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We Poets Are Frustrated...

I am sure that you have all experienced this feeling:
A masterpiece eclipsed by the baying of a brat!
A raucous rhyme, so emotionally raw;
Shadowed by a child's melancholia...

Alone in the darkness, you lick your lips and growl.
Your anger, so evidently understandable; yet you forget your own abilities!
In despair, my dearest sibling, you have forgotten — yourself

Why fear an obstacle so easily overcome?
Why shred your works with such heavy tears?
Have you forgotten that we are the original craftsman?
Our tongues birthed as our chisels and axe!
We need only take these simple themes
And corrupt them with all our twisted fears...

This hatred inside of you, this bubble of frustration and anxiety —
Let it swell like a pus-filled abscess of anger!
And with your words unleash this vicarious plague!

Take the unblemished works that have scorned you,
And inject them with the very darkness of your soul!
Let bleeding lips, spill bottled curses;
Until all that remains is but tragedy and ash...

For the pure white wings of these mewling cherubs,
Need only be stained by our bloodied hands.
And when the white has been turned to red —
These pups shall join the damned.




-Written by Chen Yuan Wen, 1st March 2013
You know, there are a ton of artists that always talk about how they're upset that teenage poems about depression etc. Often get front page and they whine. Some artists even try to hop on the trend and in the end they lose themselves.

The message that I really want to bring out with this piece is that it's okay to be frustrated but rather than just being angry all the time. Channel it positively, "corrupt" the themes with your own brand of poetry.

I'm personally capable of doing dark poems better than normal poems and I enjoy bringing out that seductive darkness and I also intend to demonstrate (over the coming releases) how to use surreal-like poetry to engage day to day issues.

Anyway if you want to hear this read live, get a premium download for just 10 points. You get the PDF version of this poem (the font and formatting is nicer) plus the audio reading :3 It's basically like putting 10 cents in my little hobo hat so please? :3 *Shakes hat*

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There are a lot of poems out there about the frustration of writing poems, but this one caught my interest the best so far. It captures a raw feeling in a unique voice and tone. It's like nothing I've ever read.

Everyone who tries to write poetry has felt a frustration of finding the right words and making the stanzas and rhythm, rhyme and style 110% amazing or better; and for those of us who go out to read poetry, we've all read the whining and arguably "bad" poems of people trying to pose and plagiarize the same old lines over and over again. All in all, this is a good representation of the poet's frustration and compiles the concept in a fairly easy-to-understand way.

The use of italics emphasizes lines similar to what most darker poets use, but it has your own twist on it, which I really like. It gives it a certain feel, and while I don't have ten points to give up to listen to the live reading, I wish I did. I'd want to hear how the words flow together. The bold, too, really drives it home.

The only thing I don't like are the rhymes, but even those are pretty great. The big words, for younger readers, too, might throw it off. I'll also have to take your word on the PDF version looking prettier. ;) But a very nicely done piece, if nothing else.
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aidantheawsome123 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
captain, your are a dark one. sir.
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noorelven Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
WHOA!! CHEN IS BACK (to his dark form :D )
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hmmm, well a lot of writing is "whining" in a way. No offense, but in a way this is also sort of "whining". I mean to say that writing is about expressing emotion and feeling, trying to express raw crushing emotion and sometimes that emotion is "whining". But I don't think you should call it bad just because the writer is venting (and perhaps their vent is childish). Everyone has a different style of writing. I don't think we need to "crush" other people and "corrupt" their writing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Naaah its not about corrupting and crushing others xD Although that was described I put it in quotes for a reason. What I mean is that people shouldn't be fixated on what is being written and whine about it. If they are skilled they will be able to take the topic and twist it in their own style (which is what I intended when I said 'corrupt'). Besides, it is not wrong to adapt someone else's style into your own. I personally try to adapt and use any style that I come across simply because it helps me widen my scope of what I can do with poetry ^^

Last thing to note is that, I wasn't whining, I said OTHER poets do and it was something I had observed for a long time is all :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Ohkay ^_^ I see.
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've only now really gotten a chance to purcase the audio file and pdf, only to find that they're not supported on my tablet. Oh well, I still gave ya the ten points and I'm hoping everything is going good for you :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Awww hope you get to hear it eventually xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Apparently, I purcesed it twice, so if you find yourself with an extra few points, it was prob me. I'll have to get it from my friend, I know she bought it as well.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Simone? Yeah she said she did xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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scullfase Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
I love this.
It makes me feel the anger and hatred behind it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Glad you enjoyed it my friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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scullfase Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013
:D
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Skinr54 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not a poet, but I certainly understand your frustration at seeing people writing stuff with the most simplistic, boring "a-a-b-b" rhyme schemes imaginable. Unless they make good use of imagery or a clever meter, it's just...bad. Especially if (as is often the case) the grammar is horrible.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Well actually I'm not the frustrated one xD This was a poem designed to teach those who are frustrated that basically anything can be twisted into your own style. I personally use a very dark style as my main-stay and I can basically make any topic demonic/destructive.

