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Whispers of the Mad:

Your lips remain painted with the scars of torment
Carved so as to split with every word of speech
The glass that slices through your softened flesh
Bears the marking we know as 'Vinashuka'

And now he lies beneath the falling sand
Drowning in a world that is sinking away
Though his feet will seek the stability of ground
He finds himself caught by 'Vinashuka'

A disturbing word that rings hollow at best
For it carries the tone of a tainted solitude
A heart that has been corrupted by physical pain
Can only scream 'Vinashuka!'

How does a man know when he has gone insane?
To descend into a world where logic is naught
A moon that carries the colour of blood
Shall paint my skin with 'Vinashuka'

I have lost all sense of meaning in this place
There is no where else for my soul to flee
Caught within the whispers of delusory madness
I can only repeat Vinashuka...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 13th July 2012
Fave it if you enjoyed it ^^:

Author's Comment:

This is the second piece for RANDOM WEEK.

Since no two pieces can have the same theme, I decided that humor was done yesterday and therefore the opposite of that would be something deliciously morbid. So I went with a rewrite of one of my older works 'Vinashuka'

The word itself was just something I thought up (though apparently it does have a meaning in...Swahilli i think? Oh well)

Enjoy the darkness!

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
A Parody of Romance - [link]
In Service to Morgana - [link]
She Waits For Me - [link]
Barely Breathing - [link]

Other Prose by Me:
Sanguine Chapter 1 - Release 4 - [link]
Pirate: The Legend of Chenbeard, Chapter 1 - Release 1 - [link]
Mercenary Chapter 1 - Release 1 - [link]
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TiaVon Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your work has been featured here. :heart:
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1evabell Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
what does Vinashuka mean
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Just a made up word ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Great Job.
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deathdog394 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very good:-)
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It means 'falling'.
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H-A-Cooke Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You may want to find out what that meaning is. In case you've used it in the wrong context. That could change the whole meaning of your poem.
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OpheliaRosenblut Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It has a really nice melody.
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Felixuta Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very beautifully written :aww:
I have enjoyed it a lot :)
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Argentum-Lupae-Luna Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent, love. You satisfied my love for insanity, blood, and dark themes in general.
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KyoshiSukina Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful poem. It instantly joined My Favorites.


On google translate in Swahili it means "Falling" :iconfeathersplz:
When google translate detects the language to be Swedish, it apparently means "whiz crouch" :iconlaughlaughplz:
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HiddenBehindShadows Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The Swahili meaning of 'Vinashuka' is 'falling' or 'descending'- but more so 'falling'. It seems fitting to the poem, which, by the way, is extremely beautiful and well written. :love:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
not quite as evil as I was expecting .. :P but awesome nonetheless
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I thought that word was familiar!! You know the Swahilli meaning?
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Martyr94 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's the third time I've seen you on the front page Chen. Time to show you who's the man
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TheLittlestGiant Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
I could see a head cultist preaching this to his crowd of deranged brainwashed lunatic followers. I like it.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A very good rewrite. :) Haha, yeah, apparently it means 'falling.'
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Vinashuka!
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
I like this! Now that word is gonna be stuck in my head xD.
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Wolfdrappa95 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student General Artist
awesomely creepy.
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'There is a fine line between madness and genius.' Can't remember where that's from. But this (art) just screws up the line, it's a mad genius!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, very glad that ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. LOL mad genius always makes me think of King Bumi from Avatar :3
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StoryRPArt Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really nice, even if it has a demonic tone to it.
You did a great job!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, thank you my friend, I'm very glad that you enjoyed this ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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StoryRPArt Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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elli0777 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
can I join the madness?
MWAAAAAAAHAHAHAAAA
lolls
its very good ;D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, by all means friend, join in with the madness ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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elli0777 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
is there some rite of passage or am i now OFICIALLY MAD ??
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Nah yer mad. Go nuts ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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elli0777 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
YAZOOODDDDLLLEEEEEEEE
MWAW
UNICORNS
PITTA BREAD YAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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DannyOfX Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Thats one way of knowing you've gone insane.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye I'd say so :3. Quite an interesting way ta tell ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DannyOfX Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Yea. I've been down there myself to tell the truth ^^
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this. "Vinashuka" when translated from Swahili is "falling". :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Interestin' :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very. ^.^
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Myennaius13 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
I say 'Brilliant!'.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, thank ye :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Kerrinox Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
I love how this is written. It is as if every sentence carries a vivid image within it that pops in my mind whenever I read it. Keep up the wonderful work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my dear friend, very glad that you enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Kerrinox Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
You're most welcome, Captain. ^^
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student General Artist
The moment I read Vinashuka the first time, I remembered your earlier poem about it. Though the word might be made up, my definition for it is it's a word of insanity and madness. Nice morbid poem, keep up the great work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, I'm very glad that you enjoyed it and I'm glad this piece gave you a taste of that insanity and madness. Tomorrow something different entirely AGAIN :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Writer
"MADNESS WILL CONSUME YOU!"
Count to one and two,
And out the door sanity flew.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye indeed, speaking of which I've accepted yer proof and I'll do it up tomorrow (i've been way too busy these days)

Don't forget to tell me what title you want :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Writer
Can I be a Storyteller or Reveler as me title?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Yush :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Writer
:iconbrookplz::iconsay3plz:"Yohohohoho!"
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