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Sudden Cruelty:

He is a God, or so he believes
He judges others and puts them into stereotypes
Asian? No life! Hispanic? Brainless!

He thinks he has control over his world
A delusion which he has never been able to break
Me? I'm better than them, I'm smarter...

He sits alone in his room, ignoring the emptiness
He sits in front of his computer and passes judgement
Lol, you're wrong. You're stupid. Everything is stupid!

He laughs and smiles at his own cruelty;
He feels powerful and most certainly superior to all
But in the end, it's just a fantasy isn't it?

He curls up in his bed, thinking about tomorrow
Here, he's a king, but out there, what is he?
The guy, whose girlfriend dumped him
The guy, whose boss is younger and smarter
The kid, who has nothing to live for
The man, who has lost it all...

Arrogant and apathetic, cold from a lack of warmth
That is his very nature, that is who he really is
He has nothing to live for, nothing to strive for
He looks at the world and sees nothing, bleak emptiness
Dreams he once had, that were thrown away so long ago
He sighs and takes out a cigarette to smoke:
"If I can't have it, why should anyone else have it?"

He thinks he is a champion
but all that we see, is a child...

"Locked so deeply in despair, he cares for nothing and no one..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 20th July 2012
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People often ask me. Why do I just take insults? People throw vulgarities at me and I just brush over it.

Well, to put it this way. I can only talk from personal experience, but my daily life is so busy I have no time to do anything between preparing the next piece, touching base with everyone and just generally getting things done. I realise that those with the time for other matters, don't have anything that's really precious to them. They get angry, feel good for awhile and then it's back to whatever awaits them...that's pretty sad if you ask me :/ So I humour them ^^ Least I could do I feel, I used to be like that after all.

Also, a lot of people ask me why front page means so much to me. Well, it's actually the principal behind what's happening really. Denying someone the front page because they get popular too often is like the following scenario:

You've just won a race. You woke up at 7 in the morning to train. You went on a diet. You worked hard. Through that, you won the race and crossed the finish line. You go to the award ceremony. They tell you that, because you've won last time, the next guy gets to have first place and you get a consolation prize. They say that a lot of people saw you win last time and you have a lot of fans now, so it's fine to just get a consolation and go home.

I think that if that happened at ANY sporting event, the person would feel pretty upset. So, if it's not okay for sport, why is it okay for art and literature? Food for thought.

-Chen

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This faces a very serious problem within the world today in a very simple way. The use of italics is neither overpowering nor undermined. The use of two voices makes this piece seem like an argument over the topic which is effective. The vocabulary used is not superfluous but supports the message of the poem.

The repetition in the 5th stanza of 'the' and then the title of a person also helps convey a sense of argument and it is like you are providing voices for all those who aren't heard.

Towards the end as the number of lines decreases it provides a sense of understanding whereas in some cases there seems to be no end only a stopping point. This shows you are good at knowing when something has ended and no more is needed to be said.

I would say that it needs more structure but I believe that the lack of rigidity within this works more to an advantage than a disadvantage.
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Thatwas an inspiring poem. the lines that were in Italics really got us into this mans mind. the phrasing is in such a way that you really get on his side, and the writers side. in the beginning, you see some of the insults this man throws carelessly around at people, then further on in the poem we realise we should not hate, but pity this man. he is just cruel. the last line had the strondgest impact on me. It means a lot to me. i can imagine this man, living ompletely alone, in an empty bedroom. the floor littered with beer bottles, the laptop humming in the corner...he's tired and weary, but won't sleep. he just sits, lonley, overwhelmed and woeful. but he will never admit it to himself. thank you for this poem. It is absoloutley brilliant, and really touched my heart.
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Valor115 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
In the end, no one leaves the room unscathed.
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
amazing, so true!
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GodzillaKrueger Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful work.
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
Great Job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying my work ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry about the late reply :iconorzplz: I have no excuse for my phail :iconhomelessonionplz:
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ChocolateShortcake77 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
I. love. it.
No really, I do.
This is what happens when you lose faith. You become a know-it-all, selfish, empty, shell of a man.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Yeah, it can be sad to break out of that, but I'm glad I did ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry about the late reply :iconorzplz: I have no excuse for my phail :iconhomelessonionplz:
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Mylietus1991 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Professional Writer
hey i got a question guys > how do you get ur files uploaded like in written form do u have to use wordpad or something? help me out please ..
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
True. Very true.
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CLLupin Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012   Writer
"He judges others and puts them into stereotypes.".....
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Urasiade Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
this was gorgeous..
I just..
<3

