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The Poet:

He smiles as he sees her sleeping
& gently covers her with a blanket.
He goes to the window and looks out
watching snow fall, ever so slowly...

He sees people in the streets,
Chatting, walking. Some happy,
Others sad. Hearts beating,
Hearts broken; some warm, some cold.

He looks back at her, as she stirs in bed.
A yawn from her, brings another smile to him:
"How cute," he chuckles as he strokes her head.
He runs his fingers through her hair and is content.

Yet, even if he is happy here, again -
He is drawn to that window and finds himself
Staring out at the street and watching;
Marveling at the disparity and wondering -

Isn't there something that I can do?
Isn't there a better way for us all?

He looks back at her, sleeping peacefully;
He thinks about the future and sighs.

He wants a better world for her,
One where she would always be safe,
But unfortunately, he has no power.
He is just one man with little to his name.

He picks up a piece of paper, one found lying on the floor.
Blank as it is, he begins to imagine & soon, he finds it filled;
Riddled with his feelings, his soul, his words and his hope.
Suddenly he realises, a twinkle in his eye -

He knows what to do now, so simple it had been all along,
For though his words may not be heard by everyone;
Perhaps they might be read and - if enough people were to read them -
Then perhaps they too would change for the better.




Just as I have changed for you...




-Chen Yuan Wen, 31st December 2012
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Arr maties,

Since this is th' first new year I'll be spendin' with ye all, I thought that I'd finally share a little bit o' meself. As ye know I do write about me feelings, but not about me personally. Of course, this story poem I've posted is still fictional, but it has a basis of truth; one that relates t' me. O' course I'll leave it at that and have ye fill in any remainin' blanks on yer own, but more or less I had a reason fer startin' the Word o' Chen and I'm pleased to say that it's grown wonderfully these past 9 months.

Soon, me very first e-book will be released. The plan is t' have it ready by the 5th of January. We're already in the editing phase, so I can certainly say that time is on my side. If all goes well then th' first weekend o' the new year is when ye'll see me book uploaded on SMASHWORDS.

O' course ye'll be notified by means o' me journal and via me new store section on DA where I'll put up the covers for the books and have links directin' t' th' place where they're sold. Remember they'll be E-BOOKS so they're very much cheaper than books in print and o' course there is no shippin' and waitin' fer delivery and all that. I hope ye'll all look forward to it.

As for today, I'm happy t' be raisin' me glass o' grape juice t' the new year. Let's set sail fer even grander seas, fer with yer help I'll definitely conquer all seven of 'em. Now, are ya with me lads and lasses, or would ye rather stay snug at home?

HYAR HAR!

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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Whoa. This is just plain awesome. I honestly have to say, this is probably the best piece of poetry I've seen in my 16 years of existence. It's very calm and serene, and it appeals to my better nature. The narrator got his new life simply from his surroundings and imagination. Everyone should have this talent; unfortunately, this isn't so. These few lines have me in awe, as the style and dictation really add up to the tenderness of the story. And here I am, sitting behind this piece of glass, wondering how I can make a name for myself. This has given me inspiration, and I can't wait to read more from you.
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Now, keep in mind that I am writing as someone who has very little to no familiarity at all with poetry as an art form, so keep in mind I am unable to provide an in-depth criticism about your poem.

I do have a complaint with the use of the ampersand (&) at the line "gently covers her with a blanket." In my opinion, if you used a the word "and", it would be more effective, and would look natural.

I had to re-read it once, just to confirm that it's a father-daughter relationship, and it seems to be a beaufiul one, especially as the father's only desire is for his daughter to grow up in a safe, stable environment, but he knows that he is unable to do so, but he found hope and refuge in putting ink on paper, and hopes it would change the world for the better for his daughter.

