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Remember Your Dues:

You think you can forget it;
As soon as you forget it,
Believe you will regret it,
Relieved of all your credit.

Your honour and your lifestyle,
Curled around my knife while-
You sit and play your games,
Thinking everything's the same.

But I'm watching and I'm waiting;
This patience suffocating,
But it's worth the while I'm waiting
For this hatred I am facing.

You thought it was forever,
And so you did endeavour;
To pretend the chains and ties,
That bind you; they have died.

But the fact is you have lied;
Forgotten where you're tied.
The markings on your side,
Remember why you hide!

But its too late for apologies;
The ice has just cracked -
And my gun has just cracked,
And soon you're getting capped.

No love for another traitor,
No love for another hater.
Remember who is greater:
A king or his creator?

-C-Dragon, 22nd April 2013
Hey everyone ^^

Tonight's work is more of practice for the Captain rather than anything representative. He was working with rhyme to see how far he could go either twisting words or phrases to make them fit with the context.

Overall I think it turned out rather nicely o3o.

So enjoy everybody, I'll get him to rap it sometime, you have my promise on that~ PYON! <3 (still waiting for my pay rise for doing this =_+)

-Co-Captain Bunny Hayes
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kadcherry Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice finish dude
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Maj0rMareMolester Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The last two stanzas were absolutely superb :D All-in-all it was a hell of a rap (at least that's what I imagined it as) but those last two parts reminded my of "No Lie" by 2 Chainz and Drake and it's got sentimental value to me...
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GilPires Featured By Owner May 2, 2013
THUMBS UP!!
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LoquaciousQuidnunc Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Dues are really "Do's",
just spelled differently.
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well done!
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lupum7 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
love the last line!
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niichan22 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Every time i read this it sounds like a song to me
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candyzombielord Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing work. and lets hope you get that Pay raise Co-Captain Bunny Hayes.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha naah, just gotta keep workin' with what I get .3.

-Co-Captain Hayes
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesomely epic
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
I really like the last stanza of this o: Both what it says and the rhythm and rhyme.
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vellusz Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should submit your poetry to Poetry Free For All. I think you might be able to get away with this one relatively unscathed.
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DenmarkKittenKiss Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Artist
wow, good ^w^
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StarStruckAngel711 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol me and my sister just rapped this! Really like this poem! It's great!
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The last two lines remind me of a passage from A Game of Thrones.
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DarlingDetermination Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Fantastic and breathtaking as always!
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Z-A-D-Y Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
is he still locked in his room?

either way i rather like this poem, good job to him.
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Haha sort of xD He comes out for food sometimes .3.

Replying from my account cause my internets is glitchy right now, soo yeah

-Co-Captain Bunny Hayes
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Z-A-D-Y Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ahh i seeee
hah drag him out darling, drag him out.
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Haha but but what if he's writing something epic in there ;A; i don't wanna disturb hiiim

-Co-Captain Bunny Hayes
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Z-A-D-Y Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
he'll turn into a vampire! haha
drag him into the sun XD
see if he melts!
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
NYUU ;A; I don't want him to meeeeeelt!

-Co-Captain Bunny Hayes
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Z-A-D-Y Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
haha i'm pretty sure he won't but in all seriouseness you need to get him outa that room, it's not healthy
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Yesh I know ;n; I just gotta figure out a fool proof plan ;n;

-Co-Captain Bunny Hayes
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