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The Way We Live:

We all have our own little struggles;
Pushing on forward as the tragedies double.
A life led with pain and exhaustion too immense,
I'm pushing down walls as my muscles go tense.

But these are the words that you'll never hear me spit.
I'd never say I'm 'giving up' or if I should 'quit'.
I'm really freaking stupid so just tell it to my face,
And even then I'd never give up the right to race.

I'm like a lone arrow drawn and shot from a bow,
Blustered by the winds of all the things I don't know.
I'd never figure out if I'd reach the final mark,
But I know that I'd never lose my glowing inner spark.

And that's all it takes just to keep this body going.
With calloused hands in this ocean I'm still rowing
Searching for some land out amidst a sea of black;
A wandering gypsy bearing burdens on his back.


- Chen Yuan Wen, 14th January 2013
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Alright pirate, real talk for a moment.

You know recently I've been kind of hitting the limit of my poetic style and whenever that happens I know that I've gotta rework myself to appeal more...or just fade away and I'm not quite ready to die yet.

So what I did was I called up some old buddies that I used to rap with. They're no longer into art but of course they were willing to help and we sort of got together to relive the old days when we were dreaming.

I then started pushing out some very personal raps like this one. I also realised that my style has changed a lot since I'm able to string things better and with almost minimal swearing. My goal someday is be like my favourite Korean rapper: Kang Gary or like the two main rappers from Big Bang: T.O.P and G-Dragon because their style is really amazing and I want to learn to do those non-aggressive non-gangsta style raps that can still connect with the crowd without being controversial or obscene.

So I hope you'll bear with me as I go back to basics because the best way to come up with something new is to go all the way back and start the journey right over again.

P.S. If this magically inspires you to try rapping. Spit at me in the comments, I'll try to reply asap. I really love to rap with other people and its a good test of skill to practice that way (or at least that's how I see it)


-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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[I apologize at first, because I had started but a sudden break in my connections interrupted me.]
Let me start with "scope of talent becomes the artist." Breach all subjects, use all styles and all means available. Until today, I never cease to enjoy your work. Here, you prove me again by using a Dickisian slanted rhyme couplet to open your poem. Then the remaining couplets are well-formed. So much for stylistics.Tone and mood are well-shown. The choice of words especially in some lines is clever The simile to the single drawn arrow was sharp, no puns intended. Another well-planned and well-penned work!
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Critique by TearsOfBlood22 Jan 14, 2013, 12:37:58 PM
This is good and like most of your work has a hidden meaning.
My only thing on this is a question: What meaning do you the writer get from it?

I wish you luck on more of these and hope that perhaps you will see what's out there for you... in this never ending sea of dreams

I loved this and the message I found in it was amazing the idea to keep pushing yourself and never give up is always a good thing to write about.

Keep this up and you will be loved by many and hated by few.
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ThexSilverxWolf Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Truly strong words :) Good job
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly for enjoying this piece ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ThexSilverxWolf Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
You're welcome
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Such beautiful and inspirational words; everyone could benefit from reading this!!!!
And don't give up!!!! NEVER GIVE UP!!!!!!!!!!:D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Agreed, if we display out willpower, we can achieve ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Totally!!!:D
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Wonderful poem! This reminds me of the quote "You only fail if you don't get back up." Anyway, keep up the great work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoyin' it me friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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otakuusagui Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful, and very inspiring :3.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoyin' it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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otakuusagui Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
welcome,but thank YOU, actually x9.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   Writer
I love the inspiration this poem gives about never giving up even if you don't know where you are headed.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye, we all feel lost in life, but we can all move ahead ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
Normally I would be pessimistic and disagree. But I am happy today so: yes, we can.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
If yer pessimistic and disagree, then what we really need to do is have a sit down session and talk about yer problems. Once we tackle the root of the issues it be like shavin' out an aggressive plant growth bit by bit xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
The root of my problems is clinical depression and bipolar mood disorder, which cannot be shaved out only have something stuck on it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Hmmm, I suppose that is a problem (sorry for my slow reply, been journeying). I do wonder if there is a way to solve all that though :/ Well I wish there were at least

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013   Writer
Part of the solution is medication, then trying to change your thinking, but the problem will always be there.
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Wortakrobatin Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What a beautiful poem! It's inspiring to read your texts :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm glad you feel that way ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MissAshPYT Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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stealthyninja21 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student General Artist
This helped after a long day
I was reminded of G-Dragon's english rap that he does in the Alive tour concerts haha~
And I really like this rap cuz each line paints a clear image in my mind, really clever use of words. ^_^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye G-D is quite amazin' :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this a lot.
My only thing is this: How did you get this to submit for you under literature? I keep trying to do that with an uploaded document and it refuses to allow me to put it under literature! I even used a preview image to help me with it but it refuses! I need to know how you did that so I can avoid losing all the little things like centered text and such like you are.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
You use the add text function, but you'll lose centered text. It will be like writing in notepad and you'll have to do the bolding using html formatting codes ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*sigh* Well at least I'll be getting some coding practice then. That should help when I finally get around to building my game designs.

I like you WordofChen, you're cool. A lot cooler than me.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Nah mate, just a regular pirate. Ain't nothin' cool about that ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's got nothing to do with being a pirate. You just seem to have this natural coolness, especially with your work. I really feel amazed.

Um, would you actually give my work a read? I'd feel truly grateful if you did.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Sure, send me a link to the pieces you want reviewed via note. If it's poetry max is 3. Prose 1 and it may take awhile ^^

As for the natural coolness, thank you :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ok.

Here's a short story: [link]

And I have a couple poems you can read to: [link]
[link]

I also have a couple journals you can check out if you're interested, but I'll leave that up to you.

Be sure to comment what you think!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Send it as a note to my page please and I'll only be able to do the two poems due to my schedule ^^; (I won't be doing it instantly)

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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wr0 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
---E Awesome poetry!~ It's so powerful and encouraging! :la:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye, I'm very glad ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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wr0 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
---E No problemo, capitan! Yer welcome! :la:
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ApocalypticAya Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I don't trust my writing skills enough to rap, but I must say, I really enjoyed this :3. It's simple, fluent, and I know the feels attached to it ... so to speak XD.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, aye thank ye fer readin' an enjoyin' it ^^ I truly appreciate that :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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xxxWARGIRLxxx Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I wish I could write like you!!!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Tis easy t' write like me. There are many others who are better, which is probably why I have t' work harder xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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xxxWARGIRLxxx Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww I think you're pretty good! :hug:
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sundaygir1 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student General Artist
very beautiful, a true and compelling composition---very well done
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
My thanks, I'm very glad t' have ye enjoy this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The poem's great and I happy that you are willing to go back to the basics to improve something that you enjoy. I know some people who refuse to do that even when all they need is a few minor tune ups.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Well a lot of people feel that they can't let go of what's been done so far, but I on the other hand always love to go back to where it starts ^^

It gives me a chance to do over the whole thing

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Cheery-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
This piece reminded me of Hunger Games
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
My thanks, I'm really glad ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Cheery-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
im really glad you made it
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bro-mentum Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Really deep :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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bro-mentum Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ur an amazing writer:iconmerpplz:
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