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These Words Aren't Pretty:

My verses are ugly and I admit to the fact
I can't use pretty language when I'm working with rap
Because the things that I write, are just the things that I feel
I ain't an Edgar Allan Poe or a Danielle Steel

And I'll be honest with you, I've got an envy inside
Because some poets got a flow that's as smooth as the tide
I read some stuff that they write, it's just so dope I ignite
Burning shame and my anger at the beautiful sight

And like birds of a feather, they're flocking together
These poets are the Gods and I'm nailed by the weather
But as the rain pours down, lightning resound;
I try to write pretty words but my lips remain bound

So deeply silenced by fear - the darkness I hear,
Afraid to be unloved by the ones I hold dear
I've hit the limit of time; my lyrical crime
These words that I've lived are just turning to grime.

So I wish I had their talent; just a sliver of that
If their skill was a mountain then I've broken my back
It's like the city of Gotham, where my poetry bleeds
I'm just the poet they've got, but not the one they need...


-Chen Yuan Wen, 21st January 2013
Aye maties,

After a long break, I be back. Honestly the recent stress has left me unable to write and during those days I'd see all the other poets writing beautiful things and I'd feel envious.

I tried to imitate it and failed, but that's when I realised that I should do what I'm good at, because the difference in my style is what makes it unique. In addition to being a horror and fantasy poet, I am (probably more than anything) an urban poet.

What I write is what is real and the streets will always be a part of me and my work. Thankfully though, I don't walk them with a cigarette in my mouth anymore.

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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:iconmichel-le-fou:
Captain, you done it again, both amused and impressed me simultaneously. Yes, your writings are "ugly" but they are straightforward, which is to your credit. Nobody can be Edgar Allen Poe, although I tried a few times. Danielle Steele I haven't read yet. Nonetheless, you have that knack that I have read in not too many writers in my acquaintance, and I wish to go on reading.

The first couplet is your usual slanted rhyme, and I appreciate that.
Stanza 3 begins both with the old proverb and that you sued it as a "feminine" or internal rhyme. The remainder is you, tried and true.
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I can't believe I have to re-write this thing several times, due to me accidentally pressing the escape key when I was trying to get my laptop screen to work.

Anyway, this is a feeling I am incredibly familiar with, as whenever I write something and consider it to be good, I would then read something by Kurt Vonnegut or Stephen King, and then I would come to the crushing realization that compared to them, I'm a mere hack who's probably wasting his own time.

And I remember this feeling of envy well, especially when I try my hand on writing stories or song lyrics, it seems as if compared to my inspirations, my pieces lacked the flow and rich prose so prevalent in their works, that it is nothing but a poor imitation of the original.

Sometimes, I wonder what would happen if my favorite author stumble upon any of my works, he would probably dismiss me as an amateur and they would tell me to stop writing, and all the while I would just pray to even have even a tenth of their writing skill.

Excellent job, Captain. Excellent.
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Maj0rMareMolester Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I haven't been on in soooo long and so this was like a straight up present for my return xD Amazing job captain, I really liked the Batman part (and the rest of it too) :D
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Amazingly written :3
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SmileyNikkflipping Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Very cleaver , entertaining and beautiful =]
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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I watch a lot of poets and different artists. I've only got three that truly inspire me, you, *BittersweetObsession, and ~Eonlie There are others that I wish I could write like, but you three are the ones I look up to.

What I like about this piece, is that it can relate to a lot of stuff. When I was reading this through, it made me think on how I've changed. I used to be a lot different. Something happened, like nothing bad or anything, but it did get me into a bit of trouble with some friends, and my friend sat me down and talked to me about it. Looking back, it was only this summer past, but I've changed a lot. I remember I kept saying I was gonna, but never really did when I tried to, and then one day, it was like, hey! I'm completely different! When did this happen?

hehe Long comment is long.
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turtlemelon17 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Oh my goodness! Chills!! I absolutely love this so much! This is so real and completely genuine...:clap: In fact... I think I will ruminate on this for awhile :chew: Magnifico!
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kalic00 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is awesome
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is fantastic! For what it's worth, I tend to be the "pretty word" poet but often wish I could loosen up a bit and write with a more current flare, as you have done. It felt liberating reading it, despite your words describing otherwise. Great job! :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
poetic batman ... hahahahah funny concept :P :D
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Mr-White-And-Blue Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student General Artist
your perfect word just pierced my heart,
pulp fiction style, struck from the start.
hard core rythm and a sexy soul,
suffice to say you reached your goal.

