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Sudden Cruelty:

He is a God, or so he believes
He judges others and puts them into stereotypes
Asian? No life! Hispanic? Brainless!

He thinks he has control over his world
A delusion which he has never been able to break
Me? I'm better than them, I'm smarter...

He sits alone in his room, ignoring the emptiness
He sits in front of his computer and passes judgement
Lol, you're wrong. You're stupid. Everything is stupid!

He laughs and smiles at his own cruelty;
He feels powerful and most certainly superior to all
But in the end, it's just a fantasy isn't it?

He curls up in his bed, thinking about tomorrow
Here, he's a king, but out there, what is he?
The guy, whose girlfriend dumped him
The guy, whose boss is younger and smarter
The kid, who has nothing to live for
The man, who has lost it all...

Arrogant and apathetic, cold from a lack of warmth
That is his very nature, that is who he really is
He has nothing to live for, nothing to strive for
He looks at the world and sees nothing, bleak emptiness
Dreams he once had, that were thrown away so long ago
He sighs and takes out a cigarette to smoke:
"If I can't have it, why should anyone else have it?"

He thinks he is a champion
but all that we see, is a child...

"Locked so deeply in despair, he cares for nothing and no one..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 20th July 2012
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Author's Comment:

People often ask me. Why do I just take insults? People throw vulgarities at me and I just brush over it.

Well, to put it this way. I can only talk from personal experience, but my daily life is so busy I have no time to do anything between preparing the next piece, touching base with everyone and just generally getting things done. I realise that those with the time for other matters, don't have anything that's really precious to them. They get angry, feel good for awhile and then it's back to whatever awaits them...that's pretty sad if you ask me :/ So I humour them ^^ Least I could do I feel, I used to be like that after all.

Also, a lot of people ask me why front page means so much to me. Well, it's actually the principal behind what's happening really. Denying someone the front page because they get popular too often is like the following scenario:

You've just won a race. You woke up at 7 in the morning to train. You went on a diet. You worked hard. Through that, you won the race and crossed the finish line. You go to the award ceremony. They tell you that, because you've won last time, the next guy gets to have first place and you get a consolation prize. They say that a lot of people saw you win last time and you have a lot of fans now, so it's fine to just get a consolation and go home.

I think that if that happened at ANY sporting event, the person would feel pretty upset. So, if it's not okay for sport, why is it okay for art and literature? Food for thought.

-Chen

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This faces a very serious problem within the world today in a very simple way. The use of italics is neither overpowering nor undermined. The use of two voices makes this piece seem like an argument over the topic which is effective. The vocabulary used is not superfluous but supports the message of the poem.

The repetition in the 5th stanza of 'the' and then the title of a person also helps convey a sense of argument and it is like you are providing voices for all those who aren't heard.

Towards the end as the number of lines decreases it provides a sense of understanding whereas in some cases there seems to be no end only a stopping point. This shows you are good at knowing when something has ended and no more is needed to be said.

I would say that it needs more structure but I believe that the lack of rigidity within this works more to an advantage than a disadvantage.
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Thatwas an inspiring poem. the lines that were in Italics really got us into this mans mind. the phrasing is in such a way that you really get on his side, and the writers side. in the beginning, you see some of the insults this man throws carelessly around at people, then further on in the poem we realise we should not hate, but pity this man. he is just cruel. the last line had the strondgest impact on me. It means a lot to me. i can imagine this man, living ompletely alone, in an empty bedroom. the floor littered with beer bottles, the laptop humming in the corner...he's tired and weary, but won't sleep. he just sits, lonley, overwhelmed and woeful. but he will never admit it to himself. thank you for this poem. It is absoloutley brilliant, and really touched my heart.
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Valor115 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
In the end, no one leaves the room unscathed.
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
amazing, so true!
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GodzillaKrueger Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful work.
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
Great Job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying my work ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry about the late reply :iconorzplz: I have no excuse for my phail :iconhomelessonionplz:
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ChocolateShortcake77 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
I. love. it.
No really, I do.
This is what happens when you lose faith. You become a know-it-all, selfish, empty, shell of a man.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Yeah, it can be sad to break out of that, but I'm glad I did ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry about the late reply :iconorzplz: I have no excuse for my phail :iconhomelessonionplz:
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Mylietus1991 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Professional Writer
hey i got a question guys > how do you get ur files uploaded like in written form do u have to use wordpad or something? help me out please ..
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
True. Very true.
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CLLupin Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012   Writer
"He judges others and puts them into stereotypes.".....
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