Tired, Exhausted, Drained:
I am bloody exhausted! Drained to the core of my soul.
I wake up every morning with bags; burning ever deeper into my eyes.
Sunken masses of flesh, reminding me that the dreamscape -
One in which I sought refuge; is now buried where it lies.
Yet still I force myself to trudge through this wilderness.
Forever caught in a moon drenched, delusory twilight.
An endless cycle of failure and renewed hope;
Giving rise to the very stubbornness that defines me.
-Chen Yuan Wen, 5th February 2013
Also, your word choices were great. "Sunkens masses of flesh..." "An endless cycle of failure and renewed hope..." It ends without much hope, and that's how a lot of people feel. Including me, and you probably as well. At the end, you say how stubborn you are, to keep doing the cycle of failure and then hope. I know that cycle very well.... Good poem. Well written. I feel like it rings a sad, mournful bell in my heart whenever I read it...
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