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Without the Individual

Can you imagine a world, directed by a single mind?
A collective conscious, a living hive.
Each time we are born, we receive a part of it
And when we return, we share in the pool.

There would be no fear of death;
No fear of the unknown…
For a thousand souls would bolster our hearts.
We could live—truly LIVE—to the fullest extent of our capabilities.

And when we succeed?

That success returns to the hive…
That success can be shared across the next generation.
We would become an ever-evolving organism.
One with a thousand faces, but a single driving purpose.

Can you even imagine how that would feel?

But…I suppose that you can’t.

For you, as with all humans, share in a single flaw:


The nature of the individual, the ego of the singular man.
Existing in a void of his own thoughts—he has no point of reference.
He is alone, even if surrounded by other humans,
For he shall never share in their minds…

And that my friends—nothing else but that—is what leaves us an imperfect species.
Co-captain is posting it up for me. This is a piece that I wrote after considering how many sci-fi novels deal with an alien bug type species that exhibits the characteristics of an insect colony on our own planet. They are always driven by a single collective hive mind and I have honestly grown to admire that.

We fight amongst ourselves over ideals and resources when instead, a collective conscious would align us all and direct us to something greater beyond that. True, we would become the new scourge of the galaxy—seeing as we would then move from planet to planet consuming all life and multiplying endlessly…but my god, it would be incredible to be a part of all that. A life without fear or worry, even the pain of death would be transient. You would spawn again in flesh anew to terrorize your foes who would be screaming for mercy…

Oops, let my inner sadist out again x’D

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I like this very much :heart: creepy...
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That is so deep, man. I really like it!
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EeeRix Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013
You took the words right out of my mouth.
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my apologies lol
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EeeRix Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
XD
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OguzhanSelcuk Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Great poem, but,

"That success returns to the hive…
That success can be shared across the next generation.
We would become an ever-evolving organism.
One with a thousand faces, but a single driving purpose."

That's how science and philosophy and technology have always evolved, individuals standing on the shoulders of giants to reach ever higher. That's how humanity came to dominate nature, by people passing their accomplishments on to the next generation.
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GilPires Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
Thumbs UP!
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ogiGamedev Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
I never thought of it that way.  A setting I was/am designing begins a lot like that, I just never thought too deeply about how it would effect the first inhabitants.  Your perspective is a lot nicer than I probably would have come up with.
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Hazyl Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What a brilliant poem.    :)  
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thisismyringtone Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
Instantly, the words hive and alien bug type species and colony made me think of ender's game. great book :iconfabulousplz:
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gothfaeriie Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
You sound like a Templar.
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MLBlue Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Huh, I imagine that you would love to be assimilated into the Borg, they are always looking for a few good drones...
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RageDmg Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
I imagine it like the cyberbrain sharing in "Ghost in the Shell" in wich the terrorist Hideo Kuze shared his thoughts and ideals with the refugees. Or the idea of your brain being able to connect to the net and have total access to all the information available to human kind. That would be amazing in my opinion. The idea of all of human kinds knoledge and expieriences being shared with everyone is absolutely minblowing. I mean, just imagine the things we could achieve. And yet I also agree with you that the individual nature of humans will be the main thing that will hinder the birth of this unbelivably awesome creation. 
Another great work of your never the less, my friend. Your works feel so close to me. I mean that they alwas touch certain topics I freaquently specullate about in my mind. I hope you continue to delight me with such betiful thoughts. 
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Lilithay Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
I'm familiar with the concept of the hive mind; like you said, it's exploited often and well in the science fiction world I love. However, the concept of a humanity backed by a hive consciousness is both disturbing and incredibly unappealing.

You say try to imagine it? I will. I can imagine it easily. Yes, we would run as a single collective mind, and in that unity there would be a strength. No dispute, no war, perfectly efficient execution of every unanimous goal. But that strength would be completely overwhelmed by a stack of crippling weaknesses.

No free thinking, no ability for abstract problem solving, a void of any opposing opinions to improve and compare ideas. You also seem to forget that a hive mind, in its likeness to the insect colonies in real life, have no sense of 'thought'; everything they do is essentially programming, run by a single 'motherboard' queen that directs every action through chemical impulses and signals. You'd see a world with no art, no music, no comedy, no laughter, no concept of a soul. Our greatest strength comes in our variance, our plethora of different talents, skills, thoughts, and goals that collectively build a strong and progressive society. Yes, our differences cause dispute and chaos at times, and lead to our own destruction in many cases, but great changes only ever come with great upheaval and some of our greatest triumphs have come forth from our tribulations.

There's a reason insects are the only real creatures who maintain a hive existence, and that humans, who are the most diverse and varied animals in the world among their own species, have taken over the planet.

