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The Way We Live:

We all have our own little struggles;
Pushing on forward as the tragedies double.
A life led with pain and exhaustion too immense,
I'm pushing down walls as my muscles go tense.

But these are the words that you'll never hear me spit.
I'd never say I'm 'giving up' or if I should 'quit'.
I'm really freaking stupid so just tell it to my face,
And even then I'd never give up the right to race.

I'm like a lone arrow drawn and shot from a bow,
Blustered by the winds of all the things I don't know.
I'd never figure out if I'd reach the final mark,
But I know that I'd never lose my glowing inner spark.

And that's all it takes just to keep this body going.
With calloused hands in this ocean I'm still rowing
Searching for some land out amidst a sea of black;
A wandering gypsy bearing burdens on his back.


- Chen Yuan Wen, 14th January 2013
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Alright pirate, real talk for a moment.

You know recently I've been kind of hitting the limit of my poetic style and whenever that happens I know that I've gotta rework myself to appeal more...or just fade away and I'm not quite ready to die yet.

So what I did was I called up some old buddies that I used to rap with. They're no longer into art but of course they were willing to help and we sort of got together to relive the old days when we were dreaming.

I then started pushing out some very personal raps like this one. I also realised that my style has changed a lot since I'm able to string things better and with almost minimal swearing. My goal someday is be like my favourite Korean rapper: Kang Gary or like the two main rappers from Big Bang: T.O.P and G-Dragon because their style is really amazing and I want to learn to do those non-aggressive non-gangsta style raps that can still connect with the crowd without being controversial or obscene.

So I hope you'll bear with me as I go back to basics because the best way to come up with something new is to go all the way back and start the journey right over again.

P.S. If this magically inspires you to try rapping. Spit at me in the comments, I'll try to reply asap. I really love to rap with other people and its a good test of skill to practice that way (or at least that's how I see it)


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[I apologize at first, because I had started but a sudden break in my connections interrupted me.]
Let me start with "scope of talent becomes the artist." Breach all subjects, use all styles and all means available. Until today, I never cease to enjoy your work. Here, you prove me again by using a Dickisian slanted rhyme couplet to open your poem. Then the remaining couplets are well-formed. So much for stylistics.Tone and mood are well-shown. The choice of words especially in some lines is clever The simile to the single drawn arrow was sharp, no puns intended. Another well-planned and well-penned work!
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Critique by TearsOfBlood22 Jan 14, 2013, 12:37:58 PM
This is good and like most of your work has a hidden meaning.
My only thing on this is a question: What meaning do you the writer get from it?

I wish you luck on more of these and hope that perhaps you will see what's out there for you... in this never ending sea of dreams

I loved this and the message I found in it was amazing the idea to keep pushing yourself and never give up is always a good thing to write about.

Keep this up and you will be loved by many and hated by few.
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ThexSilverxWolf Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Truly strong words :) Good job
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly for enjoying this piece ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ThexSilverxWolf Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
You're welcome
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Such beautiful and inspirational words; everyone could benefit from reading this!!!!
And don't give up!!!! NEVER GIVE UP!!!!!!!!!!:D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Agreed, if we display out willpower, we can achieve ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Totally!!!:D
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Wonderful poem! This reminds me of the quote "You only fail if you don't get back up." Anyway, keep up the great work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoyin' it me friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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otakuusagui Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful, and very inspiring :3.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoyin' it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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