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The Walk of Utter Shame:

My face is hidden by a blackened mask,
As I am taken to stand before the crowd.
Ripped from my face and cast aside,
My features burn in the glaring sun...

"Who amongst you will defend this man?"
I hear a soldier call.
"None of us sir!" The crowd shrieks back,
As to my knees I fall.

"Shame him!" The soldier cries,
As they begin to pelt me with rotten fruits,
"Maim him!" the people scream,
As they kick at me with mailed boots...

I shudder and writhe beneath the torture,
Too pained to even scream in fear.
For this is the punishment that I deserve,
For shaming the honour that I hold dear.

In anger, in rage, in emotions so dark,
I've carelessly denounced the work of my siblings...

Now I lie, in battered penance,
For only pain can ease the shameful sting...

Never did I think that I would fall,
But pride is arrogant dissonance.
Through penitent pain and suffering,
I have learned the value of reticence.

"Allow me to accept my shame and offer my apologies..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 29th February 2012
FAVING/COMMENTING/FEATURING/SHARING:
Hey there everyone. Please feel free to do one or all of the above. You will be thanked for it, so please help me in my career by doin' one of them ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Hey guys,

This piece was released because I'm very ashamed of having unintentional put down two authors. Even if they aren't aware of it.

It still is a black mark on my record, and being someone who stands up for others, it definitely wasn't something I want to do.

So here I am, to beg for forgiveness from everyone. I hope you can all forgive me.

A big thank you to :icondyronl: for teaching me what I need to be taught. ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Heartless Blossoms - [link]
They Told Us - [link]
My Eternal Curse - [link]
Surreal Reality - [link]
Self Righteous Suicide - [link]
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SheepRanchSniper Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
To my former friend-I assume you need some closure as well. Iwill never understand until you spell it out. Poems as riddles won't do,and it is frutratng and very unfair to me. Please find a way ro answer me directly. Again, I know that for you, the poems are the only way you can get this out, and you have written lines to te effect you are frustrated with me that I don't get ,what you see as clear revelations. Was it your father?, brother/s, father and brothers?How was your Do you want me to help?mother involved? Stood by and didnt do anything? Participated? You must get me to a certain point, so I can begin to understand, I feel your pain. Believe me, I do. But I need to know the circumstances to be able to relate to you. Dont you want me to know everything so I "get you" ? I myself.want to go through hypnosis, so I might be able to remember my abuse. up to you. I want to help. If you want me to, share.
Maybe that would enable us to be friends again. Or keep shutting me out. Look where that got us.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Professional Writer
I have no idea who you are mate ^^;

This was written a very long time ago and it was due to me unintentionally putting down two authors as was written in the comments :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
well personally i think guilt feels worse than shame, because inner pain hurts a lot, and worsens productivity.
well you can get back on path :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr possibly :3

Then again I'm walkin' right now :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
runnn runnnnn bounce
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, careful o' bouncin' too much lass :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
bouncing is bouncy fun
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InuskiXD Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww , great message ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Professional Writer
haha, thank you so much Ina ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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A1r2i3e4l5 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
Awww, my captain I hope that is not how you feel
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr no that be an old piece :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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KyraKilljoy Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
aaah it's ok already =3 hug??
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
:hugs: thank you ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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KyraKilljoy Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
btw i just made a new draw ^^ do u wanna be the first one to comment it ?? -puppy eyes-
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr link me :3 I'll do so ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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KyraKilljoy Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Checked it :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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NewShine Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mkay, capp'n, I be a goin with the Queen's English f'r the moment, if'n only fer it seem right an' proper when speakin o' the bones of it.

Look it ain't Shakespeare, but it wasn't trying to be. It's the same sort of poetry I get flitting through my head all the time; not an honest poem, more of a cute beat to a set of words. There are (or at least there were) quite a few coffee shops dedicated to that exact sort of thing (it's all about the beat, baby, keep the beat, the beat, with those magic fingers, those fingers that snap, snap, snap, while the words tap, tap, tap, on your tender ears, small and starving, baby, and wanting out of this cold, cold world... That sort of thing). It's not bad at all, I think, it's just not structured.

It has a good flow to it, if a bit uneven, but that happens with free verse and it helps in regards to grabbing the attention back. A slight change in the flow indicates a slight change in what's happening - what's being said or done or felt - and you've paired that shifting beautifully here.

More over, it works. I know this feeling; the one where you merely tuck your tail, duck your head and wait for the whipping you know you deserve. You don't wind up trying to get out of it, merely plead to get it over with. You're ashamed, you deserve it, you feel as if you're half an inch tall and you'll probably keep that tail tucked up a little while afterwards just to be sure that it's all good and finished. 'Please don't hurt me' thoughts quickly become 'please don't squish me' as you expect the pain; you know you messed up in some way to have earned it, you know that what's wrong is all your fault.

I think everyone's had that cowering sensation of it being your own fault before. And you describe it well enough here that I wound up feeling a little uncomfortable, if the truth's to come out. It's a bit of a tender subject for me.

You have a decent way of connecting the dots and a fairly good grasp on how to utilize the flow of words and rhythm to move the poem forward. It's not professional, no, but it is appealing, and you use the right words to get across the emotion - 'shrieks' instead of yells or calls, for instance, and 'hidden' rather than covered.

