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The Never-ending Masque:

A troupe of dancers, with colourful costumes
Ascends the stage with jaunty smiles
Whilst the eldest member, in a Jester's mask
Narrates the tale in style:

As they begin their dance, these lovely dancers
The skies turn cold and grey...
Arms reach down from the rumbling heavens
And they take our stage away!


Yet the harlequins laugh
And simply dance on the grass
For the show must go on
Until time has passed

Harken brothers, a wicked wind blows!
It stirs from the belly of the unkind beast
It rips our props away from us;
And hopes the dance will cease...


But the Harlequins laugh and continue the show
They mime to mimic their props and tools
Using naught but the love that they have in their hearts
They create a fable of ghosts and ghouls

My brothers, no, it cannot be!
The narrator grasps at his throat in anguish
For the Jester's voice has been taken away
And now the show can finally be vanquished...

But the Harlequins laugh and put on a smile
They clap their brother upon his coloured back
From his pockets they pull out notes and signs;
Writing the story in the boldest of black:

"Though all in the world may be ripped from us
We hold to the love that we have for the stage
For The illusion of having nothing at all
Is naught but a delusory cage!"


-Chen Yuan Wen, 18th July 2012
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Author's Comment:

Even when all in the world is ripped from me. Even, in the face of adversity. I will go on ^^

For the stage and the poems that I write, are the twin passions that burn brightly within my beating heart.

Thank you to all who are supporting my appeal and may be the light shine upon you eternally!

-Chen

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This poem reminded me of CS Goto's "Dawn of War: Tempest" where the play is set and played by a group of jesters who are very much like the narrator's "never-ending masque". This carnival, with its almost hedonistic nihillism does, appreciably, capture the rapture which is contemplative enough to conjure images of vagaries and overwhelming obstacles that continue to haunt us - much like my own poem "Shadows in the Drapery", this masquerade is a display of our depths, which we are unable to reach, and yet are unable to contemplate in whatever capacity we could conjure.

Visionary and Unique - a truly wonderous imagining.
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liyaperfidious Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
I really like the 4th stanza in particular.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MoxieMyths Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
nice beat!
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Great Job.
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LyraJolt Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Student General Artist
:3 What a hope filling poem ~ I kept thinking about all the different types of arts there is, because even if you have nothing at all, you can still do a Form of Art ~
Chen , I don't think there'll ever be a problem that you would fail at, honestly everything that been thrown at you been dealt with quickly and with victory ~
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
interesting approach !
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I-Lost-My-Way Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Viva la resistance~! :ahoy:
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white-lucky-star Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student
all i can say is that this is a truly inspiring piece ^^
i love it =D
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your form needs tightening. The idea isn't bad but it relies heavily on gimmicks.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for responding ^^

Perhaps you can suggest examples of both.

-Chen
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The italics and the long words both--of course people pay more attention to the italics, but they should focus on those parts because of word choice. Also 'harlequin', while an awesome word, doesn't do anything for the flow. When you read this out loud, how natural does it really sound?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
To me, very natural; perhaps it is because I speak like a story-teller and change the flow of my voice. I really should do audio poetry more often so people get familiar with my speaking style. That said, I can understand how some people won't get the flow of the words xD

Those who are used to me immediately get it, others may not get it at all. Unfortunately that is the core problem of art, it is open to interpretation. I shall however strive to modulate it and perhaps create something more concrete that everyone can read.

-Chen
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Try applying a fixed meter to it. Shakespeare makes iambic sound absolutely natural, so would start there.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
haha, sorry that is one thing I can't do. I've found that as we explore the real nature of humans and as we get in-depth with all those problems, the Shakespearean vibe tends to make it feel too unnatural.

In fact, considering the modern day and age, poetry would feel more natural if the speaker spoke with the accent of the average african american male. That is because it reflects the world today and for that reason I shift my focus toward the modern day ^^

-Chen
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Not the language, the rhythm. You kind of have that vibe to your own work anyway--if what you mean by that is something that's being watched upon a stage rather than being told straight out. You could pick a different meter, but iambic is the one that most closely follows English.

