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Tired, Exhausted, Drained:

I am bloody exhausted! Drained to the core of my soul.

I wake up every morning with bags; burning ever deeper into my eyes.

Sunken masses of flesh, reminding me that the dreamscape -

One in which I sought refuge; is now buried where it lies.

Yet still I force myself to trudge through this wilderness.

Forever caught in a moon drenched, delusory twilight.

An endless cycle of failure and renewed hope;

Giving rise to the very stubbornness that defines me.


-Chen Yuan Wen, 5th February 2013
Alright mates,

Me journey ended officially yesterday, but now it's time to bring on the FIRE. This is my latest work ^^ It's a shot-glass poem, a style which I developed to cater to people who don't want to spend ages reading long works but still want to get the emotional feeling. It's the middle ground between haiku's and the longer pieces that I'm used to writing.

This one is particular is from my upcoming book '50 Little Glasses'. I hope you'll all look forward to it, it's going to be a neat little poetry e-book that you can buy for a reasonable price (and no you won't need an e-reader to read it)

The concept behind this poem is simple: We're all tired and exhausted after going through each day. Sometimes you just want to give in. Some people have fantastic reasons for not giving in, but me personally; I'm just a stubborn bastard.

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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I know what those bags are like too..... Very interesting poem. I feel like it speaks right to me. And I'm sure it does to other readers. It really pulls you in and makes you FEEL something.

Also, your word choices were great. "Sunkens masses of flesh..." "An endless cycle of failure and renewed hope..." It ends without much hope, and that's how a lot of people feel. Including me, and you probably as well. At the end, you say how stubborn you are, to keep doing the cycle of failure and then hope. I know that cycle very well.... Good poem. Well written. I feel like it rings a sad, mournful bell in my heart whenever I read it...
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stealthyninja21 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Ah~we're all so tired, exhausted, and drained. Lovely poem.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Agreed me especially since job applications are opening soon and I need to apply to everything ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Dawnfad Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i can relate. lol
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoyin' :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Forsaken-Blue Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
I'm a stubborn sod too lol. Love it! Will have to get me one of them books XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Please so, I'd be forever grateful ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Student General Artist
I know this all too well. Sometimes I give up, sometimes I don't. It depends on what I'm doing and how tired I am. Anyway, the imagery of the poem was amazing, keep up the wonderful work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye :3 Thank ye fer enjoyin' it :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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smokedragon Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
It certainly appeals to the way I've been feeling lately. "Morning? What's morning?" "Morning is anytime you wake up after finally falling asleep."
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwaaha ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Adam-2-Angelz Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
I'm tired right now. I can relate to this because I feel like listening to "How You Remind Me" by Nickelback. :sleepy:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
...Nickleback? *Quietly walk away*

Just kidding, glad you could relate ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Adam-2-Angelz Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
You're welcome! :XD:
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wr0 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
---E lol i'm tired too, but everyone in real-life and online is is what keeps me going! love you guys! :icongakulukaglompplz:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye ^^ xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm stubborn. But mostly I have a group of people who will kindly kick my a** if I even hint of giving in. I love them all.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
BWahaha fair enough :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SonikkuFan94 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Describes exactly how I feel...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Glad t' know that ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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wcninja11 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The words are so descriptive and relatable... Fantastic.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Lunacella Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcrydesuplz:Just so beautifully done. . .
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Writer
I be very glad ye enjoyed it friend :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Lunacella Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconyea-plz:
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist
Well done.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stubborn bastards get stuff done.
Am I right?

Shot glass poems?
I shall give it a "shot".

"I'll have what he's having."
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Clever indeed xD Try it out if you like, they're interesting to do :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I bet. . . maybe I'll make a 101 shot glasses XD

Nah. . . I don't have the time to do that.
Maybe I do, but still. But I would raise my glass in a toast to your 50 shots~! XD
Let's see who gets "drunk" quicker. . . I'm placing my bets with you, Captain. I am not one to hold my liquor. ( or at least, I believe I don't. Never actually tried. . . )
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist
Sounds awful Cap ;) I'll give it a shot wont I?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Go right ahead ;3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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