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Whispering to Lucifer:

Humans are such wonderous creatures
even when granted the gift of knowledge
They fall prey to their own insecurities
slaves to their own fears and paranoia

Such is the father's gift of free will...

Yes my lord, I understand
but do you not feel disappointment?
The great bringer of light has condemned himself to an eternity of darkness
simply so his father's children may roam free

Without adversity, there can be no acension...

Ah, such a philosophical statement from you
I am well aware that humans must experience both extremes
Without tasting joy it would be impossible to understand sorrow
Yet I fear that my brothers have forgotten that, in a single minded pursuit of-

Misery...

Aye, clever you are to see that
for these brothers of mine find comfort in the wondrous art of destruction
self-abuse is taken as 'fun', addiction is a personal right
Greed is good and gluttony is gold, sloth is scoffed at
and wrath is protected by the comforting justice of mental instability

In time, they will learn. Like children, they are still young...

And what happens if they destroy themselves before then?
What if the flame of hope extinguishes before the path is revealed?

Even in a world of sorrow, there are those who represent the light
Even in the darkness of a deep forest, the moon may shine through the trees
A man standing in the shade is obscured from the light of the sun
but that does not mean that the sun does not exist
It is merely hidden and will eventually shine again
especially if there are those who choose to seek it


...sometimes my lord, I think you put too much faith in them

-Chen Yuan Wen, 23rd September 2012
If you enjoyed Whispering to Lucifer, please take a moment to fave it ^^. Comments are also loved.

If you'd like to hear me read this poem, as well as watch the first episode of my new series. Please check out this youtube video of mine: [link]

Author's Comment:

Alright so...this poem and the video was supposed to be released yesterday but sadly I didn't have to the time to do so due to a minor family issue.

The poem itself was written because I felt that we as humans need to understand our own impulses. It's hard to do the right thing and we often find ourselves engaging in the wrong kinds of behaviour. Though I am not focused on the biblical concept of sin, I believe the seven deadly sins are still valid if we interpret them in a modern context.

Other than that, please enjoy the video and if you want to be a part of the show, read the video's description because I want to try and make the readers a part of things if possible :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Letting Go of You Letting Go of You:

You abandoned me in the past
without so much as a proper goodbye
One day you simply chose to walk out the door
and you never did come back...

I was angry then, hurting badly
I wondered if I was in some way inadequate
I wondered if you left because I am so easy to despise
and eventually my sorrow turned to anger

I wanted to become great
to show you that you made the wrong choice
to take my strength and throw it in your face
just so you would regret it

But then I saw how happy you were...

In the time we've been apart
You've made a new life for yourself
You've found someone who loves and treasures you
and upon
This is All About You This Is All About You:

Most people giving you advice, might take a quote from a book

Most people giving you advice, have never had a real look

So from someone who's been watching, let me lay my heart bare

I want to show you all the special things, about the girl for whom I care

She always does her very best, no matter how tough the task

Even when she's struggling, she puts on a brave mask

She's always trying to learn new things, just for a chance to make you proud

She can be a little bit quiet, but I think that's better than being loud

She's not the very best in sports, I know she can be kind of a klutz

But she smiles and goes on an
Oppa Pirate Style! Oppa Pirate Style:

Chen Chen Chen Chen, Chen is pirate style!
Chen Chen Chen Chen, Chen is pirate style!

Stick-on tattoos and a Captain's hat makes me a player
My pirate theme is 'Raining Blood' by a band that's known as Slayer
But let's realise the fact: I've got no beard, I'm just that cool
I'm like Monkey D. Luffy when I drown in a kiddie pool

Cause I'm a guy!
The type that sails along the seven seas, a pirate guy
With a black fedora hat I use to tease, a pirate guy
Got so much swag I cure the love disease, a pirate guy
I'm a pirate guy!

So heyo- Pretty ladies I need to know...I need to know
Would you get aboard my ship and dr
Aren't You Ashamed Yet? Aren't You Ashamed Yet?:

A Mask
Truly an object of mystique and mystery
A simple device, with a painted layer
That conceals a face of rotting worms

Oh, I'm sorry, was I supposed to overlook it?
Let me rephrase it in a more appropriate manner
You are a cowardly, pathetic, miserable, filthy
Unintelligent, soul-sucking, perfidious, bag of rotting worms

You who once held my respect, you who were once my friend
you shared in my secrets and you shared in my dreams
But in the end, it was the lies
The horrible, filthy lies that spew forth from your tainted lips...

