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Would you ever know the feeling,
Of being twisted, over and over.
Much like a string of high-tension cord;
Ready to snap at any moment.

You are barely controlling this swell of emotion.
Keeping it taut, lest it burst from the surface.
A plastic smile serves as your only defense;
Witty banter, to stave off a deeper inquiry.

You hide the signs of your sickness;
Quickly easing the pressure.
Whilst appearing to adjust the suit,
You move through the crowd like a fading wisp.

Rushed, sweating and just barely contained.
You duck into the shadows, so you might breathe again.

-Chen Yuan Wen, Broken World Series, 13th November 2013
Ladies and Gentlemen,

I present to you the first piece of my Broken World series. It is intended to convey the feeling of being trapped especially in an open area and I will explain more down below. For now:

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Other Poems in this series:
1. Twisted Up Inside - [you are here]
2. I Don't Mean To Be Rude... - GO THERE NOW!
3. Gone a Little Rotten- GO THERE NOW!
4. Am I Making You Uncomfortable- [COMING SOON!]
5. Feed the Messiah- [COMING SOON!]
6. Let Me Unchain You- [COMING SOON!]
7. Big Man in A Suit of Armor- [COMING SOON!]
8 - TBA

What is this poem about:

I wrote this poem based on my personal weakness. I am actually VERY bad with crowds and often I will start to feel very ill. It makes it difficult to eat lunch with other people an to enjoy a meal with them. It can take a very long time for me to get comfortable. Usually I will try to hide my discomfort with a quick easy smile, witty banter, quick and funny stories, anything to disguise the internal turmoil.

I thought that it was a fitting opening piece, to talk about something that is broken within me...before I start the rest of the series on what is wrong with the world.

Look forward to the next piece TOMORROW :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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nicoxmel Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Sorry totally irelevant but that's what I want to do when I am feeling like this.
nicoxmel Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I bet you wish you had like super powers so that you coud kick everyone's ass;P
brander Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013
segura2112 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student Digital Artist

That concept could be the basis for more than a few characters in books and movies that I have come across, looking forward to the rest of the series.

Thank You

Sherlocked157 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your way with words is as good as I am bad with words. :iconohyoucasplz:
As you can clearly see by my last sentence.
I can't believe how great you are, and how you understand.
Then take that understanding and format it into flowing words.
I marvel.
I also marvel at the fact that you can withstand the force of all of our annoying comments all the time.
For that, and much more, I commend you. :iconbravoplz: 
GrimSlime Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
God I simply marvel the way you are so strongly able to capture the very essence of all human emotion. You are quite clever, and so very beautiful in meaning, and with your words, you are amazing.
candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i can relate compleetly relate to this im compleetly fake in my person and i act like a fool to try and pleese others though thats not what this poems about im sur of that people think im funny but i try and hide the fact that im... well not
writergirl1122 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
No words describe how much I like this
Jazzieiest Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
 I love it! Great job :)
xenxi-the-observer Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's funny how your poems can sometimes express the same feeling as something you didn't write it for. I really can relate in a way to your poem. 
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