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You sit there shaking; emotionally frozen.
You check the time on your watch, despite knowing it already.

The ever-present numbness, the cold feeling which clutches at your soul;
That is what you feel upon the dawn of the lie.

To know its nature, to know its being;
To have it spill upon your awareness.

What words would surmise such a bitter feeling:
Betrayal, grief? 
Perhaps the use of dejection, pain and sorrow?
All of which might be considered appropriate, given the circumstances...

Absent-minded, you reach for a pack of cigarettes,
Forgetting that you kicked the habit a few years back.
You thumb the screen of your ever-present smartphone,
Scrolling, blanked-faced, as though trying to retrieve an old-memory.

Emptiness...

 Abyss...

An abyssal feeling of utter emptiness...

Bitter will not suffice for the taste upon my tongue,
But it is the closest approximation to the scar upon my heart.
There are days when you discover things that leave you furious. It is never a pleasant feeling. Yet, what can we do to exercise such thoughts except write? Or perhaps partake in some other activity to numb the mind...

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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BlackBlockSwindle Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013   Artist
 I like it...
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UntamedRayne Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written Hug 
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh I want to add something. I love the last 2 lines. THey are pure prettyness
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the-green-gallad Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
good man
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lariceli Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist
wow...this explains a moment in my life perfectly...well, quite a few actually.
this is very well written.
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AnaDasilva Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I adore your vocabulary. It all flows so smoothly and draws me in. It's well written, and I can truly feel the emotion in it.
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student General Artist
I know this feeling far too well...
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Ceasarex-the-mage Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
I have felt truly betrayed once, I then pushed myself harder, but being stabbed in the back has left me skeptical of everyone. I hope I never see that witch again, I fear I might just snap and lose everything I have ever worked for and soil the name of a dearly departed relative.

Alas, I tire of talking of she-who-shall-not-be-named... I feel relieved letting that off my chest, a little weight off my shoulders for now.
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MythosHaven Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
I fell that way sometimes.
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FreakshowAutrael Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Only you can write something like this

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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I feel furious right now about something. How coincidental! Anyway, I really like this. My favorite lines are "you reach for a pack of cigarettes,  forgetting that you kicked the habit a few years back" and "bitter will not suffice for the taste upon my tongue, but it is the closest approximation to the scar upon my heart." The first one is interesting cuz it's like he truly didn't break the habit, and the second one is just worded so nicely.
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animeloverishere Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa...I totally got lost while reading this...I just...zoned out...
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
I think, if we got all of the poems like this that you write, and put them together in a certain order, it would be someone's life.
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hm this is very interesting and I love how you  incorporated modern stuff in your poem. Dont see that a lot somehow
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RosemonkeyCT Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It never ceases to enchant me the way you can capture a moment in someone's life and describe it so clearly and so concisely that it means something completely different and yet something entirely the same to anyone who reads it. If that makes sense ^^;
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gabrielIgnitus Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry, my brain redirected me here: www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cye-1R…
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