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To The Beautiful You:

Here we are, sitting behind these screens of glass,

Reading lines of text, yet smiling, laughing and crying.

It's strange to think that I could have this much fun -

Considering that I've never met you before, but then again

Perhaps that's the reason why I don't have to pretend.

Some people might tell me, that what we have is just a fantasy,

I doubt I'll have the chance to actually see you in this life-time.

But even so, in the time that we've spent together - Well,

I feel as though I've connected with you, more than anyone else.

I feel as though I know you better, than those just a few feet away.

You might take this little confession as something silly,

Maybe you'll even forget about it as time passes,

But I for one could never forget about someone like you,

And so I'd like to dedicate this piece, to the beautiful you.





-Chen Yuan Wen, 17th December 2012
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Author's Comment:

Arrr maties,

This here poem is about 'online friends', sometimes ye meet that person online that you really wish you lived next to, smply because ye get along so well xD. I know I have a few people like that and it does suck when ye face the reality tha' ye might not ever meet them. That said, it actually makes me work harder than ever because I'd really like t' meet all of 'em someday and I hope this dream can come true.

At the same time, this piece also serves as the SPECIAL BIRTHDAY RELEASE FOR ALL THE DECEMBER BABIES (I'll designate one release per month as a birthday release and see how many months I can keep it up fer). Leave a comment if your birthday is this month and I'll put ye in the description. So far the following crew-members have birthdays this month:

:iconyukimaru-kun: - December 6th
:iconzstew2: - December 8th
:iconshad0wbeast: - December 14th

And the following poeple:

:iconangelgirlartist: - December 22nd
:iconyoshisghost: - December 29th

So please wish em all a happy birthday :3

Friends are always precious, regardless if ye meet 'em in yer day t' day life or online. As far as relationships go, even mine is maintained long distance. Ye can't help where yer born and the fact that yer ultra bff might be all th' way over in Narnia...but even so, if the friendship endures, maybe one day, ye can meet ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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Wrong, wrong, wrong, WRONG!
Everything is wrong.
'As then sun dew drips from her eyes'-
Do I really think that'll be good enough?

Hours spent on each piece -
Punctuated only by sound of ripping paper -
To lie crumpled upon my wooden floor,
Unable to be forgotten.

As the hours pass and the day wears on,
More and more worlds are crushed by my hands.
Realities sprawled upon a single piece of paper,
To die as quickly as they are formed.

A man's whose romance is torn in two,
A vampire about to meet his prey.
A werewolf standing against an army
And a boy facing the world alone.

These are the li
Practice Poem - Poor Little TimmyPractice Poem - Poor Little Timmy:

Down into well, poor Timmy fell,
Down he fell into the pits of hell.
Brought into hell by an eldritch spell,
Poor little Timmy who fell down the well.

Alone he cowered and shivered and shook,
He shook for hours, so long it took,
So long it took for him to feel well,
Well enough to explore this hell...

Through pathways littered with scenes most gory;
Most gory indeed was little Timmy's story,
A story of fear and suffering defined,
Poor little Timmy, he ran out of time...

Now then, I think I'll go welcome my little guest...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 14th December 2012
I Can't Devour You, Not YetI Can't Devour You, Not Yet:

I long to taste the sweetness of your flesh,
To roll your meat between my tongue and teeth.
So many times have I come - so close -
To taking that first bite from your neck.

Yet, there is something about you,
A scent perhaps or a sickly sap.
It turns bitter upon my tongue,
Poisoning it; I am left unable to eat...

Much like the caterpillar, covered in spines,
Each bite would spew only bitter venom -
Numbing my senses and dulling the mind;
It would leave me naught but a gormless wreck!

Even so, despite me knowing of the repugnant taste,
I am drawn toward you, like a moth to the flame.
May my wings crum
It Came From The DarkIt Came From The Dark:

Amongst the ashes, swirling from the darkness of the pit,

Emerged a hand, dragging a battered body across the rocks.

Blood leaked from the wounds so callously self-inflicted,

And teeth ground with a focused determination and seething anger.

It cared not for the warm rubies - staining the jagged rocks,

It cared not for the sensation of pain...

All that it remembered was a dream, An obsession -

One that drove it ever higher; ignoring all else!

Eventually it emerged from this shadowy hole, this dreary depth,

And in that moment, it learned of the truth.

For this creature, denied sunlight and warmth -

was me...



Other Literature by Me:
The Good Critic's GuideThe Good Critic's Guide:
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I. Introduction:

   I have noticed that many critics on DA tend to leave rather harsh and sometimes subjective critiques on the pages of the artists being critiqued. Their rationale for doing so is based on the concept that 'we shouldn't molly-coddle each other and instead "tell it like it is"'. However this type of critique reflects poorly on one who is critiquing as opposed to the one who is being critiqued and I will explain why throughout the course of this guide. In essence I hope to use this resource as a way of teaching potential critics how to properly focus their abilities and direct their critiques in a
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Captain, ye done it again. Although I would like to see more substance here, I certainly enjoyed reading another amazing poem. The lines were ample without being verbose; the expression was neat. "Considering that I've never met you before, but then again perhaps that is the reason why i don't have to pretend." Charming and quaint diction. Somehow there is a bit of the Englishman in ye with this. The line that others would pass off the relationship as fantasy rings the bell. I am surprised that my readers don't say so about Puabi.
The remainder was you wholly. After a few startling shockers, ye came out with this romance. Charming.
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Critique by MarcusPenrose Dec 18, 2012, 6:28:32 AM
I have mixed feelings about this poem. It's theme is not exactly what T. S. Eliot would have made a beeline for but it's not a bad piece either. Let's start from the top:
I enjoyed this. It states very effectively that you can know a person even if you never meet them in real life. Basically, it's a poem supporting a modern take on penpals. At least, that's what it looks like to me. It is full of emotion and affection but also a bit of sorrow, because there is the feeling of still wanting to meet the e-friend in real life. Either way, great way of tackling the theme.
However, there are reasons why there are no five stars. I am not fond of free verse. That's not to say I avoid all free verse poems like the plague, in fact I enjoy quite a few, however, I do consider set metres the better way. Also, the theme is too obvious. You make it sound obvious and mundane. It makes it more accessible, but you could use your imagination to make the idea of an e-friend more fantastic and easier to sympathise with than for people who do not agree with it. Perhaps a ghost which the narrator never sees but still knows would serve as a better metaphor for the e-friend?
Overall: for a free verse I found it to be great fun but far from perfect.
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abstract-mouse Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate to this, so much...*sigh*
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm glad ye could friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think most of us here at deviantART can relate to this. We all have met those people that are just so amazing and funny--but we have no clue what they look like.
The simplicity of this is vital. A cryptic poem, a stuffy poem, a poem chocked full of ancient language and big words grown dusty from sitting around in dictionaries wouldn't get the message across. In fact, I fear the message would be mutilated beyond repair.
So, I propose a toast, to keeping it simple!
And, as always, thank you for this. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Yer most welcome me fine friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Coeb Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012
YES. My feelings exactly. I cannot...even...begin to describe how much I relate...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha well I'm glad ye do me friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Coeb Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Trust me, I am too. :squee: I was feeling lonely thinking I was perhaps the only one who felt this way. Turns out others do as well, judging by the comments, and maybe even yourself if I'm correct!


And thats fine. c: I honestly didnt expect you to reply. Good luck with your book!
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
^_^ Thank you! We all love reading your work and just hanging out here with you too! Merry Christmas!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye ^^ I do love the festive month :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This made me feel fuzzy inside. :D
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