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Practice Poem - Poor Little Timmy:

Down into well, poor Timmy fell,
Down he fell into the pits of hell.
Brought into hell by an eldritch spell,
Poor little Timmy who fell down the well.

Alone he cowered and shivered and shook,
He shook for hours, so long it took,
So long it took for him to feel well,
Well enough to explore this hell...

Through pathways littered with scenes most gory;
Most gory indeed was little Timmy's story,
A story of fear and suffering defined,
Poor little Timmy, he ran out of time...

Now then, I think I'll go welcome my little guest...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 14th December 2012
Arrr maties,

I figured that on th' days I don't make official releases, instead I'll just put up some poems that I write while practisin' me skills. These are usually never published, but I figured that more releases are better, so MORE IT IS HYAR HAR!

This one was a little bit of a rhymin' splurge, I wanted t' try and see how long I could run connectin' rhymes without losin' the story. Turns out I had t' end it n three stanzas xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer not replyin' t' many o' you, I've been busy workin' on me e-book stuff xD
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Zelda85044 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful, so captivating! 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
neat :D
tell the story and bring it to the present :D
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Maj0rMareMolester Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the style you used here and it showed the story perfectly so BRAVO sir :3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly Chase ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
wahh so creepy and cool!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks, glad ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist
Poor tiny Timmy! 'E don't know what 'it 'im...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye...poor little Timmy indeed xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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ellenah1 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awesome. Amazing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Me two favourite words, thank ye fer enjoyin' this ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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ellenah1 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the e-book!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks friend. If ye wouldn't mind a tiny sliver o' me shameless self promotion.

T'would really help me out if ye visited me e-book's publication page and liked or shared it. If ye want t' sample it as well, ye can read the first 15% o' the book free.

Here be th' link (^_^)> [link]

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ellenah1 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I will, of course! And thanks!
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samuraishoujo95 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you know what's funny? this actually sounds like some sort of children's poem, only they would probably wet their beds after reading it XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Pretty much, which is why I doubt ye'd read it t' yer kids in the first place. Unless ye like payin' fer therapy xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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kari123 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
haahah lol great job this is so funny and awesome I love it! :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool stuff. I read a poem today in Danish class, where the poet did the same thing with the end of the words starting the next verse :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha so ye noticed that did ye? Glad ye liked it friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like those kinds of poems very much :)
Have you read The Hunger Games? There is this poem (or actually a song) - The Hanging Tree - in the third novel. It is really amazing, and it reminds me a little of your darker poems :meow:

Wow, random comment anyways
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Nay I did see th' move though. Speakin' o' books however...I have just released me own and if ye don't mind I'll just leave a little self-promotion here:

T'would really help me out if ye visited me e-book's publication page and liked or shared it. If ye want t' sample it as well, ye can read the first 15% o' the book free.

Here be th' link (^_^)> [link]

Thank ye :iconfluttershyyayplz:

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I will! Unfortunately, I do not have the money to buy the remaining 85 %
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha, tis fine, sharin' and likin' the book help plenty ^^

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, but sadly, the link doesn't work D:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Writer
It might be the http part.

Try this one: [link]

Sorry bout sending twice, this one is the correct one

-Captain Chenbead of th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Writer
That's odd, try this one yeah?
[link]

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Pent19 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Needs to be longer!! want more!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha more will come in future, hold ye horses ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Nero-Feuer Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
not bad, i think the only real problem is that you tend to use a lot of the same words over and over again
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
That's the key t' this whole poem isn't it ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it is his intention :)
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Voltor07 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Woud love to set this to music.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Please do if ye like ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Voltor07 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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Shinigami-shisan Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love it :D
I write poems myself, not very good ones but ya know...
I'm starting a series of poems called 'When the clock strikes 12'
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, well practice makes perfect so write till ye drop ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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augumon05 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
excellently worded, nice rhyme scheme, and ending was very nice.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye me fine friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Eridiumwolf Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Then Pewdiepie yelled
"YOU DISGRACE!"
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
ROFL, I do be wishin' he had xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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angel8541 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
I LOVE PEWDIEPIE!*BROFIST*
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LivelovelifeEleni Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
brofistssdfghnmn
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DannyOfX Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Guess Lassy didn't find him.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
No sadly, that pirate dog be a lil' bit tempermental I say >_>

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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MagmaLamp Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
As a TIm I am now highly skeptical of myself. Thanks. : - )
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Please don't be dyin' too soon eh? xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Tanoshiix3 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
That last line makes the poem ten times scarier.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, thank ye fer enjoyin' it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry fer replyin' after so long, been busy with me e-book which has just been released
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Tanoshiix3 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
lol no problem, i kinda forgot about this comment haha ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Tis okay, I'm sorry I always take so long (Q_Q). Though if ye could find it in ye heart t' fergive an ol' pirate. I do have a wee bit o' self-promotion t' show ye:

T'would really help me out if ye visited me e-book's publication page and liked or shared it. If ye want t' sample it as well, ye can read the first 15% o' the book free.

Here be th' link (^_^)> [link]

Thank ye :iconfluttershyyayplz:

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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