Memories of War:
What is this long-lost memory inside?
Where oceans turn; what have we left behind
With star-burned wings out above the sky.
The sleeping sons are lovingly left to lie...
A thousand tears you've cried for all,
Now its time for you to fall!
Will you open up the door,
To the future we ignore?
Are you simply lying broken,
From the memory awoken;
Are you simply living lies,
Bitter taste with ropes you tie...
And the world will soon forget.
Fill my heart with this regret?
For the victims written in stone.
Unspoken sin you now atone...
Yeah I've seen this world where we livin' in pain,
Wrap my body round with chain.
Now we both know we be broken;
Give this man his smokin' token.
Held up guns with both his hands;
Not a boy he's cause he's a man.
Order comes by a suit and hand.
Will you flee or will you stand?
This is a memory of our war,
Of all the things that we can't ignore.
And staying blind to the cries of pain...
Will lonely ashes be what remains?
-Chen Yuan Wen ft. The C-Crew, 15th January 2013
This is a very strong and deep piece. The words you chose to express yourself in this one left a great impact and impression on me, definitively. This song was very well written, the way you rhymed, and with the way you emphasized, it came on very strong. Like I said, very impacting!
My grandfather was in the war, and he often said that, "War doesn't determine who's right, only who's left." And that one line at the end, And staying blind to the cries of pain... will lonely ashes be what remains?" reminded me very much of him. He would have loved this if he were still alive to read it.
A truly beautiful piece. If this were ever on the radio or produced, I would love to hear it! Don't ever stop writing! You're a beautiful, talented writer!
Keep up the good work and remember that this is only one of many opinions that are to be shared.
I wish you the best of luck and send you my best wishes for more of your work.
It is a joy for me to write about and read your work, Because each one I read brings me to a conclusion.... that conclusion is something breathtaking can open the eyes of even the most stubborn.
Good job and Best of wishes
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