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Such Beautiful People:

Beautiful people, you see and believe
But don't you know that they are rife with disease?
Little maggots, that crawl in their flesh
They walk around with a hole in their chest.

They try to pull you, they push you to be
They make a horror; now it's staring at me!
Abomination in the mirror you see
Are you so sick, that you cannot believe?

Oh! These beautiful people, they make you believe,
But you don't want to catch their horrid disease
Little maggots that crawl in their flesh
You hear the lies on their putrid breath.

Now! They tell you how to live and how you should be
But they're ones who will never be free.
Trapped by the mirror and what they see
Is there a devil called Vanity?

Yeah! These beautiful people, they make you believe,
But you don't want to catch their horrid disease.
Little maggots that crawl in their flesh,
You feel the lies on their putrid breath...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 9th March 2012
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Arrr maties, please feel free ta do one of the above (or all of the above if you like me enough). It's helping me in my career ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Alright pirates, ye've seen me write raps and urban rhythms, but how about a kick back ta the genre of darkness.

Some of you might have MISSED this kind of evil. Well, I'll be releasin' plenty over the weekend. After all, I'm in a VERY dark mood these days...

HYAR HAR!

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
You Can't Stop Me - [link]
Struggling at Life -[link]
I Am So Disturbed - [link]
Sweet Bird in A Cage - [link]
Bullies in the Hall - [link]
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
wow you are the capt'n of the DA ship!
This is the most amazing poem I've ever read. seriously.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Professional Writer
You are most welcome my friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student General Artist
wow. i never thought of beauty as a disease before, but now I see where the poem comes from. I see the logic in it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr anything can be a disease, it's just the ailments are not always obvious ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
I see..* stroke the invisible beard of freedom*
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
well i tell you something, if i have not told you before, argh memory is failing me at this age :iconfacepalmplz: though currently i am not overweight , and i hope to keep it that way, i am actually afraid of skinny people, because of a documentary i saw in my memory, but i don't think it actually existed, but oh well creepy, perfection is just as creeps for me, but ironically, being a girl, i am vain... and i aim for the best of my ability.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr haha, the best kind of girl is neither skinny nor chubby, but instead fit, strong and beautiful.

I dig wonder woman :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
ooh but wonder woman can wear tight clothes and still look good
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Duh! that's why wonder woman is awesome :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
in her invisible flying thing
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silverybeast Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012   General Artist
I love this kind of evil! great piece!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye very much fer enjoyin' me work.

Give me a share if ye can ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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RumpusWriter Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so dark. BREATHE in some light, friend.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I will...eventually xD

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great work! the rhymes are really working for you, arn't they?
Just a little note, each stanza of the poem should be the same, otherwise readers may get lost in how they read the poem. See how you have the last line of each in Italics, but the last line of the first one isn't? That can be a bit confusing. It makes a good rap/song, but not so much a poem where the reader has to read it in their head.
Its good other than that, though. Keep at it!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr, that's because there is a rhythm to it. The slight changes are to keep you reading, consistency would mean I'd be repeating the same message but the slight changes are actually a more important than stumbling.

There is a reason why there is no italics in the first verse. It's because it lacks in emphasis, which is different from all the other lines where the rhythm picks up ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I would probably make more sense as a rap, then.. I don't rap.. :/ Sorry about that..
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Writer
That's alright Emma. I'm not bothered :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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mizukisnow Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student
wow... this is awesome...^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly fer tha compliment. I'm very glad ye enjoyed it ^^

Please feel free ta share it out if ye liked it enough :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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mizukisnow Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student
my pleasure ^^
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Ayane458 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
I really like your work :) It's so simple, and so relatable.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly =D

If you enjoyed it, please feel free ta share it out :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Sirean Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Student General Artist
I really love that part
''Trapped by the mirror and what they see
Is there a devil called Vanity?''
so very true :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly =D

Very glad that ye read it. Vanity be a devil that many people find hard ta come ta grips with.

Anywho, drop a share if ya like it enough ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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LMeoka Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is quite interesting
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrrr thank ye, very glad that ye enjoyed it and I hope ye come back ta enjoy more ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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MiaHandcrafter Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Amazing!! So true!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, very glad ta hear that ye enjoyed it ^^

Please feel free ta share it out :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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Wormstache101 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012   Writer
Oh my gosh, this is incredible! :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much. Very glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

Please feel free ta share it out and help me get others ta see it =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012
Appearances be quite decievin' don't ye think mate?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr definitely Cara. It's always a sad thing ta be obsessed with ^^;

Anywho, share it out as usual if ye like it enough :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Humans be such visual creatures. Methinks that be why the teenage girls be into Justin Beiber. To this day I'll nev'r understand it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye me neither, but then again I'm a sucker fer tha pretty lasses, especially the shy ones with inner beauty mmmm :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
*blushes* well, mate me be open if it ever crosses yer mind.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Open fer what?

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconpoliticsplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
Anything worthy o' bein' called an adventure. Like skydivin' or scuberdivin'.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr now that sounds like fun. How about conquerin' tha grand line and red line with me and becomin' pirate legends :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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MzThomas34 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Sooooo much frkin truth! I've wrote one in a similar way but it talks about self-proclaimed "rich" people.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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MzThomas34 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Cha welcome C'ptain!
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animegrl7979 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
its interesting captain chen
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much, glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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animegrl7979 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012
very welcome capitan
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A1r2i3e4l5 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
Awesome, I loved how you called vanity a devil. Great job!!!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank you, glad that you enjoyed this piece.

Drop me a share if you can ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Alberthein1 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
To drop you a share, I wouldn't dare...
Though to sing thee a song, of pirates long gone...
That's a real treasure and really - my pleasure!

A man once sang to the 'O Reilly gang,
He wouldn't last very long...
He sang of trifles, how they couldn't hold rifles,
and surely he'd begone.
But then a man came in nowing what's wrong,
and he said to all the men.
Yoho, y' o'l silver, Before they gut your liver..
go tread in seas your own!

Good to see people being piratey still.
Class, and a glass to ye matey!
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