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Shot to Hell:

You know, I should probably be angry about all this
I mean, I am dead after all...
Still, I suppose there could be worse things in life

Of course, it did hurt you know; when you shot me
Oh my god! I thought I've just been shot!
The bleeding wasn't the worst part of the ordeal though
Instead, the worst part of entire situation was the feeling of slowly dying
the feeling of losing the life inside your body...

Some might say that it feels like being buried in a blizzard
but for me, it was more like jumping head first into an icy sea
I couldn't move and I couldn't speak...
all I could do was to simply hang there limp and wait for the water to fill my lungs

All of a sudden, quick as a flash, I ended up here
here in this realm of flames and smoke, dust and death, desolation and sorrow...
As the pillars of fire reached for the sky, I found myself drifing down
deep into the depths of this realm, like a cartridge spent from a gun

At first, I was confused by all of this
I wondered what exactly might have happened to me
but then, I remembered you. You and your disgusting face
the last sight that I got to see before the darkness came and captured me...

Oh yes, I remember you very clearly my friend
and the big man himself has given me a special honour
I will be allowed to wait here you see, for the moment when you first arrive
and as you walk through these fiery gates...we will all be waiting to greet you

I was surprised you know, by how much things have changed from the stories
we no longer use simple pitchforks and fire. That's just laughable!
Instead, we have something much more delicious for the likes of you

Do you know the feeling of being stripped of all your bones
Stripped and  hung like a loose bedsheet, from a tree of iron spikes
Here you will be buffeted constantly by the howling winds
until the very flesh from your body is torn away, piece by loving piece

Bullets, tear gas? No that's much too simple for you...
your mind is weak and that is why you crumbled and gave in to madness
but here, the imagination becomes the very source of our power
and so I need you to imagine; imagine all the horrible things we are waiting to do to you...

For instance, allow us to feed you with tiny pellets that swell inside your stomach
they grow in size and density, swelling up, until they rupture you internally
It will allow you to die, over and over, choking in your own fluids
until you've finally satisfied me with your cries for mercy...

I have so much more in store for you here my friend
and I am waiting so eagerly for you to finally get here...
Come visit me soon, my dearest killer, for there is much I want to share
I wish to show you, that there is something so much worse than the mere loss of life...

You thought yourself to be the Joker, the crown prince of crime
but in the end you are the same as every other psychopath
Bearing delusions of grandeur, yet little more than a mewling kitten
in the face of a true horror...

Come my son...come close...we are all so eager to meet you again...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 21st July 2012
This isn't quite poetry...more prosetry really, but I wanted to do something in tribute to the Colorado shooting...

As my heart goes out to those suffering from the tragedy...my own sweetheart could have been caught in the cross-fire as she lives nearby.

It shocked me and that is why I am stopping the revolution for a day to observe some silence for these individuals who have died or been wounded.

I'm not big on the whole heaven or hell thing, but I figure that hell would have evolved by now. If it is no longer something that evokes fear...then it is not doing its job. New tortures...new horrors; that is what awaits such individuals I hope. Oh well, my mind is rather dark ^^

