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Surreal Reality:

The tides that bind a fallen city,
Swirls of vision, animosity...
Lost beneath a silvered glass,
Watch and wait as hours pass.

You find yourself, now surreal,
Surrounded by clocks with a ticking squeal.
You walk to the kitchen, a hand you find,
A platter in which to place your mind.

The microwave dings, the toaster rings,
From the oven you pull, intestinal strings.
You stab with the knife, it ends in your head,
Place your mind into a toasted bread...

You walk to the car, you breathe in deep,
You look into your pocket; the bottle you keep.
You take a long swig, it's a magical drive,
Your soul falls asleep while you await to arrive.

Silence, broken silence,
Emptiness filled with eyes and ears,
Rainbows haunt and tear the skies,
Falling rain like bitter tears...

Broken and unspoken,
Suddenly you are bowed!
Your throat explodes with shards of glass,
It ends the life to which you vowed...

Each gurgle of blood that is caught on your lips,
The sputum you cough is flecked with red.
Suddenly you wish you never drank,
For you died alone in bed.

"Relief comes not in a bottle..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 19th February 2012
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PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Arr me hearties,

Today, I felt like creating a more sombre piece. Some more destructive and hateful. So I came up with this.

Enjoy yerself :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Self Righteous Suicide - [link]
The Sea of Death - [link]
A Glass of Total Poison - [link]
Stand Up and Fight - [link]
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EternalFireOfDeath Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
O_O This is beautiful in a weird way. You seem to be able to rhyme with such easy it makes me envious. The last line has such an impact in such few words and your use of vocabulary is superb!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, I like doing surrealist pieces and I think I may write another poem that is on that topic ^^

-Chen
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EternalFireOfDeath Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I cannot wait to see it then ^_^
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GoneKrazy Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sounds more like a PCP trip than alcohol. But that's probably just me. Nice work
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Getsuei-san Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Whoa-hoo, powerful indeed, destructive, hateful and nice work with analogies(? no idea if that's the right word...) sounds a little painful too...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, very glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

It is quite a surrealist piece, but it was meant ta be that way :3

Glad that ye enjoyed me imagery and analogies (>w<)b

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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PsychoticBunny2010 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
A very powerful piece of writing. I like the nuances of your pirate persona subtly put in the poem. The poems message is a prevalent one that I think many should take note of. A very nice piece. I had no idea that your writing as as good as your drawing ability
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I don't do the drawings though, they're done by me lovely co-captain who runs this account with me.

I didn't put any piracy in this poem though, it was actually a rewrite of an old piece, made much more powerful by experience and strength :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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