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Where Angels Play:

A lonely spark appears before me tonight
amongst the struggles deep inside of me...
Should I give in, will I breathe in?

How much more can I be forced to take
before my soul breaks?
Shards crashing into me
letting me know I am alive
If only
I am barely breathing...

The moon lights my pathway
deep in dark, where we will fade
I've walked past the archway
Where angels will play...

The warmest touch, upon my skin
Wings that glow with sacred light, from deep within
They have come to take me back, to where I've been
Gone away into the winds, my voice forever lingering

Do I alone escape this and find my peace
without concern for what is left behind
Even if I could close my eyes in endless rest
The thought of you keeps me breathing...


The angel that leads me, deep in dark, where I seem to fade;
The lonely spark that keeps me, is the warmth of your heart...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 30th September 2012
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Author's Comment:

Alright so, as you might notice the quality of this poem is not 100% as compared to my previous works. Reason being its the first poem of its type, a hybrid poem that can be sung as well as read.

Obviously this creates deep difficulty for the writer, because the way something is sung allows for alterations in grammar and lengthy pauses that cause reading to be badly disturbed.

That said, the only way to overcome this is to compromise between the two so I hope this poem was able to do that. Please keep this in mind when critiquing.

Other than that, it is also an early birthday present for :icondarlingangel0565:, her birthday is 1st of October, but I hope she enjoys this ^^

Happy early birthday Angel ^^ WHOO!

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Why I Hate My Life Why I Hate My Life:

Despite the fact that I'm a trained professional
I have to work odd-jobs making deliveries on a motorcycle

The only girl who I ever loved
was just using me as a replacement

The only girl that actually likes me
runs a bar and took over my house

I don't have the guts to kick her out
so I end up sleeping at an abandoned church

I've recently picked up a strange rash
it hurts and I have to wear sleeves to cover it

My only friends are a guy that never comes out from a forest
and a girl that's always looking to steal the meager possessions I have

Everything sucks really
because the one person who cared about me
is
My Beautiful Filth My Beautiful Filth:

We'll start with the rose petals
scattered lavishly across the bed
A symbolic collage of my broken thoughts
like memories crushed and thrown into the winds
they lie where they fall, forever forgotten...

Tacks and nails shall line the floor!
A perfect representation of my painful steps
To walk forward was to suffer
to stand still was to endure
Like the insults thrown at me, like the physical abuse
they drive their way into my skin and remain embedded
Unable to be removed except by force

And now comes the masterpiece, the perfect finishing touch
A wall of words and photographs depicting my sorrows and greivance
Whispering to Lucifer Whispering to Lucifer:

Humans are such wonderous creatures
even when granted the gift of knowledge
They fall prey to their own insecurities
slaves to their own fears and paranoia

Such is the father's gift of free will...

Yes my lord, I understand
but do you not feel disappointment?
The great bringer of light has condemned himself to an eternity of darkness
simply so his father's children may roam free

Without adversity, there can be no acension...

Ah, such a philosophical statement from you
I am well aware that humans must experience both extremes
Without tasting joy it would be impossible to understand sorrow
Yet I fear that my
Letting Go of You Letting Go of You:

You abandoned me in the past
without so much as a proper goodbye
One day you simply chose to walk out the door
and you never did come back...

I was angry then, hurting badly
I wondered if I was in some way inadequate
I wondered if you left because I am so easy to despise
and eventually my sorrow turned to anger

I wanted to become great
to show you that you made the wrong choice
to take my strength and throw it in your face
just so you would regret it

But then I saw how happy you were...

In the time we've been apart
You've made a new life for yourself
You've found someone who loves and treasures you
and upon


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Critique by TempestasVentus Sep 30, 2012, 7:54:33 AM
You know, this is my first critique of a literary work, and it is absolutely amazing...I can almost see this person, lost and alone, and this seems to paint a better picture than even that of a painter in some ways, for it allows one to customize the person to their own individual spirit...I love it.
A great use of words, such as lone, struggle, and soul to give the more holy and spiritual quality of this piece. I like the fact that in the end, it gives one a feeling of sort of a warm glow, suggesting happiness, and the angel leading them onward, plus the romnantic quality with the character staying alive for the one they love. Over all, a very sweet and romantic poem, but with depth and good character, that make it a delightful read!
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Just simply amazing. You always cease to amaze me with your literary work. I rate this five stars because thats what it truly is worth. The amount of self confliction in this poem, and then the positive light shed upon the angels in this makes this even the more original. And the last two lines really seem to finish up the whole poem leaving readers with a bittersweet feeling and leaving them wanting more by WordofChen. Your are truly inspiring and a rolemodel for anyone who has ever had an interest in poetry and literature. Your work puts a smile upon my face and I am sure my opinon is shared by others.
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xMoonlightAngelx Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is an amazing poem. I felt so much emotion inside each verse.
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Beautiful!
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
Lovely. Great Job.
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noorelven Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
you are a hopeless romantic !!!!
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Acheron21 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
This is kinda abstract for you. Kind of unfocused and a little on the hopey side of things.

Good in a soft lens outlook lacking a direction kind of way
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Amazing!!!!!:)
As expected from the captain!:clap:

*Sorry for the late comment! I'm left without internet*
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NoexZolu Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love it.
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frei76 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
wow, something beautiful, as always! :clap:
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is heart warming in a way.
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DragonHeart136 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
Tears of a Angel.......... bitter warmth of the heart.
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