-Chen

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rytanny Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is so good :3 I really think about how lucky I am, because I might have been one of those people in that theater. Great job :)
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KingBJKoopa Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hate that guy...freaking mental breakdown or something T_T
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
omg! omg! I don't know what to say!
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Wolfman2228 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
i am good and evil i consider my self a angel and demon hybrid
considering im still alive. i am stuck between heaven and hell
may i find out where i go someday
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Marwoucha Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw i love iittttttttttttttt
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you it was a fitting tribute poem I think ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Marwoucha Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
you are welcome oooooow soo nice
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michlitsch Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
i got chills
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furyswufeiudt Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
WOow.. dud i love ur writtings.. its sooo cooooooool ;)
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Mossstar10 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't have much to say other then AGREED and that this sorta kinda DEPRESSING xD.
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
no words, I'm absolutely speechless. remarkable, excellent, but there is nothing that could possibly describe how fantastic this is. thank you.
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Another Great.
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LyraJolt Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Student General Artist
I have heard about the shootings as well, the thing I am most worried about who is doing, if the suspect hasn't done any of this then that means he/she could be out and about setting new bombs/attack plans on more people.
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LondonnRose Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
and to think several states over I had just finished watching the movie at our premier. now all i'll think about when I remember the movie is the guy that decided to ruin it.
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Dang, after the Joker line I instantly knew it was about the CO. shooting. Dang, I can feel the hatred the guy in this poem feels o. o.
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SamiKitty14 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Intense, and an amazing piece cap`n ^.^ :iconpenguinclapplz:
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miss-butler Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can always expect something good from you, well done! :clap:
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Truly a lovely piece here Captain.
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IsabelFlame Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
wow. I've looked at some of your other work, and i'm glad to say i'm exremly impressed. this reminds me of a place i wrote about in the book i'm writing, daredevil. it's called soul prison. this describes the very pain and misery that allows its victims to be swallowed in madness and revenge.
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Richnaut Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
I didn't like it. It was too predictable and lacked originality or any sort of deeper thought. You simply blathered on about death and all that other "dark" stuff. Emptiness, coldness, revenge. I've seen many others like this before.
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ImDeathTheKid Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
that made me cry..
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
i like the general aura set by the piece of dire and morbid tortures .. but it fails to deliver anything that is even slightly horrifying and/or disturbingly graphic. Not sure if that was to prevent putting on the mature content filter, to not scare your readers, I as a reader may be de-sensitised to modern day violence, or that your mind is not as dark as you claim ... or a combination of all of the above :P

Nicely done nonetheless!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, my dearest friend, you of all people should know how deliciously dark I can get. However, as this was a tribute piece, I wanted to tone it down. While it was about the tragedy that occurred, I felt that going off the steep end would put me on the side of the joker wannabe and that's not where I wanted to stand ^^

-Chen
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Yea I thought as much! I just wanted to make sure though!

And don't insult Joker by calling that crazy wannabe a Joker wannabe!

Anyway awesome work as usual :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Yeah true...what was I even thinking daaaamn xD Must be all this insanity I've been dealing with lately bwahaha ;3

-Chen
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
More like must be all this drain on your energy from letting your insanity out :P
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Could be :3

-Chen
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
:P xD
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Acalanthide Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow. I thought I was dark...
This was beautiful. Seriously, you make my writing sound like the mad scribblings of a two-year old. Wow.
I do have one question though, just for clarification purposes. Why did the victim end up in Hell? I am just curious. Great work!
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Agent-Of-Insanity Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
When it say's
"the big man himself has given me a special honour
I will be allowed to wait here you see, for the moment when you first arrive
and as you walk through these fiery gates...we will all be waiting to greet you"
I think it's implying that, they get the privilege to wait for the moment their murder arrives, so they get the pleasure of punishing him for stealing all of the years, and all of the memories that now never will be.
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Acalanthide Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student General Artist
I do understand the punishing part. Righteous justice. Now I understand. They aren't being sent down to Hell, they have chosen to stay there, until the murderer arrives. There will be no stone, no pit of flame that this "Joker" can hide in. They will find him, and make him beg for release.
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
It's annoying really as it is sad. I just PRAY this isn't a "Not Guilty by Reason of Insanity" or "Guilty but Insane" case.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This person sounded nicer in the beginning. :/ At that point, I had thought that I already knew what this was about, and then at the end, I thought, 'Ohhhh.' That guy...
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my. It's became so dark near the end. Being almost apathetic in the beginning most definitely did help. Murder is a madness that lives with the world sadly. It eats everyone out. :(
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k1ttykat91 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nicely written. Gave me chills towards the end. Now wouldn't it be cool to see the movie come to life? The man claimed he was the joker, I just think it would be real awesome if there was someone dressed as batman to stop him, to show heros do exist in real life. Terrible tragedy. I wish everyone well.
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DrkSorceress Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
I'm so glad you did this...I know some people suffering right now :(
Nice work
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starmic Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
athis is very interesting really glad you write this give me more things to my stories i made up stories come from others stories donīt ask
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starmic Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
wow
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saltwatersleep Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
I think it is sick how you put this in almost 300 groups. I mean, just enjoy your own work. I hate to be rude, and I'm sorry if I am being so, but I wish people would just write for themselves instead of shamelessly promoting themselves in an attempt to be famous.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Hello, I would just like to let you know that putting work in groups is just to get it showcased. Deviant art allows for us to do that and many deviants on the popular page do submit to a lot of groups. I don't see how it is a bad thing to submit your work to more places. It is no different from submitting a piece to different art galleries so that it may be showcased.