lol i just came up with a little verse, your creativity is pretty overwhelming, and im just standing here wowed by people better than me.
Thanks for brightening my day, im happy now.
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CandyHeartSweetness Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I LOVE THIS! It's amazing, and actually when I read the word "rap", I thought what this would sound like if I rap while I read this. Anyway, great job! :D
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Umioko Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This applies to most people so it's easy to relate to.
Nice job Captain! c:
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BlueLightningStrike Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
beaaauutiful
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Aslehill12 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good job!
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xX-JouJou-Xx Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Photographer
BRILLIANT. I LOVE THIS.
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pixiegirl210 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
im not a poet im a song writer but i see what u mean. the hardest part isnt the writing its what you are trying to show people about urself in ur own way. through that is when it flows through ur body mind heart and soul ever changing the way u think and through that you are being YOU!
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pixiegirl210 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i aso wouldnt mind it u looked at my journal entries and see what i mean
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Bringin-Crazy-Back Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Is it bad that Dan Bull sings your raps in my head?
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number1one Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
WordOfChen -- I like you writing. FAV. it as well. As a fellow writer I wouldn't mind you looking over my piece and giving your thought and opinion on it.
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is great! I love it. :)
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goodbye316 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
i really liked i actually started rapping it in my head, but for some reason i kept replacing "as smooth as the tide." with as steady as the rain. i'm not saying that i don't like it the way it is because i really do like it. my brain just does stuff like that sometimes. it can be hard to read things lol. but i think you have a lot of talent. :)
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iGeekCharming Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Glad to see you're back Capn'.
Recently something like this literally just happened to me.
I came to the same realization that you're good at what you're good at, and that's what you should write about.
I dig the vibe from this piece.
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SierraPsyche Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
DAMN!

I really really love this one!
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PrinceNuisance Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
WOW!!!!!!!!!
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Willow-pool Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Astounding, they flow brilliantly and they rhyme perfectly. You are very talented
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Very relatable.
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ProfessorProficient Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It sounds much, much better out loud than it does it my head. And you know what? All of this makes so much more sense to me. I found line 6 to be ironic, because from reading this out loud you have an excellent flow.

Here you are in control.

And it had to be the title that drew me here of all things as well as the line: "I can't use pretty language when I'm working with rap". Somehow I can't help that the mainstream "world's" view of modern hip-hop was a factor. Or maybe that's just me.

Sweet shit, though.
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Fasold Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, gotta follow up my first impression here:
I have never before stopped and read a whole piece of poetry and liked it at the end, But this... I liked this from the start. It is really good.
Tried to rap it two times (I am surely not the first one to try it either.)
So glad to see something as good as this on the frontpage, that just makes me stop scrolling down.

Dude, I'm one of your new watchers.
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Fasold Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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AIR-IS-LIFE Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How could you be insecure of you work?? You have a poem on the front page at least once a week! I wish I had half of your skills!

This is really good. X3 I was sort of reading it like a rap
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Lille-Hime Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I usually don't read poetry on DA, partly because soe of it doesn't sound well and partly because I want to writ. I want to be able to say the things others do, but everytime I write it feels like plagerism. So take it as a compliment when I say, yours are the only lyrics I read ^^ Usually I stumble across them by default, because a word or a title attracts my attention, yet without fail you are the author of the pieces I click on. Just thought you should know ^^ and I still love the whole pirate thing; think I've said it before xD
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xUnderWatchx Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist
I actually rapped this. This is possibly one of the coolest things ever, and I think it's great that you put your thoughts into this xD
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sweetlove123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
OMG its awesome..
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BlackKidPrevails Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
This is so very awesome! I'm totally watching you. Just so you know, you are a great poet. I look up to people like you!
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zer0death123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
im trying to rap this out loud by first i must remember it since its so good!
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Rhapps Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Words like these are enough to move a man to tears my friend. You're good, and if your true humility is reflected in this rhyme then you're only gonna get much, much better. I hope to read more from you.
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Kimisuu Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How do i create a liturature?
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lyssaLuv Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Faved that so hard.
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samanthadb Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
this is so amazing
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Greyest-Wolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I rapped this in Eminem's voice. >.<
I loved it. :D
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Stray-Tail Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
I've always been one of those people who likes flowery language, but I love this ^w^ Great job, great meaning.
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was a little put off by the first stanza, but after that it became a roaring wave of awesomeness. I especially loved that last stanza. This is a great piece of work, and a fantastic tribute to those you wish you could write like. I feel like all writers have other writers they look up to (I certainly do) and we never feel as accomplished. Don't let it get you down, and keep writing beautiful works like this one :)
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cherrygal96 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This makes me think of my rapper friend. You're good! :D
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cityprincess01 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013   General Artist
Beautiful work!
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HushShu Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Seriously, I don't know how to rap (I do love it though) but I literally just "rapped" it out and because of how greatly structured it was, it just flew out pretty decently. I love it. The words are so honest and so free-- I feel the passion and emotions from them.
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alovesickman Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Damn good sir.
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athenagodofwisdom Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013   General Artist
amazing
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kigenco Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
I hate rap but this touched me man, if this was a song id listen to it :) hell id love it
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wr0 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Digital Artist
---E Yes, that's right. Just like drawings, each and everyone's poems are unique!~ Don't be afraid to draw or write what you feel. Because poetry is art as well. :la:
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KaixShadow Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can relate to this
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wallbie Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Totally dig the allusion to TDK at the end. This is one of the few poems I've stopped to actually read on here or anywhere.
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