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Think for a moment: Is the sound of rain, truly what you are hearing?

Imagine this, you're sitting there in your underwear (don't try to pretend you're not). It's raining outside and you've been browsing the internet for the past seven hours. It's already 3:13 a.m. in the morning and a sudden hint of nervousness seizes you. It's silly really, you don't have to attend school, nor do you have work in the morning, but somehow you still feel as though you should force yourself into bed.

You crawl under the covers and bring the blanket up to your chin. Your mind runs over all the things you've done today and you stare at the ceiling, trying to find a comfortable spot on the bed, listening to the sound of rain as it goes pitter-patter on your window. Yet, somehow, the rain sounds different tonight. You feel a strange sinking in your chest and a rising sensation of fear.

The pitter-patter no longer sounds like gentle droplets of water hitting the glass. It sounds more like the fingers of hands rattling against your window pane. You lick your lips and try not to look, you turn your head away but curiosity gets the better of you. You turn quickly and stare hard at the window. Nothing, it was only the rain after all. You smile and comfort yourself, thinking your parents are only a room away. If anything happens you could go straight to them couldn't you.

With that thought in mind you begin to drift off to sleep, but something doesn't quite sit right with you. The sound of pitter-patter, didn't it sound more like the rushing of feet?

Oh dear...

-Siddhartha Chen,
18th May 2014
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Hello everyone,

Tonight I felt more like prose than poetry so I decided to do a short little horror story. I might write more of these if you end up liking them. ENJOY!

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Write a scary story with as few words as possible. It has to invoke some fear. No pregnancy jokes (I'm looking at you Sammy)

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Vivacia18 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
I'm not too bad with rain, but certain sounds that sound like someone is opening my bedroom door make me jump 10 feet in the air from a dead sleep. Which is unfortunate when your dogs tend to sleep right outside your door, and kick it every time they roll over^^;
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You really freaked me out when you started about the fingers.  I think this short story works so well because you start very casuel with just narrating a normal day in a normal live. Then the sudden idea of horror comes unexpected. 

I thought the set-up of the story was very good in the way you reassure the audience again and then scare the shit out of them once more (I do not actually know if you were planning to make this story scary, ir I just have a lot of imagenition).  I only did not really like the oh, dear at the ending. it disrupt the style of the story, but only my opinion.
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AvQayin Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The more I thought about this, the more true I realized it was. I spend a lot of my time sitting in front of this computer in our combination basement/first-floor, where I keep the shades shut. I keep the TV on for noise most of the time. We also have 2 dogs and a cat. Thanks to that lineup, I can, at most, go 10 minutes alone in the house without hearing a head-turning noise. :D (Big Grin) Great writing. Thanks for making something that can actually connect.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
x'D No problem, glad you enjoyed it ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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WafflesThePsychopath Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Lol that's me!  Though not with the rain, more with every other freaking sound I hear....oh my gosh it freaks me out sometimes.....heh heh it's raining right now....
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha, yeaaah. I scare really easily too :/

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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DREAMER1127 Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Especially when the wind's whistling…..  and your 6 years old.  (although I'm still scared 6 years later)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha x'D

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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DREAMER1127 Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I get that feeling all the time….  especially when that annoying branch is knocking against my window.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha, oh yes, super scary at night eh? x'D

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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