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Sorry I'm A Man Sorry I'm A Man:
He stands there naked
A blank-faced label
No features
No face
He is not an individual
He is exactly what you make him to be
The product of your misguided hate
The product of your personal prejudice
Caught blind and shackled
Voice stripped and throat cut
On knees and hands
He crawls beneath a slanderous hail
"Let they who are without sin, be the first to cast a stone"
Then you must all be innocent, unblackened and pure
Instead what I see
Is not angel wings and a white halo
Instead what I see
Is your silent profanity
Twisted obscene mask of humanity
Beneath the righteous sword of a figure of justice
Lies a


Where Angels Play Where Angels Play:
A lonely spark appears before me tonight
amongst the struggles deep inside of me...
Should I give in, will I breathe in?
How much more can I be forced to take
before my soul breaks?
Shards crashing into me
letting me know I am alive
If only
I am barely breathing...
The moon lights my pathway
deep in dark, where we will fade
I've walked past the archway
Where angels will play...
The warmest touch, upon my skin
Wings that glow with sacred light, from deep within
They have come to take me back, to where I've been
Gone away into the winds, my voice forever lingering
Do I alone escape this and find my peace
wi


Why I Hate My Life Why I Hate My Life:
Despite the fact that I'm a trained professional
I have to work odd-jobs making deliveries on a motorcycle
The only girl who I ever loved
was just using me as a replacement
The only girl that actually likes me
runs a bar and took over my house
I don't have the guts to kick her out
so I end up sleeping at an abandoned church
I've recently picked up a strange rash
it hurts and I have to wear sleeves to cover it
My only friends are a guy that never comes out from a forest
and a girl that's always looking to steal the meager possessions I have
Everything sucks really
because the one person who cared about me
is


My Beautiful Filth My Beautiful Filth:
We'll start with the rose petals
scattered lavishly across the bed
A symbolic collage of my broken thoughts
like memories crushed and thrown into the winds
they lie where they fall, forever forgotten...
Tacks and nails shall line the floor!
A perfect representation of my painful steps
To walk forward was to suffer
to stand still was to endure
Like the insults thrown at me, like the physical abuse
they drive their way into my skin and remain embedded
Unable to be removed except by force
And now comes the masterpiece, the perfect finishing touch
A wall of words and photographs depicting my sorrows and greivance


Mercenary 1-1 MERCENARY
Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty
Release One: Pages 1 - 3
THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
This Poem gives a good view in both the obsessive and terrible behaviour and mentally state of the rapist... I think you've sketched a truefully portrait of how this person could've been.
Also the setting you create by thoroughly discribing the scene and the ambiance, it really makes the chills crawl on my back picturing it in front of me. You do a great job by letting the reader feel that terrible anguish the girl feels.
I feel You carefully chose the right words to express the thoughts of the girl, and of the rapist. The birthdaysong of the rapist gives me chills and the denying of the girl gives me a Hollow, sorrow feeling wich makes me want to reach out for her, wanting to comfort her.
Once again, a truely impressive poem wich leaves a mix of sorrow, anger, and admiring for the mental strength of the girl. I give this poem allmost full rating because its a true masterpiece and a true critic (i believe in) never gives full rating because one can ALWAYS improve him/herself. I believe that should always be an artists' goal.
Marvin
This piece left me feeling somewhat hollow at the end. Thankfully I cannot relate with this poem, but I feel for those who can relate.
The imagery is definetly one that sticks with you. The poem assualts the senses. You can hear the bed creaking, smell the sweat, feel the pain intermingled with the victim's detachedness, feel the hot salty tears, hear the hope shatter... It gave me the chills, and a deep sorrow. I know many in your audience had the same reaction I did. Though, some may have disagreed with the idea of this poem, they need to wake up to reality. As harsh as it sounds, this is someting many people struggle with. This poem can and will touch more people who can relate.
The elegance you used to protray this topic is gentle- tender even. That is quiet a difficult thing to accomplish when writting such a harsh subject. You are truly a poet to the heart, and see the world through beautiful eyes. I thank you for sharing your work wit us, and I look foward to connecting with more of your poetry.
To wrap this up, I'd like to share a quote with you that fits rather well with the unfortunate and hideous things that happen daily,
"It takes ten times as long to put yourself back together than it does to fall apart."
-F.O.
Well done once again
May the odds be ever in your favor
-LuvThemHungerGames
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