I guess it was a simple decision
I had no need to keep up this facade
an


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Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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Critique by JhansiKiRani123 Sep 24, 2012, 1:44:33 PM
This a very well thought out, in depth poem. I especially likethe structure of it all. The begining to end it lists the faults and things humans truly work on, showing "Human nature"

However, at the end the bolded section leaves a large impact that even though darkness is great, light always come through in the end. As an author, I understand only you know the true message behind your piece, and it's only the audience's job to assume. Knowing that, it does require digging deeper to look for your message, which is a nice touch that lets the reader look into the reading.

Overall I felt it was a really deep and moving piece, good job!
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I must say that I was quite taken away by this. It's not often on 'deviant', that I find such original work as this. There were a couple of lines I might have altered, (i.e. the line: "Without tasting joy it would be impossible to understand sorrow" I would probably have said "Without tasting [happiness] it would be impossible to understand sorrow [in it's absence]" but that's mainly a preference thing. I really enjoyed the overall theme of it, and after I finished reading it I felt the great pull of inner reflection, which I think is something all great writer's should seek with their craft. Great Job, definitely gonna 'favorite' this one!
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MaltCorpse Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hinting mockery here. Still, it's great. It speaks on many levels, especially to religious people. Luckily, I'm not religious, I just love the darker side of humanity.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it, I too enjoy the darkness ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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doolhoofd Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
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Do you know that the Sun is alive?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Didn't quite know that, but I do feel more informed xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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doolhoofd Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
A lot of civilisations worshipped the Sun. We've simply forgotten.
More information if you're interested:

[link] Sun Salutation

[link] Hynm form the Rig Veda

[link] Sun of God by Gregory Sams
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leavemealone24 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student
It's amazing how I can hear them talking in my head without putting any effort of trying to put a face or voice to the characters.
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Nealin Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist
I agree with Elsie-Black on most parts, liking the poem a lot being one of them. ;D I'm torn about favoriting, simply because I've been very adverse to religion lately. (Bad experience with a crazy woman who tried to forcefully exorcise me. xD) I'm hoping it'll settle soon.

But, at one point I was a religion-whore (reading everything from the Norse myths to the Bible) and as a child growing up in a mainly Christian country I came into contact with stories of how Lucifer fell early. Then, during my mentioned phase, I read more about him because it had so early piqued my interest. He always felt so sad to me and was one of the main reasons I didn't continue on the path of Christianity as I'd planned as a child (I was precocious ^^;)- "this god fellow" wasn't my kind of god at all.

I've found few who were interested that didn't just see him as pure evil period. Which takes a lot of the beauty and wisdom out of the story. But I really like how you represent Lucifer here - Having "taken one for the team" and choosing a fate that can't be any less than pure suffering, knowingly from when he first started the rebellion. It clicks with the pain I always saw in him.

I never got as far as him doing what he did for god like that (probably because I've never really believed in anything enough to be able to put myself in Lucifer's shoes) and it's a nice spin. That's probably what I liked most about it. Obviously. Because I kind of ranted. Well. Seems this is getting favourited anyway. ;3 Great job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Well when it comes to mythology, I'm someone who generally puts alternative spins on everything. I figure that the world needs a little more to its legends because the old ones are getting stale. I actually want to do a series called 'Journey to Hell' but at the time my writing skill was not good enough to accomplish the intended goal. Most likely after the Liquefaction series in complete, I'd love to bring 'Journey to Hell' out of the ideas block and onto DA.

If you enjoy hearing graphic descriptions of hell instead of the traditional brimstone and fire and generally a different take on that which we stopped fearing...this series will be like a modern day Dante's Inferno lol

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Nealin Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist
Very true, and too few manage to "rewrite" or spin new tales out of the old myths in a way that does them justice - which makes it somewhat pointless. But I'm thinking you could definitely be one of the few. =3 So I'll definitely be keeping a look-out for that. I've been stuck halfway through La Divina Comedia for six months now because I stubbornly insist on reading it in the earliest possible translation and to look up all unfamiliar names (and, well, yes, due to psycho exorcist lady as well) - so taking a break-yet-not would be nice. xD

I'm -so- bad at checking back on those I watch (Some mutated kind of ADD...), but I've stumbled over different poems of yours thrice in a month now so I'm going to hope it's fate and that I stumble back again. (I should set it as appointments each month "beep beep - time to check [insert watched person]'s account for new stuff". ;D)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Professional Writer
If I might suggest, why not check on each Sunday ^^ I always release my live youtube episode on the sunday and the week's poems will be out by then :3

I'll look forward to doing the Journey to Hell series in future ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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