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Interesting.
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Outlawbyname Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student General Artist
This is simply amazing. I myself have a bad habit of setting my poems to music in my head, then getting frustrated when I can't get the rhythm down on paper. I've never quite tried rap though, I've always been more of a Rock fan (oldies and alt).
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
I will (over summer break) try to work with a technique that can transcribe music into words. Rap was the easiest to start with. I'm also working on developing other poetic techniques for the modern poet. Recently, Shot-Glass Poetry seems to be working. I've got a few more pieces in that style and once its finalised I'll try to create new techniques

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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chickanessness943215 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Artist
cool
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musketeer-traveler Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist
XD awesome. Did you make a video doing this out loud?
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Bringin-Crazy-Back Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Am I the only one who read this with Dan Bull's voice in my head...? -.-
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Possibly xD. I wrote it based on G-D and Top xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Bringin-Crazy-Back Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well, I accepted the fact that I'm not normal long ago. xD Good work, though.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
lol i ain't normal either, for one thing I try to rap poetry wh00 xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Emanoni Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student General Artist
deserves a DD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
If you want to suggest it for a DD I don't mind, but I recommend some of my other works like Waking Nightmares or 'FEAR'. This one was just a bit of practice with a new experimental technique xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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inkdweller Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice piece, absolutely fun to read and I can't wait to see more writing like this in the future. :D And I must agree with you on Big Bang, they're my favorite Kpop band for the very same reason. Also, for Korean rap I would like to suggest Tablo, from Epik High, they're pretty cool too. ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, actually I'm really into Leessang's music style. I was introduced to it by running man and all I can say is...Romantic Rap FTW! That is what a cool guy should be like T^T

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Definitely made me laugh and giggle a bit :D ;). It's cool because it's got that natural flow, but yet still retains poetic elegance without going too far. The last lines of the 3rd and 5th stanzas are slightly too long? It may sound better shorter? But I definitely enjoyed this piece :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Hehe, thank you for enjoying, they were longer because usually when you rap the last line, you draw it out for longer, that way the listener gets the feeling of transition ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, then never mind LD XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
No no, it's alright, this is just the first step of this technique. The more I practice the easier it will be, then one day the readers will be able to read it and yet they will keep the beat. That's my goal...writing you can listen to...technically speaking xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I totally support it. There are way too many crap songs out there with overused lyrics. Not directly implying that it must be a song, but it's definitely a step. Plus getting a small taste of 'synesthesia' doesn't hurt at all. XD
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loreshaper-kethal Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
Well well, I have noticed this effect as well when it comes to rap music: A culture or style with a basis of abhorrent and/or profane topics is not much of a culture or style at all.

This is the Rhythm I heard when reading this-> [link]

Although I figure yours would sound much better.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, that's one heck of an interpretation mate. naaah that beat wouldn't even fit this stuff, but it is a decent beat to rap too :3 Who knows what I'll come up with if I get the chance ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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loreshaper-kethal Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
I can see that! :D
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ApocalypticAya Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm falling in LOVE with your stuff <3. This ... just blew me away ^^. Nicely done :3.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
haha, it ain't polished yet. Once I start to practice this technique I'll improve even more. Till then, keep reading and faving, I'll be counting on you :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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matchStick-ER Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, I give you credit for trying. For try one: that's not bad. I don't hold you accountable for randomness, lots of poems/raps start out that way. (I learned from my random poetry class).
I'm curiouser to see what this turns into!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Well the next step would be to focus on having a decent core theme and using the urban style to surround that. That will be the difficult part ^^. However, at least I have a base to work with for urban poems which previously didn't exist since it's hard to properly convey the beat in poetry ^^;

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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matchStick-ER Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have confidence you can do it in time. Just go with the flow!
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Musango Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
Loved reading this! :) great job!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, it's just an experiment for now. As I polish the style it'll be even better ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Musango Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
Looking forward to it :)
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ZerbaPaint Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student General Artist
I have to agree. I always hated rap and thought it was nothing but sex drugs and money, but Asian rap is actually tolerable. I'm not exactly a fan, but I like it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, Leessang usually has very warm romantic raps xD. I like them ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AlBiNoTiGeR117 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ha next you should do a free verse rap piece
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I probably will ^^ However, I still need to polish this technique before it's ready for real releases. Still I'm proud of what it's done so far ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AlBiNoTiGeR117 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That piece is very good
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
But definitely not perfect, and I shall polish till it shines ahahahaha :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AlBiNoTiGeR117 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol :)
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