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This Is All About You:

Most people giving you advice, might take a quote from a book

Most people giving you advice, have never had a real look

So from someone who's been watching, let me lay my heart bare

I want to show you all the special things, about the girl for whom I care

She always does her very best, no matter how tough the task

Even when she's struggling, she puts on a brave mask

She's always trying to learn new things, just for a chance to make you proud

She can be a little bit quiet, but I think that's better than being loud

She's not the very best in sports, I know she can be kind of a klutz

But she smiles and goes on anyway, now that takes a lot of guts...

She gets embarassed pretty easily and gets far too nervous to talk

But I know she'd like it if we held hands, whenever we went for a walk

She doesn't need a lot of pretty things, she just wants someone who cares

I bet she'd like to have someone, whom she knew would always be there

I remember when she tried to cook...yeah that first time was really bad

Burnt toast and scrambled shells...man that was really sad

But you know she practiced every day, because she wanted to give you a box

That was full of all your favourite things, I guess that must have rocked

But in the end she never got to you and so I think I'll take this chance

To steal this lovely lady's heart if she'd simply spare me a glance

So tick your answer:
[] Yes
[] No
[] I just met you and this is crazy, but if I made you laugh then call me maybe?

-Chen Yuan Wen, 16th September 2012
If you smiled or lol'd, please fave it ^^

Author's Comment:

Alright so, I'm a dark poet...in general...in fact the next pieces I'm preparing are 'Whispering to Lucifer' and 'Lamb of God'. Well those are the tentative titles.

But anyway, the point I want to make is this. Even if we are dark, there are times when we should smile and be happy and enjoy ourselves. So amidst the slew of dark emotions I'm seeing being constantly thrown head-first onto DA, I thought I would try to release a nice romantic piece, but...

IT FAILED DESU! :icondesuplz: I'M TERRIBLE AT ROMANCE!

So in the end, I turned it around using the one-line format and switched it up into sort of a cheesy comical love-poem which I would use if I were friendzoned around 6 years ago (when I was 16). Unfortunately now my style is very different and I'm very straight forward about things like love ^^;

Anyway, enjooooy the cuteness...or the fail...whichever you like best xD.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Oppa Pirate Style! Oppa Pirate Style:

Chen Chen Chen Chen, Chen is pirate style!
Chen Chen Chen Chen, Chen is pirate style!

Stick-on tattoos and a Captain's hat makes me a player
My pirate theme is 'Raining Blood' by a band that's known as Slayer
But let's realise the fact: I've got no beard, I'm just that cool
I'm like Monkey D. Luffy when I drown in a kiddie pool

Cause I'm a guy!
The type that sails along the seven seas, a pirate guy
With a black fedora hat I use to tease, a pirate guy
Got so much swag I cure the love disease, a pirate guy
I'm a pirate guy!

So heyo- Pretty ladies I need to know...I need to know
Would you get aboard my ship and dr
Aren't You Ashamed Yet? Aren't You Ashamed Yet?:

A Mask
Truly an object of mystique and mystery
A simple device, with a painted layer
That conceals a face of rotting worms

Oh, I'm sorry, was I supposed to overlook it?
Let me rephrase it in a more appropriate manner
You are a cowardly, pathetic, miserable, filthy
Unintelligent, soul-sucking, perfidious, bag of rotting worms

You who once held my respect, you who were once my friend
you shared in my secrets and you shared in my dreams
But in the end, it was the lies
The horrible, filthy lies that spew forth from your tainted lips...

I guess it was a simple decision
I had no need to keep up this facade
an
Immortal Butterfly Immortal Butterfly:

I remember the Immortal Butterfly
Translucent wings that drank from the sky
Glittering dust would fall with every flap
Like warm tears dripped upon my tiny back

I would always chase this butterfly
as it makes its way across the sky
When I look I feel as though I can forget
The painful needles that twist into my back

I would always dream of this butterfly
and I wonder if I could ride it and fly in the sky
When I dream about it, I don't regret
Not being able to leave this tiny bed

Sometimes I can't see the butterfly
My vision turns grey like a stormy sky
I get scared during those times, because it makes me thi
You're The Drug That Keeps Me You're the Drug That Keeps Me:

You've got me twisting on the edge
and I beg to stay...
I know I should quit
but I can't walk away...
You're the drug that keeps me whole
when I'm feeling cold
When I'm feeling cold
You've got me in your hold!

EVERYTIME I WALK YOU BRING ME RIGHT BACK HERE
A HUNDRED TIMES OR MORE IT'S GETTING REALLY UNCLEAR
DO YOU LIKE TO FUCK WITH ALL MY HOPES AND INNER FEAR
OR MAYBE CUT ME DOWN SO YOU KNOW THAT I'LL KEEP YOU NEAR?

A hundred times, a hundred pages
twelve different masks and a thousand stages
You've got me beggin' for more
out in the rain at your door
I'm not a man, I'm just your little whore

A


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Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

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THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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I really enjoyed reading this :)
As a fellow "poet" well I'm just an amateur but I know a lot of good poems,
I realized that even small observances can create a threshold for feelings and poems.
I've created a lot and each had a back story, your poem was very frank but at the same time I find it deep as well.
Some parts can because a song and I like that :D
For Vision, I see your intention and you have put it out really wonderfully, Originality, though many works have been about admirers yours had something some poems do have a good message.
Your good rhyming technique is good but you need to work on syllables I guess ( in My opinion because if they have equal syllables it sounds good)
And Impact, in my country "Tinamaan" means we got hit with something also in a way 'Impact' to our feelings, so yah... You got me in my feels :)
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-This is really special, somehow i related to my childhood, it’s very original how you describe it instead of a love poem you show your love words by saying why (in this particular case seeing on a character/author point of view) what make love that girl.

-This poem has a very unique way to bring up the friendship in love, what make the reader even more connected to this love situation.


-- For me your work gives me a well notice of your tallent as writer, showing that you can work in difrent issues an themes being at the same time unique and original.
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ChristineAnne25 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I looked up "friendzone" in deviantART and found this! :meow:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha is that so? Well that's interesting xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Queen-Of-The-Night99 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is really sweet. especially from a girls point of veiw:heart::)
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ChristineAnne25 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa, that was a good read. I think I'll read more of your poems. :clap:
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FrozenAngelBrony Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
oh my gosh ~!!! i adore this !!! like you wrote this and.... its like, MARRY MEEEE~~!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Professional Writer
bwahaha, sorrrry I has a girl that I love very much :3

2 year anniversary coming soon xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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FrozenAngelBrony Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
aaawww!!! how cute XDD I'l just go be forever alone somewhere else...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
xD N'awww don't be sad :3 We can be friends xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
[] Yes
[] No
[x] I just met you and this is crazy, but if I made you laugh then call me maybe?

looool the romantic is here! raise all the curtains!
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