Why African American male? The world today is kind of a total mix.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Yes that is what I meant actually xD. I don't quite know how to explain it (this is probably because I started writing raps before going into poetry) but the kind of rhythm I apply to my words is based on how several people with different accents have read it back to me and I gauge the flow of that and write it to that 'beat' so to speak.

Also FAIL, I totally typo'd that one. Here is what I meant to say: "In fact, considering the modern day and age,my real poetry would feel more natural if the speaker spoke with the accent of the average african american male"

Reason being the emotional stuff that I do often comes from the street sort of background. Similarly when I work with fantasy, I go for the voice of either a narrator with a deep voice or perhaps even the characters. That's sort of how I structure my works. I know it may not make much sense, but that's how it goes for me ^^;

-Chen
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prosaix Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
:noes:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
What :ohnoes:
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prosaix Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
:iconstars-plz::icondivaplz::iconyonplz:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
NO U
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prosaix Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
:iconwhattheheckplz::iconpunch1plz::iconannoyeddotdotdotplz:
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ParticleInTheBox Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
wow
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WatashiWaShinigami Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, I can't even think of anything to say...
Something along the lines of 'I loved it', except to the power of... A very, very large number. d:

*shot*
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starmic Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
thatīs a very wonderfull lesson my friend!!
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Writer
I love how this in a way starts off whimsical then suddenly takes a more dark as well as morose twist yet in the end the Harlequins still dance and make the best out of the dreary situation. I enjoyed this thoroughly.
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BlueDarkAngelWings Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
Wow the imagiery this is so cool.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes! Jesters and harlequins are awesome. I like how you mix this deep concept of the illusion of having nothing with the harlequins, who are known for being joyful and carefree.
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jellyjammfan Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
First off, This has to be one of my favorites of yours, and i'll fave it when i can, good job! Second, is it weird that i think of ratigan from GMD when i read this?
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
:thumbsup:
I love it. A lot.
But then again, I call myself Masquerade.
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012   General Artist
Very vivid imagery
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly for the compliment ^^

-Chen
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012   General Artist
Very welcome
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X-Spirit-Whispers-X Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That was beautiful. Basically all I can say to describe this piece.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my dear friend. I am honoured to have your compliment ^^

-Chen
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a truly wonderful piece and I really enjoyed reading it. :) I love how you draw your inspiration from the world around you for you do it in such an unique way.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for the support my friend. I am just so happy that so many are aiding me in my appeal. I hope to break the fave limit with this one...maybe ^^

As for how I see the world, it is all the fantasy; waiting to be told :3

-Chen
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome. I've been following it from day one, but I was just waiting for the correct moment to join. :)

And you share the same view of the world as I do.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
thank you my dearest friend, don't forget to fave on your way out. We must overcome this with honour and show the world that the light...and hope...will not be destroyed ^^

-Chen
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome. And I won't forget to. As long as there is hope in the world, there will be the will to continue on.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye I agree, but for now we shall have to see.

When the war of the beasts brings about the end, will the will of man be the one to bend?

(I wish I had long flowing hair to pose right now .___.)

-Chen
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
A waiting game this shall be, only the end will tell us if we are free.

(And that would be pretty epic if you did. :D)
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is simply lovely. Really goes to show the passion you have for writing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you Lady You Wish You Knew... (checked your page to see your name) xD. I am glad that my knight recognises this :3

-Chen
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha. Your welcome.
I guess I need to change that. You're the second person to notice I don't have a proper name.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
A name by which to call thee would only make it sweeter ^^

-Chen
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha. Then in that case you can call me Jade. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Lady Jade it is....sounds epic *___*

Forgib me if I forget though xD

-Chen
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha. Thank you. :D

That's perfectly fine.
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