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Surreal Reality:

The tides that bind a fallen city,
Swirls of vision, animosity...
Lost beneath a silvered glass,
Watch and wait as hours pass.

You find yourself, now surreal,
Surrounded by clocks with a ticking squeal.
You walk to the kitchen, a hand you find,
A platter in which to place your mind.

The microwave dings, the toaster rings,
From the oven you pull, intestinal strings.
You stab with the knife, it ends in your head,
Place your mind into a toasted bread...

You walk to the car, you breathe in deep,
You look into your pocket; the bottle you keep.
You take a long swig, it's a magical drive,
Your soul falls asleep while you await to arrive.

Silence, broken silence,
Emptiness filled with eyes and ears,
Rainbows haunt and tear the skies,
Falling rain like bitter tears...

Broken and unspoken,
Suddenly you are bowed!
Your throat explodes with shards of glass,
It ends the life to which you vowed...

Each gurgle of blood that is caught on your lips,
The sputum you cough is flecked with red.
Suddenly you wish you never drank,
For you died alone in bed.

"Relief comes not in a bottle..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 19th February 2012
FAVING/COMMENTING:
Hey there everyone. Please feel free to fave my works if you like it. It helps me reach front page and you WILL be thanked for it. Comments are loved ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Arr me hearties,

Today, I felt like creating a more sombre piece. Some more destructive and hateful. So I came up with this.

Enjoy yerself :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Self Righteous Suicide - [link]
The Sea of Death - [link]
A Glass of Total Poison - [link]
Stand Up and Fight - [link]
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EternalFireOfDeath Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
O_O This is beautiful in a weird way. You seem to be able to rhyme with such easy it makes me envious. The last line has such an impact in such few words and your use of vocabulary is superb!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, I like doing surrealist pieces and I think I may write another poem that is on that topic ^^

-Chen
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EternalFireOfDeath Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I cannot wait to see it then ^_^
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GoneKrazy Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sounds more like a PCP trip than alcohol. But that's probably just me. Nice work
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Getsuei-san Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Whoa-hoo, powerful indeed, destructive, hateful and nice work with analogies(? no idea if that's the right word...) sounds a little painful too...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, very glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

It is quite a surrealist piece, but it was meant ta be that way :3

Glad that ye enjoyed me imagery and analogies (>w<)b

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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PsychoticBunny2010 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
A very powerful piece of writing. I like the nuances of your pirate persona subtly put in the poem. The poems message is a prevalent one that I think many should take note of. A very nice piece. I had no idea that your writing as as good as your drawing ability
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I don't do the drawings though, they're done by me lovely co-captain who runs this account with me.

I didn't put any piracy in this poem though, it was actually a rewrite of an old piece, made much more powerful by experience and strength :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Student Writer
Brilliant work, Captain! A playfully dark way to present the consequences of vice addictions. Great read!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye kindly. I'll be releasin' more horror and dark themed works over the weekend :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Student Writer
Looking forward to them, Captain. :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Hyar har :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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musiclovingmisfit Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
This is great. It seems to have a dark masochistic feel to it, but can also be interpreted more metaphorically. It seems that this poem can be relate-able to many people in different situations. Awesome work, Captain. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrrr glad that ye enjoyed this one ^^

Thank ye fer readin' :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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musiclovingmisfit Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012
Thanks for writing it. :)
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Well blow me down, as Popeye says, what a poem. Rather Sardonic humpr in it. Glad I faved it for sure!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ya Michel :3, I be very glad ye enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Matey, I need time to read all of the works I collect,but I do read yours first.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr that's fine ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Kinexuru Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aye, I love how Captain's poems are so delicious to read. :D I have a somewhat strange taste for horror XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, well I'm very glad ta be delicious then ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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NinjaBudgie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoah, I can tell that a lot of imagination went into this piece. Good work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye twas an old piece actually, but I remodelled it ta suit a more pressin' issue ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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axel-is-love Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for writing pieces that show the reality of how dangerous addiction is. Maybe people will start paying attention and stop the habit.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, we can always hope ^^ So long as I have breath in this body of mine. I'll keep on writin'

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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axel-is-love Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're becoming popular on dA. Maybe people will see this and stop the habit. Thank you for writing pieces like this. Not many people take the time to address issues.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr i can agree ta that. Hopefully maintain my popularity too, despite the recent let down =P

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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axel-is-love Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, you have my support on your poetry. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, it does mean alot :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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axel-is-love Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012
ooh i love surrealism, its sooooo pweety relief lies in addictive waters :L
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr glad ye liked it. But NO, relief does not lie in that EVER =P

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
naaaaoooo i feel happy when i drink distilled water. but personally i like spring water better
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr alright :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
Now which does captain love to drink most
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Grape Juice xD

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
Yay I like grape too, but water is the best
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr alright :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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EternalBliss777 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the flow of your work. It's dark, mesmerizing, and utterly a lovely peice :love:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr me deepest thanks friend ^^. Feel free ta drop a share and put a little wind in an old seadog's sail :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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EternalBliss777 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Always ^.^ And Will do :D
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Artemis-F-Fox Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"Your soul falls asleep while you await to arrive." Wow, very nice. Great flow, beautiful. Congrats on getting a written piece to the most popular page, too! That doesn't happen often. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr me deepest thanks me friend ^^. I'm really very happy that so many are entertained by me works ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Artemis-F-Fox Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course :)
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PinPastor Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012   Artist
Good one. I not big on poetry to the point of saying if its good or sublime, but i like the portrait it paints.
Cheers Captain
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr glad ta have ye here me educated friend. It's okay, I just be very thankful fer ye comment ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Frencifry Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Student Writer
Whoa. Makes ya think about life a little bt. Trippy. Me like:blackrose::rose:
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