It seems pretty heartwarming to me.
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Krillin1983 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i am impressed by this poetry a lot its powerful and i liked the message in it and agree with it deeply too i will keep a eye on your work:)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
THank ye kindly, I hope t' impress ye further ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Almost reminds me of the poet and the pendulum by nightwish ... and sahara by nightwish ... then again thats just me :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Hehe, glad it reminded you of so much ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Amazing work as always 1_~
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
My deepest thanks for enjoying this piece (even though it took an hour to reply) T^T

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   General Artist
Absolutely marvellous! Great work! :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly, I'm very glad ye enjoyed it ^^

Did ye know I've just released me e-book? O' course I'm shameless promotin' it so come check it out eh? :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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realitycheck7423 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
I love it!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly ^^ If ye'd like t' support me check out my e-book and if yer keen, then buy a copy eh? It's cheap :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SolsticeCarol Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
I love this. Simply like that... words can make wars but they can also end it.
Poetry FTW. ♥
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye indeed, thank ye fer readin' and enjoyin' it.

I've just released my e-book so it would really help if ye came and supported it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aye, cap'n, I'll be sailin' with ye!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye, I appreciate th' compliment. Speakin' o' which me e-book just came out so if ye'd like, check it out ^^

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I saw, and I intend to purchase it. ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks if ye do matie ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Wonderful poem, it was very heartwarming to me, even though there wasn't as much detail as there usually is. Great job!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye me fine friend :3

Speakin' o' which, E-BOOK just came out :3 Spare it a glance eh?

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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augumon05 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
very well, put together, as for the second critic, i think she left out 1/2 to 1 stars in the impact part. This conveys to me, that one will have their own way of improving the world for those they care about.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye, well everyone grades on their own scale yah? Either way I didn't go much fer impact on this one as a more muted feeling that warms ye up slowly was much better :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have to say, I wasn't sure how I felt about the whole poem until the last line. It added a beautiful sentimentality and personal touch that nicely fell in pace with the tone of the rest of the poem. I don't know how much of this is true, but I hope for the sweet lasting message, the majority is! :heart:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye well I'm glad that it came across nicely ^^

Thank ye fer enjoyin' it me friend :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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independentstate Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I have goosebumps. This poem is beautiful... I especially liked the "hearts beating/some warm, some cold" line. It just seemed to bring out the fragility of human nature somehow... beautiful :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoyin' that line and this poem. Glad t' know ye heart was warmed ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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alwayscherished Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Well. This is lovely.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Ask-Mary-Ib Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Beautiful~

So lovely! Keep up the good work~
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye, thank ye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Ask-Mary-Ib Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Aye, you're welcome~
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destrakon Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
paints one hell of picture in your mind and i gotta say its really nice
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Twas me pleasure t' present it to ya ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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BreXAnimeXManga Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Oh my this is so deep and tender!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer findin' it so ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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BreXAnimeXManga Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You are most welcome and happy new year!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
T' you too lass ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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BreXAnimeXManga Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Thanks Cap'n!XD
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Writer
Excellent, work cap'n. The heart is always from which the best works are produced, for their words ring truer than the fact that the sky is blue, the grass is green, and that we always seem to have no rum in the storehouses. I eagerlly await your next work.

P.S: You manage to sneak in some of the dizzy drink for New Year's? Or did the ninja pirates nab it all again?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye no drinkin' this year, stayed sober t' enjoy the gentle breeze and the stars in the night sky.

Indeed the heart does better under those conditions ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
Couldn't have said it better myself, cap'n. Now if you'll excuse me, I have some ibuprofen to take. I've got to stop staying up till dawn playing Minecraft...
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vocaloidanimefan Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That was great!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks fer that :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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vocaloidanimefan Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No problem it was great!
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MarijaPeci Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
I like to read the critiques. Their view is so different from mine! But.. I am not sure, if I just didn't read it (The Poem) carefully or what, but it didn't gave me the impact, as the last few did.
I love your work in general, so keep up evolving and writing, because you have that 'something'.

Lots of love!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
This wasn't meant t' give ye much of an impact so I don't blame ye fer feelin' that way. It was more of a relaxed...warm feelin' ^^ Impact I save fer poems where I want t' get a more violent emotion across. Usually a good poet can play the whole spectrum and while some pieces don't leave you with impact, they do leave you with warmth ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MarijaPeci Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Aaaaa, I see your point now! Anyway, Thank You for your work.
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MarcusPenrose Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very enjoyable! I liked this!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly me friend :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Sky2713 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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lulurockz Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
This is a lovely piece. Happy new year!
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