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You sit silently, painfully pondering, torn.

Wondering if your nightmares will stop.

You shake as you start awake,

Twisting beneath the covers, eyes flickering.

Panic seizes your heart, bile rising.

You hold it back, barely; panting.

You watch quietly as shadows dance.

Glad for your freedom from dreams.

You turn on your side, sighing,

Believing that your torment is over...

But that is when you realize,

As the ceiling sprouts blooded eyes

And as the walls crumble. That

Your terror has only just begun...

So run little rabbit, run away.

Or it won't be fun, this game we play...




-Siddhartha Chen, 29th May 2014
Fave it if you enjoyed it (^w^)/ I'll do more that way!

Alright, so here's a little something I like to call a six-word series. It's a bit of an extension from a six-word story and it was brought to me by my dear friend :icon7demented:

I realised after seeing his six-word series that it is a format that is both challenging and yet inspiring. Telling a story with a restriction of six words at a time.

I'll add an additional rule to this however. Only the last line doesn't have to follow this format. Why? Because it helps you create more impact and properly finish off the poem!

So do give it a shot, you might like it in the end :'3

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:

Mini-Challenge:

Do your own six-word series on any topic. It's quite fun!

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nitrocyborc Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014
Noice
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darkshadow1024 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wow.... this is just beautiful... I almost feel as though I just woke up from a nightmare... (and i never dream/ have nightmares so i actually am always trying to replicate the feeling, so thanks for that)
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Smurfette123 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student Filmographer
This reminds me of the movie House of 1000 Corpses. 
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snowleezard Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014
Excellent poem, it reads like lyrics to a metal song and and paints a  surreal and creepy picture inception style nightmare. This poem skitters right into favorites folders and makes the items next to it nervous. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly, I'm glad that you enjoyed it ^^

My poetry likes making things nervous

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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amy2544 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
So run little rabbit, run away.

Or it won't be fun, this game we play...

x3 //painting an image in my mind
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Professional Writer
If I'm painting an image, then I'm doing my job right ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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amy2544 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:painter: hahaha yes you are! You are doing an amazing job at that. :meow:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Great! x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Evalnia Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this, you can really feel the anxiety as you read.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha thank you so much for enjoying it ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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Evalnia Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure :)
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Moleboi Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Professional Writer
"as the ceiling sprouts bloody eyes" that is my favorite line. Bizarre and nightmarish.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh yes, now I hope I can create more nightmarish scenes x'D

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student General Artist
o__o WOW. That was pretty creepy. Something about the sentences only having six words a piece made it even creepier. It's like, I dunno, I imagined this twisted little creepy puppet master speaking these lines and his speech is all short and staccato and creepy as hell. But yeah, that's what I got out of that ^^;
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Nice, glad it gave you that kind of feeling :'3

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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Saga-Sage Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
Geez,  I've had a nightmare-ception before, a nightmare in a nightmare. It really is no fun.

A lot of the time when I have them I realize what they are and force myself from the dream awake.

That aside- very nice work.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha thanks :'3 I've also dealt with nightmares before and once I forced myself awake after death...it was a cold experience ._.

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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Saga-Sage Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
Sometimes they can vary depending on what we recently have feared. Interesting how that works.

I was once shot in the head in a dream before... it was... livid. It did not hurt, but I saw it in slow-motion as it happened. Suddenly I was just above, watching myself as it happened. I assumed I had passed on or something.

One of the strangest I've had... though it didn't frighten me.
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DreamerOfTheNight Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
I love this alot o.o
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks for enjoying it my dear friend ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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7Demented Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I forgot to mention that the story has to be between 10-20 lines as well ^^;

But at any rate, I'm glad to have helped start something new >w< Hopefully this will catch on with a lot of people~!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
Well, it'd usually fit in that :'3

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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HyperactiveChaosgirl Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, now this is quite the creepy poem, I really liked how gripping this is ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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HyperactiveChaosgirl Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're very welcome ^^
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DylanSeto Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Artist
Seems like a fun idea :3 Gotta give it a try.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
It's pretty fun to work with for sure :'3

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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DylanSeto Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Artist
I made something for it, that'll I'll put up tomorrow but it's pretty violent/gory/offensive.  :P
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
All the more reason to do it :'3

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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DylanSeto Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Artist
I put it up xD It may be way over the top though. lol
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Link brother...I could use some inspiration, I'm fuckin' dying right now

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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DylanSeto Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Artist
Well Since you faved it I presume you found it? XD i can link you to a bunch of spoken word poets i like instead? :p
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Professional Writer
I been watching some spoken poets recently and its given me a good creative boost. I look forward to when I have my mask so I can record some vids of spoken poetry/rap :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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TheRealKing219 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
One word, Dope! I might have to give this six word series a try.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
Give it a shot, you might find it's awesome ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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TheRealKing219 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok cool
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LadyOfFrost Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good work! The format certainly is challenging, but it's quite fun. :D (Big Grin) 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh yes, that I can certainly agree to ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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Asztat Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student
Really good one ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Artist
wow so its a challenging but also inspiring i like it ^^ 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
I love the new format, it's just incredible ^^

-Siddhartha Chen :iconwordofchen:
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Student Artist
It is indeed ^^
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