thank you...
you just made my week :D
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
that last bit of the quote is very haunting .... :S
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Moleboi Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
This is brilliant, it caught my emotions and dragged them along on the journey. Whilst reading it I was also making similarities and differences between myself and the narrator...
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I-Lost-My-Way Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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Your work astounds me.
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GoldenFirePhoenix Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
i think you really have a gift. you understand people so well. you're not him and you can talk like if you were inside him, you really get people. your poem is great, congrats
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Tamamakitty Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i met some one like that on here. made fun of me and cursed at me. so, ya....i get this poem very well.
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CrazyAndProud Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
his is very well-written and i believe you get your point across very well
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George551 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
526 favourites.....Wow. Great poem on the other hand, real nice.
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xXLove-AngelXx Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is sad, yet hauntingly beautiful... Very few people actually think about how trolls might have gotten the way they are, I think this piece captured the feelings of most of them quite well.
You really deserved the front page.
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Cajjita Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
At first I thought this was gonna be about a serial killer or something, because they tend to be self centered and sociopathic.

Then I realized it was about trolls on the internet.
lel
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Sorry to disappoint xD. I'll make a serial killer/sociopathic one in future...actually wait I've already done one. Hold on, here: [link]

^^

-Chen
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rememberme4ever1 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
Took the words right of my mouth.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Hope that's a good thing ^^ Thank you for reading :3

-Chen
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spiritguideofthewolf Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
I found your description quite inspiring :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend, I am honoured that you would feel that way ^^

-Chen
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Kissobelle Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
See now, I appreciate the message you're trying to get across (and you really are good at it), I just wanted to point out that stereotyping internet trolls as worthless is still stereotyping, there are plenty of them who aren't like that, in fact, because those who have that kind of a superiority complex feel the need to be better than everyone and spend so much time on the internet, they're often rather intelligent people, many of them being top engineers or PhDs with equally qualified and well adjusted (if sadistic) friends and lovers. WHICH isn't to say that's the majority, just that there are quite a few of them, I relate this kind of mentality to the "anyone who insults you is just jealous" one, some people are just sadistic, and while you may be superior to them in morals, it's pretty presumptuous to assume you are superior in most other aspects as well.
(to clarify, I'm a single highschool drop out, I am sure as hell not talking about myself here, just feel the need to speak out whenever I see any kind of assumption or stereotype being made, particularly while portraying stereotypes as a bad thing)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
That's fair enough ^^ You are welcome to your opinion and of course it is valid. Yet, many of them are top-qualified people? From where do you acquire this statistic? Is it a personal thought or do you have evidence to back it up? Reason being, I have plenty of experience with these individuals myself and rarely have I seen one that I would deem successful. I would be very eager to learn more of them ^^

-Chen
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Kissobelle Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I would like to say that I know a lot who claim to be that way online, but of course, that isn't very reliable and I don't expect you to accept that as evidence :P I know my brother, although he isn't particularly harsh, is a part of that community and is currently studying engineering (I forget which one) at a top university and he's very popular both with friends and uh... The ladies ;P
And of course, the younger generation of teens who are currently fairly successful... For teens.
Other than that though, it just seems logical to me, those that feel such a strong need to be better than other people, unless they're genuinely very stupid people, will try to legitimize those feelings, and I do feel like a lot of the one's I've met, once you break through the "I'm an asshole and nothing effects me" exterior, are fairly intelligent or at least well read, it's hard for stupid people to make other people feel stupid (which is generally the goal, just plain ol' bullying is... plain ol', trolls and the like actually want to tear people down, and so they use things people actually value, like their minds) Especially since they can't (physically) beat them up over the internet, they have to use their brain, manipulation and cruel wit to do it.
Honestly though, this may be because I consider myself (kind of) a part of that community, a lot of my friends are more harsh and I've met a few people I (more or less) trust who are internet ass hats (although, I don't have much to say about the real life ones, it takes guts to start a confrontation where you can be physically harmed or charged with a crime, and there are plenty of witnesses, etc).
I feel like I have read somewhere, though, that many successful business people are sociopathic, since, naturally, that can help you get ahead in that field, and it also seems like the type of people who would hurt others for entertainment online.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
I see, interesting. Except for the last part. I am a finance student and I am very empathetic. Hmmm, well I think it may also be due to the differences in our perceptions of success. For me, as a finance student, simply studying at a top university or having a career is not success, that is a step toward it, but there are many more factors involved. For example: even if you graduate from a top university and get a good job. How many hours do you have to work? What do you have to do. Is your job recession proof?