Every poet has their own core talent and I believe that they should stay true to that ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fairytale-Princess21 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Hmm do i really want to stalk you Mr.Chen?
Your works are awesome btw xD!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha, thank you, you're welcome to stalk as you please ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fairytale-Princess21 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha I'm not a stalker! But I could be... *evil laughter*
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Please be one, I love having them xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fairytale-Princess21 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Sure as do i! <3
plus i already added you to my watch soo...
already stalking you! :laughing:
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shallowblort Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
This strikes a chord indeed.

Thank you.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Welcome my friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A very good piece, in my humble opinion. Though it started off rather dull, it gradually became for exciting, more interesting, and more intriguing. Though it's not the best piece in your gallery, it is certainly in the top five.

I especially like the last paragraph. Some may argue that this piece is exaggerated, but I believe that, it being a poem and all, it is but a bottomless cup to pour your emotions. It shows how poetry is meant to be smothered in emotion, and if there is no emotion in it, it is not poetry at all.

Very good work. :salute:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it my friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.
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pyrotech5828 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
So... we kill babies?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
...No xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Tiger-Tomboy14 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Very beautiful and inspiring:) Being a teenager I sometimes write somewhat sad and depressing poems when I am going through a hard time. Writing helps me to channel the eeling and sadness into words, erall making me feel tter now that I have it out. Thank you for this poem:D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it :3

I personally think that everyone is free to write whatever they want and no one should really whine about what someone else writes. Their problem is they can't adapt to it. I mean writing style is meant to be fluid and therefore it should also be flexible ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Chibi-Akutenshi Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
I personally think we all come out of those stages. Everyone has than own brand, of simple, teenage angst poetry, regardless of the theme. I will not deny that I still often sink into it, and have and may almost never come away from it, but still, I do think that we do have to acknowledge that these baby steps are nothing in the world of poetry, only appealing to the lowest of the lowest common divisor. You cannot become anything more than a passing, un-cherished poet in that way. But I try my best to not make poetry for anyone. The foundation I have chosen is to simply enjoying trying to express myself through it. It's very liberating.

As a piece, I do agree very firmly with the critique that has been done! It's wonderful. Sometimes, I like the use of plain page, in lieu of when larger diction feels somewhat forced, but I think this feeling for me happens so little that it might as be me being too critical. The imagery here is pretty nice as well. I would say you're a million miles ahead of me, and it's nice to have had the pleasure of coming across something truly good on DA. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Well generally speaking, I think everyone can just write whatever xD. I write for a general audience without losing that dark edge to my works and that is what I think is good :3

After all, adapting your own styles to a myriad of poems is what will help you really churn out the works and that's why I decided to make a piece that shows the whiners how to really do it in their own way.

Thank you for considering my work good, I sincerely appreciate it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Chibi-Akutenshi Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
My pleasure, really. <3
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Indigo-Moon-Shadow Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really well written, but I must admit I'm afraid now of how people view my writing...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Kahaha, its fine, everyone should just write what they want. After all, being true to yourself is the key :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
And the Amazing WordOfChen wrote and other Amazing poem! Congraluation! ;)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AzraelSabado Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Gaia is full of trolls :(
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Dunno about that, but the avatar maker is nice and cute xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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keyoblivion Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
very nice
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Asrath Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student General Artist
amazing poem Chen! :)
I love the way you've written it, and I can relate very well to the subject. Awesome take on this one! ;)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks for enjoying it my friend ;3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Asrath Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome. Your poetry is great! :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Mission-46 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
I wrote poetry for over 20 yrs and still trying to breathe life into paper or screen again. I takes more than just a few thoughts and a pen. Great poem!!! Tc and God bless
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly my dear friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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JackieMercer Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student Writer
"Our tongues birthed as our chisels and axe!"
"Let bleeding lips, spill bottled curses"

Beautiful
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for the kind compliment ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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blackstormwarrior Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh, that was amazing! I could really feel it!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm glad you did my dear friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Folded-Note Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student General Artist
It is true. We poets...are.. a working peasant class, though, it inspires the underground themes to rise from the sewers.

It's more of a reward to gain fame from a true work of emotion rather than a common thought.
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