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These Words Aren't Pretty:

My verses are ugly and I admit to the fact
I can't use pretty language when I'm working with rap
Because the things that I write, are just the things that I feel
I ain't an Edgar Allan Poe or a Danielle Steel

And I'll be honest with you, I've got an envy inside
Because some poets got a flow that's as smooth as the tide
I read some stuff that they write, it's just so dope I ignite
Burning shame and my anger at the beautiful sight

And like birds of a feather, they're flocking together
These poets are the Gods and I'm nailed by the weather
But as the rain pours down, lightning resound;
I try to write pretty words but my lips remain bound

So deeply silenced by fear - the darkness I hear,
Afraid to be unloved by the ones I hold dear
I've hit the limit of time; my lyrical crime
These words that I've lived are just turning to grime.

So I wish I had their talent; just a sliver of that
If their skill was a mountain then I've broken my back
It's like the city of Gotham, where my poetry bleeds
I'm just the poet they've got, but not the one they need...


-Chen Yuan Wen, 21st January 2013
Aye maties,

After a long break, I be back. Honestly the recent stress has left me unable to write and during those days I'd see all the other poets writing beautiful things and I'd feel envious.

I tried to imitate it and failed, but that's when I realised that I should do what I'm good at, because the difference in my style is what makes it unique. In addition to being a horror and fantasy poet, I am (probably more than anything) an urban poet.

What I write is what is real and the streets will always be a part of me and my work. Thankfully though, I don't walk them with a cigarette in my mouth anymore.

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Captain, you done it again, both amused and impressed me simultaneously. Yes, your writings are "ugly" but they are straightforward, which is to your credit. Nobody can be Edgar Allen Poe, although I tried a few times. Danielle Steele I haven't read yet. Nonetheless, you have that knack that I have read in not too many writers in my acquaintance, and I wish to go on reading.

The first couplet is your usual slanted rhyme, and I appreciate that.
Stanza 3 begins both with the old proverb and that you sued it as a "feminine" or internal rhyme. The remainder is you, tried and true.
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I can't believe I have to re-write this thing several times, due to me accidentally pressing the escape key when I was trying to get my laptop screen to work.

Anyway, this is a feeling I am incredibly familiar with, as whenever I write something and consider it to be good, I would then read something by Kurt Vonnegut or Stephen King, and then I would come to the crushing realization that compared to them, I'm a mere hack who's probably wasting his own time.

And I remember this feeling of envy well, especially when I try my hand on writing stories or song lyrics, it seems as if compared to my inspirations, my pieces lacked the flow and rich prose so prevalent in their works, that it is nothing but a poor imitation of the original.

Sometimes, I wonder what would happen if my favorite author stumble upon any of my works, he would probably dismiss me as an amateur and they would tell me to stop writing, and all the while I would just pray to even have even a tenth of their writing skill.

Excellent job, Captain. Excellent.
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Maj0rMareMolester Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I haven't been on in soooo long and so this was like a straight up present for my return xD Amazing job captain, I really liked the Batman part (and the rest of it too) :D
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Amazingly written :3
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SmileyNikkflipping Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Very cleaver , entertaining and beautiful =]
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I watch a lot of poets and different artists. I've only got three that truly inspire me, you, *BittersweetObsession, and ~Eonlie There are others that I wish I could write like, but you three are the ones I look up to.

What I like about this piece, is that it can relate to a lot of stuff. When I was reading this through, it made me think on how I've changed. I used to be a lot different. Something happened, like nothing bad or anything, but it did get me into a bit of trouble with some friends, and my friend sat me down and talked to me about it. Looking back, it was only this summer past, but I've changed a lot. I remember I kept saying I was gonna, but never really did when I tried to, and then one day, it was like, hey! I'm completely different! When did this happen?

hehe Long comment is long.
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turtlemelon17 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Oh my goodness! Chills!! I absolutely love this so much! This is so real and completely genuine...:clap: In fact... I think I will ruminate on this for awhile :chew: Magnifico!
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kalic00 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is awesome
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is fantastic! For what it's worth, I tend to be the "pretty word" poet but often wish I could loosen up a bit and write with a more current flare, as you have done. It felt liberating reading it, despite your words describing otherwise. Great job! :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
poetic batman ... hahahahah funny concept :P :D
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Mr-White-And-Blue Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student General Artist
your perfect word just pierced my heart,
pulp fiction style, struck from the start.
hard core rythm and a sexy soul,
suffice to say you reached your goal.

lol i just came up with a little verse, your creativity is pretty overwhelming, and im just standing here wowed by people better than me.
Thanks for brightening my day, im happy now.
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CandyHeartSweetness Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I LOVE THIS! It's amazing, and actually when I read the word "rap", I thought what this would sound like if I rap while I read this. Anyway, great job! :D
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