It's probable very different from the standard outline that people have for success, because I always aim to maximise efficiency.

In fact part of the reason why this appeal started is because the lack of transparency about the system means that whenever the shuffling (irrespective of whether it is automatic or not), kicks in, we will have a situation whereby your hardwork will mean nothing. You could post a trash piece and it would get shuffled back (but not affect your possible prospects with the community) or you could post a piece you work extremely hard on and get it shuffled back (which is bad because you worked hard on it y'know?). So from that point of view, I wanted to find out about what the system is doing so people can be better informed. Like, when they know the shuffling will happen they can post humour or filler pieces to fit in the gaps until they finally are able to get front page again. To me that would be very helpful.

On the concept of legitimization of the those feelings though, I think you do have a valid point and I realise now that we were looking at two different perspectives.

The way I was seeing it, I was speaking mostly about those who spend a lot of time on the internet. Mal-adjusted individuals who have little to live for. The cruelty and sadism of WELL adjusted individuals is another matter and it is also a problem, however that community of people; needs to be tackled differently. I lack the understanding to properly deal with them as there are so many more variables, but for the mean time the majority that fit into the category here can be dealt with by politeness and not getting angry. Which is what I strive to do.

As for you, why did you drop out of high-school, you're certainly smart enough to hold a fairly deep discussion :3

-Chen
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Kissobelle Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I completely agree with your definition of success, it's just difficult for me to measure that and give examples of that, I would assume the business example might still work for it, but otherwise, I'm not sure how to display that. And I didn't mean that the majority of business folk are like that, simply that being able to disregard others feelings or well being when making business decisions is practical, but often difficult for people who posses empathy (but again, I do think that I read that somewhere, while researching anti-social behavioural disorder, but I think it kind of makes sense with that reasoning).
Actually, I don't know how I completely failed to take that into account xD I think a lot of people spend the majority of their free time on the internet, making it seem as though they are that poorly adjusted, but that's an excellent point, spending that much of your time living through the internet with no real world experiences to brag about is pretty sad.

Honestly, I don't completely understand what's going on with deviantART lately, I mostly just check a few notifications and then leave, I don't understand what's going on but I don't like it, it seems so much harder than before to find quality work or people, gah D:

I did actually mean to compliment you on how you handled my disagreement, I've spent so much time on the internet, it's always a pleasant surprise to meet someone who's actually willing and capable of having a non-hostile discussion.

I dropped out for a few complicated reasons, first of all, I was in a speciality program I just couldn't keep up with, I love science, but it's really not my forte and I haaaated the labs, I auditioned because I was interested in science and thought it the most worthwhile pursuit to dedicate my life to (and I didn't want to wind up in a catholic school) but I was never good at it and it didn't take long for me to fall behind. On top of that, I decided I didn't want to graduate early, but I had enough extra credits that I would pretty much be FORCED to, I wanted to use them up as spares but they changed the rules so I either had to fail a course or graduate before my friends. And once you start deliberately failing courses, things do not go well. On top of that (and this is the reason that, despite transferring to several different schools, I'm now 13 credits behind and enrolled no where) I was in an abusive relationship with a very possessive boy who would constantly insist I come stay at his house, which, naturally, interfered with my going to school or getting things done. The worst thing about all of that, though, is I have always loved school, I could escape there, meet people, learn things, there were free art supplies, it motivated me to get reading, writing and art done and it would actually help me later in life. (sorry for the long drawn out story, but I actually respect you and would have felt bad just half assing or blowing off that explanation).
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
No, I am more than happy to hear your story ^^. I've always done my best to interact with and try and give people a helping hand. If the least I can do is listen to someone then at the very least that is what I should be doing. I mean, I wouldn't be here today if it were for people like :icondarlingangel0565:, :icondiluculi:, :iconsutsuki-sensei: and :iconlugialuvr13: just to name a few of those who lent me a helping hand and showed me how to change for the better.