Like I said, it's not an old style professional, and nor is it meant to be. When you look at it for the way it was constructed it' easy to appreciate it for what it is. And to be honest, I've found a lot of times that the limits of that level of professional construction makes it difficult to retain the original sense that was meant to be put into the poem. Some of the best things I have ever read were automatic writings - words being used to follow raw thought and emotion as it comes, spilling the soul onto the paper for observation as layer after layer surfaces in purely unadulterated sensation.

Actually, in this instance I seem to have shown exactly how much of a struggle it can be for me; if brevity is known a the soul of wit, you can plainly see how much I struggle with this practice of physical speech myself. I have the same issue with other forms of art; while I can see it clearly and define what makes the perspective look off, for instance, and explain how the relation between A and B creates the problem and how either or both would need to be altered... I have no skill with which to fix it myself.

I can see, but I can not create.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly fer takin' the time ta give me this beautiful and long review. It's really great to know you cared enough about me work to analyze it in such detail

And you are right, it's not shakespeare but I can't be shakespeare. I'm a rapper and I think it's time I started being true to the teen I used to be when I looked up to Eminem, not for his lifestyle, but for the way he could string so many words together and make it sound like magic.

Tonight I'll be releasing a half rap half song piece and I hope everyone will enjoy it.

In 2 weeks, Haruhi and I will be doing a joined rap poetry album, 14 tracks/pieces delivered over the course of a week from the both us.

That's going to be our comeback on the scene ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :CaptainJackplz:
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dyronl Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012   Writer
Chen you've been true to your word from the get go. This is indeed your apology as it should be, honest, raw, true. You show both that you can learn your lesson, and grow from it in one stroke.
I'm proud of you, and I won't stand at your back in the throngs of your followers :worship: but I will gladly stand at your side as your friend and compatriot.
Keep shedding your skin Chen, and keeping tacking it up on the wall. Never be afraid to show just how much you can evolve.

In closing,
Ya done well kid, and ya earned yourself at least one fire forged friend. :onfire: :handshake:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye dyronl, I be glad ta have ye as a friend. I'll need it in the coming storms, but I'll sail through it stronger.

I'm not done payin' fer the past, but one day, there'll be clear skies ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :CaptainJackplz:
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dyronl Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012   Writer
That there will Chen, and though you man not be paid up in full, I wrote up a little piece ta let you know I'm proud of ya
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I've read it, faved and commented. Thank ye so much fer this ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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NewShine Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Eminem was me favored minstrel once upon a wave. xD Shall be int'restin ta see ye works!

'Twas a rather long review, an' I'd imagine a bit troublesome ta wade through. That weren't my intentions none, but s'long as ye've no plight over it then full sail, me hearty. Takin it fer what it be, it's still a wond'rous piece. ^-^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
ARrr twas no trouble at all ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :CaptainJackplz:
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Manigran Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful poem.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrrr thank ye kindly. I've got plenty of past ta be ashamed for, but I'll slowly redeem myself ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :CaptainJackplz:
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Manigran Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think we all redeem ourselves at some time in our lives. Good luck!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Manigran Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so welcome.
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Mthrof2 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
I really like this poem, very visual and emotional. Thank you for sharing it :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrrr thank ye kindly :3

It reflect me past =P

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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jessdel Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This was expressed very well. I could feel the emotion!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye very much fer that ^^ I truly appreciate ya readin' this :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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klevry1 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well done, the meaning is clear and sharp, i hope many a person will see this and learn the price of arrogance, well done chen, well done
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
ARrr thank ye Olivia. I do appreciate that :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Dawnfad Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
1 word indeed
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr me deepest thanks :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Dawnfad Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
np friend
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pete61kiss Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Very good piece!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye ^^. Ye commented twice, but I'll thank ye both times :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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pete61kiss Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Very good!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye kindly :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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ProtoRepublic Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Here are some quotes from Chen, guys. Also, what is with this pathetic circle jerk you guys have going on? You fave Chen and he faves everything you've submitted, so you feel compelled to defend him? It's disingenuous and really pathetic.

These are actual quote from Chen. They can be found with a nice explanation of the extent of his douche baggery here: [link]


"Here are 2 samples of my writing. If this doesn't qualify me (for eliteliterature group), then you may keep your membership. I also will not be filling out that form because, quite honestly it's boring. All you have to know I am one of the best."

"While I admire your arrogance. The only time you should give me advice on rhyming is when your views beat mine."

He said that to someone who provided positive and judicious feedback on one of his poems. He then went on to say:

"Like I said keep your group membership to yourself. But don't try to give advice to someone FAR more successful than you will ever be. Take your pathetic, bellow 100 views on poetry and put it in your elitist group... Come compete with me when you break 200 on a poem. Maybe I'll let you lick my boots."

I've highlighted my favorite of Chen's insightful and reasonable comments.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Linked it in my journal. I won't run xD

-Chen Yuan Wen, now Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Kinexuru Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aye,even if it is somethin' Captain wrote this in shame, it's still be a very beautiful poem. Strange why I can't write one meself,though.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr, try it fer yourself. Ya never know ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Kinexuru Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, if I knew a lot words, maybe I could. Strange thing I could write fiction, but poetry never did seem come out nicely.. I be thinkin' it strange why it doesn't work out when fiction does XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr well Ailin, tha best ya can do is ta try :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Always room fer improvemant, mate. Remember, the first step in overcoming any problem is admitting that there IS a problem. Yer on the right track. The next step is discerin' if ye need help an' askin' fer it.
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