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Living a Lie:

I feel like I've awakened from a comatose state
And the world has gone on without me.
I stretch my legs and take a walk outside
And for the very first time I see:

A strange kind of beauty, that is utterly alluring
It calls out to my spirit with the gentlest of cries.
I'm afraid to admit, for it was rather unmanly,
That I left with tears in my eyes...

I can't imagine how I could have forgotten
The very way that I used to walk...
I remember now my habitual actions
And I've even learned to talk!

"Arrr me hearties, good day to ya all
It be a fine day ta sail on tha sea
And if we find a plethora o' treasure;
Then yer drinks are all on me!"


I must admit it that brought me a smile
To be speaking my native brogue.
It reminded me that a dashing man
Should always be a playful rouge.

But that aside I'm feeling better
For now my mind has found its peace.
A comforting sense of order and structure
It's almost as rare as the golden fleece.

Within this sphere of joy and comfort
I begin to weave the next release
Perhaps tonight I'll entertain you
With an even darker piece...

"Blood Crusade, is coming tonight and the rhymes shall never be lacking!"

-Chen Yuan Wen, 25th May 2012
Hey there :3
Like it? Want more? Fave it, please :iconcatsmileplz:

Author's Comment:

Just an update for the fans. I've decided to stop my research (at least this week) because it was causing me to write in a form I simply was not comfortable in.

Besides, what I am known for is my devious rhyme scheme and so, it's back to the two fundamentals tonight. Blood and Rhyme.

Hence "Blood Crusade" is coming :3
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, I missed a lot on vacation. But looks like I get to do a marathon of poems today, yay! This made me smile a bit, I'll make sure to read Blood Crusade right now!
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
funkeh!
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aha, this was very amusing in regards to your recent withdrawal from rhyming. X)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye it was indeed :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
If you break it down, it's saying, "Omg YES I CAN RHYME AGAIN."
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
That's pretty much it mate xD ^^;

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
But you, of course, make it sound much more elegant. -u-
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, I wish I could say that its true, but I still have much ta learn. However, one day, I will be able to make things SUPER elegant and then ye can all be proud ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't imagine anyone being more proud of you than they already are. :>
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Nice piece, it has a great flow and rhythm to it :).
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye, glad ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
Anytime captain :iconflyingdutchmanplz:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Writer
I hope I'm not as bad of a pirate as that guy hyar hahaha :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Haha xD
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mistressofdark92 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Congratulations for making it on the front page :)
This is really good, you write extremely well :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, this piece wasn't intended to make it there but somehow it did xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Great job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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aquabolt-sn2012 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
its soooo beautiful x) !!!!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye thank ye, hope ye also like Blood Crusade, the piece that I promised to write ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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aquabolt-sn2012 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
thank you i liked it.i loved the detail too thanks [link]
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Glad to hear it my friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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aquabolt-sn2012 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012
Sure thing,captain. oh ya hi
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LyraJolt Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Student General Artist
FFffuuuront PAGE !~
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
For a little while xD. Haha, I don't know how this piece even got there it was just me being me rofl xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ChokerLover-69 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
Cool!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Bwahaha thank ye :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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theGman0 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist
gato plz
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Gato? xDDD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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theGman0 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist
cat
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Ahh fair enough :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
This was very entertaining.....nice!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly. If ye liked it, I have something being released in exactly 2 minutes and yer comment, viewership and perhaps a fave (if ye like it enough) would be greatly appreciated. It is of course the promised piece "Blood Crusade" ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
one of the best poets on DA, i swear :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I'm glad that ye think of me that way and I will never stop improvin' if only ta keep gettin' yer nice comments and faves :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
aaw! :D you're very welcome
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torfkopp Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
Beautiful, melancholic piece. Its atmosphere and esp. the first stanza reminds me of a german medieval poem/song, called "Ow war sint verswunden alliu mniu jr!" by Walther von der Vogelweide. (Rough translation: "Alas! Where have all my years gone?" Seems like we haven't changed that much since ancient times. Thanks for creating this.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Well it was more of a personal revelation as I awoke to the fact that my research was consuming me and basically making me a poet that I am not.

That said, thank you for sharing that wonderful story, the poem sounds beautiful ^^.

I hope my rhymes will be able to satisfy you as well, with tonight's release just about 7 hours away. It is titled "Blood Crusade" and as you might imagine is about the dark side of the crusades :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
If you would like a professional review, I would be happy to do so, but please send me a note with a link to the submitted piece. I do not review in comments as they might be read as spam ^^

Please take the time to type it out properly and that way I can actually read it and give you accurate feedback. It might also be helpful to tell me what kind of story you intend to write and for what purpose are you writing it.

Lastly, do not type in caps. It conveys neither excitement nor happiness, but rather it just looks unprofessional and aggressive, please be aware of these basic standards. Finally, ask nicely and remember your pleases and thank yous. ^_^
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djpimpslap22 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012
well thank you and also in open office it was spaced out but when i put it in here it was scrunched together...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
An easy way to solve that is to type it in open office, transfer it to a simple note/wordpad program and then manually code it from there.

That is how I do my literary works ^^. Once again, drop me a note and I will be happy to assist you

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Student Writer
Yay, rhymes! :iconhyperplz:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye rhymes rhymes rhymes :3.

It be what I was made ta do. Anythin' else just kind of ain't Chenbeard y'know? ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Student Writer
Yup. I like them so much better too. They flow better.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Definitely, the next release is comin' very soon, so prepare yer comment and prepare yer faves. just about 33 minutes ta go ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Student Writer
Whoop whoop! Hopefully before my class gets out! :XD:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
will it get out in 33 minutes ;3 xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner May 24, 2012
Is it bad that I found this piece cute towards the end? i still loved it, of course. lol It's a very excellent piece.
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