It is really sad what happened to you at your school. Your home life must be pretty bad because I noticed you said you 'escape' at school. I hope things turn out better for you, you seem rather intelligent and it would be a waste to our society if you did not get somewhere ^^

As for disagreements, you posted an opinion and there is never anything wrong with that. I mean just yesterday there was this guy who told me to 'stop being a hipster asian emo, your work sucks'. I wonder why he would even bring race into the matter, but...the kind of man I am now, I just marked him down for spamming and that was the end of the story. I rarely get angry or act hostile when people disagree with me. As far as I can see, surely they have a reason for doing so and if I want to change things for the better; then the first change should start within me as a person. If I'm out there acting hostile and aggressive, how could I expect anyone to listen to me when I appeal for help? Honesty really is the best policy and anyone who thinks business should be conducted in a dishonest manner is just covering for a lack of good strategy.

I prefer to create tactical advantages for myself, as opposed to using deception or cheap tricks to win over any situation. The reason being that tactical advantages are good for the long term, if you plan your route strategically you will always have an angle covered. If you take a loss, accept it and move on. A lot of the reason why people become bitter is that they cannot accept a defeat. To them, defeat is synonymous with failure, but for me, failure is only when you really give up.

I applaud you for doing your best. We all live with our own situations and struggles, but if we do not give in; eventually a path will open. I'm very lucky that one opened for me and so I try to be understanding of everyone else too ^^

As for DeviantArt's situation. The recent problem is their lack of transparency about the front page rules. I used to get on there very frequently, until a recent spate of my works being reshuffled behind less popular pieces. Many say it's a conspiracy, but it's hard to disprove when it happens LIVE xD.

In any case, this peaceful revolution is just designed to raise awareness and get the community involved to try and solve this minor injustice. A fair fight is what I want ^^

-Chen
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Kissobelle Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I also forgot to add that I completely agree with you on the art thing, though, if you're good and particularly if you have worked your butt off to be that good, you deserve the recognition, if you'd like to hide away and let someone else have the glory, that's up to you, but it shouldn't be expected, let alone forced on you.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh that's okay :3 that's something that can't be helped. We're all waiting to receive our answer from the admins, because information will help everyone understand things much better ^^

-Chen
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TaintedVirgo Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
YOU FUCKING ROCK!!!!!!!! nice poem lol
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
:iconfatalityplz: wh00 thanks for the compliment xD

I wish there was a icon for BRUTAL, but I couldn't find one .___.

-Chen
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Orceh Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
... this sounds just like my brother :/
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
My condolences ^^;

-Chen
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Orceh Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Yeah. :/
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
it's okay, just try your best to help him :3

-Chen
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Orceh Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Or just stay away from him. :/
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
That works :3

-Chen
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edvalenz Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
this is really a great piece you've written, the way you make us feel pity for the man, i applaud you :clap:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my dear friend. I appreciate it ^^

-Chen
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himiska Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
Sounds about right.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks ^^

-Chen
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SnappedWires Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
Deities don't make stereotypes, they make diversity. People make stereotypes. The troll and the one getting trolled really aren't that different sometimes.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
There are no deities in this poem xD

-Chen
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SnappedWires Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
Oh.

"He is a God,
or so he believes."

Oops. Didn't read that properly.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Professional Writer
That's alright ^^

-Chen
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IonicSonic Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can't find the words to describe what I've just read, so I'll just say that it's amazing. Excellent work. You deserve getting the front page. :)
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