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Memories of War:

What is this long-lost memory inside?
Where oceans turn; what have we left behind
With star-burned wings out above the sky.
The sleeping sons are lovingly left to lie...

A thousand tears you've cried for all,
Now its time for you to fall!
Will you open up the door,
To the future we ignore?

Are you simply lying broken,
From the memory awoken;
Are you simply living lies,
Bitter taste with ropes you tie...

And the world will soon forget.

Fill my heart with this regret?

For the victims written in stone.

Unspoken sin you now atone...


Yeah I've seen this world where we livin' in pain,
Wrap my body round with chain.
Now we both know we be broken;
Give this man his smokin' token.

Held up guns with both his hands;
Not a boy he's cause he's a man.
Order comes by a suit and hand.
Will you flee or will you stand?


This is a memory of our war,
Of all the things that we can't ignore.
And staying blind to the cries of pain...


Will lonely ashes be what remains?


-Chen Yuan Wen ft. The C-Crew, 15th January 2013
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Aye maties,

As I've stated I'm going back t' basics and so this is actually a song that I wrote yesterday t'gether with me old friends from me rap crew. The part in italics is th' guest rap sung by them and I do the clean vocals (no change in font) as well the rough dirty growls (bold).

My friend raps in a voice similar to snoop dogg's smooth style so I thought it worked very well with the overall chemistry of the piece ^^ His piece is in italics.

It was a lot of fun to do this song (gotta admit that) even if the topic might be over done, I was happy to explore it and doubly thankful for the chance :3

Enjoy mates.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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:iconmichel-le-fou:
So now I behold your latest work of art and I am again impressed. The same well-made rhymed couplets, the same neat slanted rhyme as an opener. The bold type is surely an emphasis, to bring something to the other's mind.
The words selected for the rhyme pattern show good poetic sense. I caught that from the stanzas in bold type especially.
Then there is the question ye demanded mid-way, which rings with a bit of scorn or ....
"Fill my heart with regret?" I dare to say, No.
Back to common print and a different tone, but still effective. I can only conclude that you and I know our stuff.
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You Write so many and yet this one was lacking in it's Impact I have heard others close to the likes and I am saying it is good but needs some improvement.

Keep up the good work and remember that this is only one of many opinions that are to be shared.

I wish you the best of luck and send you my best wishes for more of your work.

It is a joy for me to write about and read your work, Because each one I read brings me to a conclusion.... that conclusion is something breathtaking can open the eyes of even the most stubborn.

Good job and Best of wishes
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ValaSedai May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Thorns-And-Roses Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
Stunning job! An absolute masterpiece. :D
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WordOfChen Mar 1, 2013  Professional Writer
My deepest thanks friend ^^ Glad you enjoyed it :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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:iconaugumon05:
one thought comes to mind from reading this... Make it into a song. it sounds like something dragonforce might have made. so this would make an excellent song.
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WordOfChen Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha, if I had a proper band I would ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Scarlettletters Jan 24, 2013  Professional Writer
For what it is worth, this is my favorite of yours. The first verse in particular is very good.
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WordOfChen Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend, I would love to do another song piece in future, but been a little too exhausted to cram beats together. Getting used to my new exercise and fitness regime is taking out a lot of stamina. I do hope to try more songs once I have the right melody in my head (one that isn't made up of a deep gasp for breath after lifting weights xD)

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zoprak-Vallinheart Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Chen could I use this song as a profect for my school music class please I'll mention you for the lyris? Please!
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WordOfChen Jan 23, 2013  Professional Writer
I replied to your comment on my page ^^ Just follow those instructions and you'll be fine :3

If you need further help note me

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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