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Someday I'd Like to Be A Pirate:


Someday I'd like t' be a pirate and sail across the seven seas.

I always thought it might be nice t' feel the ocean breeze.

I've always dreamt of findin' treasure, stashed away in a hidden box,

And then after I drop the anchor I'd burst open the locks!

Dubloons I'd find and diamonds t' keep, trinkets worth a life;

Or maybe I'd find a sacred sword or a really ancient knife!

But as I grew, I was soon t' learn, that dreams do not come true.

How many times have I seen a man be strangled till he's blue?

How many days have I watched them stumble, cursin' ill their fate.

When none would reach a helping hand, their heart would fill with hate.

I grew t' question th' ways of Kings who whipped the backs o' men,

More labour earned with blood and sweat while the preachers say 'Amen!'

Donations are given t' temples rich, while the poor are in the street;

So many souls are quickly trampled beneath their ugly feet....

Where first I believe the world was fair, now I truly see -

Turns out I'll have t' be a pirate, so we can all be free!


"Now then lads, how many nobles should we be robbin t'night?"


-Chen Yuan Wen, 28th October 2012
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If you'd like to hear me read poems and do a little comedy live then then check out episode 3 of my live show here: [link]

Author's Comment:

Arrr maties,

First off, congratulations t' :icondarkzelda15:, yer drawin' is the first one I chose t' turn into a written poem ^^

Now, the lit. community is still sufferin' from the odd individual not given credit fer images. Me stance is pretty clear, ye don't own it, don't use it without permisson. T' demonstrate how t' give proper credit. Here is the format:

I, Chen Yuan Wen, do not own the image used. It was created by :icondarkzelda15: and used as a cover with her express permission. The original can be found here:



Please visit the original artist ^^.

Anywho, about the poem itself, I wanted t' experiment with rhymes using the single-line format (also as a way of testin' the water for a rhymin' shot-glass poem) and that's why I did this particular piece. Yeeees, the idea behind it is cliche, but guess wot, I wrote it in pirate so thar ye go. A fresh take on it xD

Enjoy lads, don't ferget t' fave and/or comment and/or share me works. The more me word spreads th' better! *___*

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. If you too would like yer artwork t' be given more exposure. Do up a chibi of Chenbeard either posin', fightin' or doin' somethin'. If ye do it well, I'll definitely try and think up an idea t' go with it ^^

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~

There are things beneath the garden,
Which you really shouldn't see.

There are things beneath the garden,
That don't belong to me.

There are things beneath the garden,
Gone rotten blue and black.

There are things beneath the garden,
In a dripping gunny sack...

~

There are flowers in the garden,
Which you really shouldn't pull.

There are flowers in the garden,
That are sitting on top of wool.

There are flowers in the garden,
With a really rotten scent.

There are flowers in the garden,
Above bodies burnt and bent...

~

I love this little garden,
It's a special place to me.

I love this
DishonouredDishonoured:

He stands before the adoring crowd,
Basking in their cheers and standing ovation.
But he has already been dishonoured -
By means of his perverse innovation.

For none could know of the dark secret;
About the art that he claims to be his own.
It is naught but an illusion, smoke and mirrors -
A theft for which he must atone...

But this disgusting creature, this worthless abhuman;
So desperate for the glory which he sees upon the stage!
Will quietly don the skin of another;
An urge he must assuage...

Biting his nails, a cracked smile upon his lips, he whispers:
"No one will know, no one will find it and I am great..."

Coward of a ManCoward of a Man:

You stand there whinin', cryin' crocodile tears and playin' victim.
Ye eyes demand pity, but yer lips are spewin' nothin' but lies.
Flowery speeches o' harmony and unification;
It's bollocks and snake-oil I say!

I ask ye, as someone who aspires t' be a leader:
What exactly are ye worth?
Who exactly are ya, and what in th' bloody hell makes you worth followin'?

Now I've watched ye fer a long time, and I've known ye fer even longer -
Ye always stand there beggin', askin' us fer help, askin' fer a handout;
But yer hands are clean, uncalloused, and completely free from sweat or toil.
Instead, ye make us promises; promi
Little Soldier BoyHe does not fight for the General barking orders,

Nor for the man in a suit, who sent him across borders...

In his pocket he keeps a single picture, a sole reminder

Like ancient scripture. A home he misses so endlessly,

Tirelessly calling out in his dreams at night. It is the last

That remains on his lips, with his finger pressed upon the trigger.

A single heartbeat, as he sights his enemy; A quiet prayer

To rest in peace. Yet soon it fades, as hope is fleeting;

For the little soldier boy, once marching home.

 "Bottoms up buddy, I miss you..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 18th October 2012


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THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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:icondademonicartist:
I read the journal you posted related to this particular writing, so I felt compelled to write a critique.

The first several lines do indicate child-like dreams, but isn't that how we all started? Children who had dreams without limits. As we grow older we see the injustices of the world and almost lose faith in humanity. The narrator experiences this and decides that he's going to do what he thinks will change the world.

Yes the lines that describe the cruel injustices of the world at the time of the archetype pirate, however, they can be used figuratively for today's world.

The final two lines run along the idea of "bad" guys being "good" guys much like Robin Hood and various other depictions of the idea, so some lose of originality points.

I find the imagery disturbingly truthful.

In closing I have to say I enjoy this poem both for entertainment and analyzing. Truly a piece of art, especially when compelled to scrutinize it because of another's opinion.

(P.S This is my first critique, so I hope I did it right and my comments are helpful.)
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kdhruv2 Nov 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I love the poem. And the picture just makes it better.
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samuelskanvis Nov 13, 2012  Student Filmographer
Haha, very nicely done indeed, has both a child-like innocence and an analytical adult feel to it, which I really like :D
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Feanor-the-Dragon Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Marvelous!
The childish air transitions sharply, but well, into a more profound message. As always your poetry is meaningful, regardless of its style.
Write on, my friend... write on!
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ButterflyEcho Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The chibi is darling no matter what has been said about it to the contrary!!!:love:
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aisukurimu-tan Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderfully written captain!
Lots of imagination and creativity with the story!
Though not one of your more deeper work, it was an especially entertaining read.
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WordOfChen Nov 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, it was meant to be entertaining and I'm glad you enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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miyu713 Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha I really liked that Chibi, Im really happy it was the first one used! :)
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WordOfChen Nov 4, 2012  Professional Writer
yes, it was a loving gift and I had to use it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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JirachitheGreat Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like the Chibi, personally.
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WordOfChen Nov 4, 2012  Professional Writer
me too :3

hence why I used it first, it just gave me that creative spark ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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