I'm imagining your world; it's weak, and would mean our downfall.
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MophisTea Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*mindblown* I like this!
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Lilithay Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Oh, well thank you. :)
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Gooley527 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Despite letting out your inner sadist, seems like you've set your sights on achieving mass nirvana. 
Favorited.
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dagoth-jeff Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, it's called socialism/communism/liberalism. I'm living that under Obama right now.
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apbaron Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Someone once said that "if everyone thinks the same, then no one is thinking."
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HerLittleDoll Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Considering that a majority of human beings are idiots, I suppose your collective human mind would also be painfully unintelligent, prone to believing lies and shunning progress?

Perfection is relative to perspective- and imperfection is a treasure to cherish!
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railrevo333 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Do you not feel the wonders of the flesh?

 

Do you not yearn to be free of the tyranny of the individual?

 

Our unity is full of wonder, which your tiny individualism cannot even conceive.

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Randicore Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Yet the difference of the individual is what allows us to progress, if everyone shared a single mind, none would believe that the world was not flat, none would wish to discover or explore. But if they all had the urge to learn, to discover, to explore, to collect, then it would be a true land of understanding.
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shinyeevee10 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So you've read Enders Game recently, havent you? :)

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wdnest Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Interesting concept.
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SightlessChaineDrake Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I honestly hate it when people do this, but...


I kind of wrote a 3,000-word poem-concept album-thing based on the idea of losing the sense of self in order to attain true happiness. Without sci-fi themes, though. Feel free to read if you find some free time, I know you're busy with education.
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can imagine it. BORING! :P
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Renewalazar Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Well done on this! really gets me thinking!
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GrimSlime Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Raaagh amazing poem. And I've never actually known what the "hive mind" was until now. I mean I've heard of it, just never knew what it was. This is frikin awesome, I love your writings so so much. :3
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cool-anon0 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
While this very deep and holds many layers of truth, I'd hate a world where everyone was under one mind. I still remember a book I read where there was a world like that... A Wrinkle In Time? Yeah... But maybe you mean something else and I'm missing it. I probably am.
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Hoten5 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this would be nice or it would be like absolute torture. what if you wanted to abandon your race and help out another race that your race was trying to annihilate? you would be kinda trapped. you would probably do more harm than good as well if you even tried to help the other race.
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Vivacia18 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Lovely poem:meow: I've always found the hive mind thing interesting too, although my experience of it is more magical than sci-fi (eg illithids).
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vamp666raven Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
what if there are people in my head?
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MandaCait Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student General Artist
That's an awesome poem, but honestly, an hive-like life would be awful. Just like immortality or omnipotence, this will just bring upon apathy. And you wouldn't even be able to enjoy the agonizing screams and pleads for mercy from your foes... Though we seems to be proceding at an awfully slow pace, I'm of the idea that only the individuality and dualism conflicts can bring us to evolve. The whole existence of life is nothing more than a constant trial to achieve perfection in its true form. And it needs all the possible obstacles, so that in the end, someone (or something) will be able to overcome all of them.
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apbaron Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Immortality = apathy? That is lack of imagination. If we had a glorious body, a perfect match for immortality, not this mortal, imperfect, decadent body suited for mortality; then the possibilities would be far superior than the ones we know. The wonderful mind or spirit of the Jews has introduced us to the concept of angels, spiritual beings that can materialize as humans and probably other beings. It is also written that some humans after dying will become like angels so the potential qualities of a different nature will increase considerably, we will experience a more excellent way of being and able to do much more.
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MandaCait Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Yeah, but still, as a human, we have to think by human standards. Achieving immortality wouldn't be such a great thing: it's something funny to wish upon, but try to think: knowing you have all the eternity to do things, you'll lack the motivation that having a limited time will give you, then, the time perception gets faster with age. If everyone was immortal, it would be a thing -and probably, to compensate the lack of deaths, nature will make so that immortals can't reproduce-, but otherwise, everything else will start to flow through you passing unnoticed and things once important would become a mere illusion of what they were. And last but not least, there's the memories to take into account: there's a limit of what a human brain can record, leaving a thousand years already would be like changing one own phone number everyday for a month and having to remember them all by heart and even if we were to overcome this, then you'll still have to remember EVERYTHING, even the things you wish to forget, so to not to lose your mind, the matter shift from not forgetting to the decision if emotions are useful or just an hyndrance and knowing that you'll live forever and see a lot of things, the better choice would probably be to just "record" without being emotionally attached to anything... Or to become a monster, but still, after a couple of millennia, it would get boring, thus apathy come forth.
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apbaron Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
What you have written is true. The human design, earth, the universe... is not meant for immortality. The material design is perfect for temporary existence, for a limited time.
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Wonderful poem!:la:
You have pointed out a very important message!:clap:
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