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We Poets Are Frustrated...

I am sure that you have all experienced this feeling:
A masterpiece eclipsed by the baying of a brat!
A raucous rhyme, so emotionally raw;
Shadowed by a child's melancholia...

Alone in the darkness, you lick your lips and growl.
Your anger, so evidently understandable; yet you forget your own abilities!
In despair, my dearest sibling, you have forgotten — yourself

Why fear an obstacle so easily overcome?
Why shred your works with such heavy tears?
Have you forgotten that we are the original craftsman?
Our tongues birthed as our chisels and axe!
We need only take these simple themes
And corrupt them with all our twisted fears...

This hatred inside of you, this bubble of frustration and anxiety —
Let it swell like a pus-filled abscess of anger!
And with your words unleash this vicarious plague!

Take the unblemished works that have scorned you,
And inject them with the very darkness of your soul!
Let bleeding lips, spill bottled curses;
Until all that remains is but tragedy and ash...

For the pure white wings of these mewling cherubs,
Need only be stained by our bloodied hands.
And when the white has been turned to red —
These pups shall join the damned.




-Written by Chen Yuan Wen, 1st March 2013
You know, there are a ton of artists that always talk about how they're upset that teenage poems about depression etc. Often get front page and they whine. Some artists even try to hop on the trend and in the end they lose themselves.

The message that I really want to bring out with this piece is that it's okay to be frustrated but rather than just being angry all the time. Channel it positively, "corrupt" the themes with your own brand of poetry.

I'm personally capable of doing dark poems better than normal poems and I enjoy bringing out that seductive darkness and I also intend to demonstrate (over the coming releases) how to use surreal-like poetry to engage day to day issues.

Anyway if you want to hear this read live, get a premium download for just 10 points. You get the PDF version of this poem (the font and formatting is nicer) plus the audio reading :3 It's basically like putting 10 cents in my little hobo hat so please? :3 *Shakes hat*

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There are a lot of poems out there about the frustration of writing poems, but this one caught my interest the best so far. It captures a raw feeling in a unique voice and tone. It's like nothing I've ever read.

Everyone who tries to write poetry has felt a frustration of finding the right words and making the stanzas and rhythm, rhyme and style 110% amazing or better; and for those of us who go out to read poetry, we've all read the whining and arguably "bad" poems of people trying to pose and plagiarize the same old lines over and over again. All in all, this is a good representation of the poet's frustration and compiles the concept in a fairly easy-to-understand way.

The use of italics emphasizes lines similar to what most darker poets use, but it has your own twist on it, which I really like. It gives it a certain feel, and while I don't have ten points to give up to listen to the live reading, I wish I did. I'd want to hear how the words flow together. The bold, too, really drives it home.

The only thing I don't like are the rhymes, but even those are pretty great. The big words, for younger readers, too, might throw it off. I'll also have to take your word on the PDF version looking prettier. ;) But a very nicely done piece, if nothing else.
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aidantheawsome123 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
captain, your are a dark one. sir.
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noorelven Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
WHOA!! CHEN IS BACK (to his dark form :D )
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hmmm, well a lot of writing is "whining" in a way. No offense, but in a way this is also sort of "whining". I mean to say that writing is about expressing emotion and feeling, trying to express raw crushing emotion and sometimes that emotion is "whining". But I don't think you should call it bad just because the writer is venting (and perhaps their vent is childish). Everyone has a different style of writing. I don't think we need to "crush" other people and "corrupt" their writing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Naaah its not about corrupting and crushing others xD Although that was described I put it in quotes for a reason. What I mean is that people shouldn't be fixated on what is being written and whine about it. If they are skilled they will be able to take the topic and twist it in their own style (which is what I intended when I said 'corrupt'). Besides, it is not wrong to adapt someone else's style into your own. I personally try to adapt and use any style that I come across simply because it helps me widen my scope of what I can do with poetry ^^

Last thing to note is that, I wasn't whining, I said OTHER poets do and it was something I had observed for a long time is all :3

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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Ohkay ^_^ I see.
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've only now really gotten a chance to purcase the audio file and pdf, only to find that they're not supported on my tablet. Oh well, I still gave ya the ten points and I'm hoping everything is going good for you :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Awww hope you get to hear it eventually xD

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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Apparently, I purcesed it twice, so if you find yourself with an extra few points, it was prob me. I'll have to get it from my friend, I know she bought it as well.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Simone? Yeah she said she did xD

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scullfase Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
I love this.
It makes me feel the anger and hatred behind it.
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