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The Poet:

He smiles as he sees her sleeping
& gently covers her with a blanket.
He goes to the window and looks out
watching snow fall, ever so slowly...

He sees people in the streets,
Chatting, walking. Some happy,
Others sad. Hearts beating,
Hearts broken; some warm, some cold.

He looks back at her, as she stirs in bed.
A yawn from her, brings another smile to him:
"How cute," he chuckles as he strokes her head.
He runs his fingers through her hair and is content.

Yet, even if he is happy here, again -
He is drawn to that window and finds himself
Staring out at the street and watching;
Marveling at the disparity and wondering -

Isn't there something that I can do?
Isn't there a better way for us all?

He looks back at her, sleeping peacefully;
He thinks about the future and sighs.

He wants a better world for her,
One where she would always be safe,
But unfortunately, he has no power.
He is just one man with little to his name.

He picks up a piece of paper, one found lying on the floor.
Blank as it is, he begins to imagine & soon, he finds it filled;
Riddled with his feelings, his soul, his words and his hope.
Suddenly he realises, a twinkle in his eye -

He knows what to do now, so simple it had been all along,
For though his words may not be heard by everyone;
Perhaps they might be read and - if enough people were to read them -
Then perhaps they too would change for the better.




Just as I have changed for you...




-Chen Yuan Wen, 31st December 2012
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Author's Comment:

Arr maties,

Since this is th' first new year I'll be spendin' with ye all, I thought that I'd finally share a little bit o' meself. As ye know I do write about me feelings, but not about me personally. Of course, this story poem I've posted is still fictional, but it has a basis of truth; one that relates t' me. O' course I'll leave it at that and have ye fill in any remainin' blanks on yer own, but more or less I had a reason fer startin' the Word o' Chen and I'm pleased to say that it's grown wonderfully these past 9 months.

Soon, me very first e-book will be released. The plan is t' have it ready by the 5th of January. We're already in the editing phase, so I can certainly say that time is on my side. If all goes well then th' first weekend o' the new year is when ye'll see me book uploaded on SMASHWORDS.

O' course ye'll be notified by means o' me journal and via me new store section on DA where I'll put up the covers for the books and have links directin' t' th' place where they're sold. Remember they'll be E-BOOKS so they're very much cheaper than books in print and o' course there is no shippin' and waitin' fer delivery and all that. I hope ye'll all look forward to it.

As for today, I'm happy t' be raisin' me glass o' grape juice t' the new year. Let's set sail fer even grander seas, fer with yer help I'll definitely conquer all seven of 'em. Now, are ya with me lads and lasses, or would ye rather stay snug at home?

HYAR HAR!

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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Whoa. This is just plain awesome. I honestly have to say, this is probably the best piece of poetry I've seen in my 16 years of existence. It's very calm and serene, and it appeals to my better nature. The narrator got his new life simply from his surroundings and imagination. Everyone should have this talent; unfortunately, this isn't so. These few lines have me in awe, as the style and dictation really add up to the tenderness of the story. And here I am, sitting behind this piece of glass, wondering how I can make a name for myself. This has given me inspiration, and I can't wait to read more from you.
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Now, keep in mind that I am writing as someone who has very little to no familiarity at all with poetry as an art form, so keep in mind I am unable to provide an in-depth criticism about your poem.

I do have a complaint with the use of the ampersand (&) at the line "gently covers her with a blanket." In my opinion, if you used a the word "and", it would be more effective, and would look natural.

I had to re-read it once, just to confirm that it's a father-daughter relationship, and it seems to be a beaufiul one, especially as the father's only desire is for his daughter to grow up in a safe, stable environment, but he knows that he is unable to do so, but he found hope and refuge in putting ink on paper, and hopes it would change the world for the better for his daughter.

It seems pretty heartwarming to me.
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Krillin1983 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i am impressed by this poetry a lot its powerful and i liked the message in it and agree with it deeply too i will keep a eye on your work:)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
THank ye kindly, I hope t' impress ye further ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Almost reminds me of the poet and the pendulum by nightwish ... and sahara by nightwish ... then again thats just me :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Hehe, glad it reminded you of so much ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Amazing work as always 1_~
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
My deepest thanks for enjoying this piece (even though it took an hour to reply) T^T

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   General Artist
Absolutely marvellous! Great work! :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly, I'm very glad ye enjoyed it ^^

Did ye know I've just released me e-book? O' course I'm shameless promotin' it so come check it out eh? :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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realitycheck7423 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
I love it!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly ^^ If ye'd like t' support me check out my e-book and if yer keen, then buy a copy eh? It's cheap :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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