As for my 'intent', I treat my writing as a career option. To my, I love to write pieces as a tribute or as a means of entertaining people. I love to write stories and humour pieces to put a smile on peoples faces.

If you would prefer that I write solely for myself, I believe that to be selfish. I write so that others may enjoy what is expressed. That is all ^^

Of course you are welcome to disagree with me and dislike me, I only ask that you address any questions of my intent directly and post it on the journal if you want to be upfront about it ^^

-Chen
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saltwatersleep Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student Writer
I do not dislike you, in any way shape or form. It was just my opinion, and you are not the sole reason for my comment. There were plenty of others before who used such a method in order to become "deviantart famous". You were not to receive the the blunt of my anger, and I do apologize for that, and I'm sure your intent was much more pure than the others. It just angers me. But thank you for replying so respectfully, and I wish you the best of luck in your writing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh that's alright ^^

As a student of business and finance I understand the fame game plenty. It's difficult to stay out of it. I mean, everyone craves recognition for their works. Some men feel small when they don't get it and others feel nothing at all regardless of how they are viewed.

I am actually in neither of those categories. I do not feel small when my work is not viewed, but I do feel disappointment that I didn't work hard enough. Unfortunately, the latter was untrue because of the recent systematic problem.

I feel that since you are taking the time to keep things civil, which I always enjoy since it makes for pleasant conversation ^^; I ought to give you an explanation for this whole issue.

Starting on the 17th of July. Several deviants, including myself, noticed that my work was being shuffled behind less popular literature pieces. Often this is misconstrued as my interpretation of them having worked less than me or some other untrue statement about my wounded pride; however the situation is not about ego, but rather about fairness.

You see, if a man works hard and attempts to do his best to produce something which he wishes to be seen; and if the public, having now seen the piece and deemed it popular, vote for it via faves. The man should get his recognition. It would be the same as coming first in a sports event. In such a situation it is not fair to take the trophy from the winner, without offering an explanation. Unfortunately however, that is exactly what occurred ^^;

As I told another deviant there would be no problem if the administration had sent out an automatic note saying:

"Dear WordofChen, Your pieces have been popular X number of times and will now be reshuffled for X time period."

With just one automatic message, the deviant would not feel lost or wronged at all and could go along his merry way. He could make fillers to pass the time and appreciate the works of others while he waits for his turn to go again.

This would be evidence of a well-ordered and just system where there are no secrets kept from the public. Would withholding this information hurt anyone? No, there is only the upside of keeping the public aware and happy ^^ I would think it wrong if people tried to break out of the cycle unfairly, but since we do not HAVE a cycle at all but rather a random reshuffling without warning or even so much as a courteous note. It would seem we have a problem ^^;

That is where this entire revolution started. I will admit that it is about breaking the shackles imposed on me, but I will assure you that the purpose is to better understand the system, until the admins come with a reply. The system does not need to change drastically, one automatic message would solve everything ^^

-Chen
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TheEternalRose Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
That's his whole goal, you see... [link]
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saltwatersleep Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
I wasn't aware of that. Things like this happen everyday on deviantart, and today I finally made a comment about it. Unfortunately, it was to someone who didn't have the exact purpose that I thought. My apologies. It still is an ongoing issue that makes me very angry, but this deviant's intent is not what I had believed it to be.
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MasterofWordsAndArt Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
excellent excellent. i wish the victims could enact their revenge.
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Moleboi Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Wonderful...very Dantesque :D
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Myennaius13 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
The mind is only as dark as you allow yourself to be in such shadows. As for the shooter himself, I'm pretty sure that he'll only be getting out of jail in a bag.
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TawneyK Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
The first thing I thought was: this is pretty accurate, dude. Now I'm dreading dying...
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Duragonslaya Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
OMG, I got chills, dude.!.! I'm not too big on horror, but this was fantastic.!.!
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Kefs Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Its really good. :)
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