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Lilith My Queen:

In darkness she called me
My life she did bind.
Lilith my Queen;
My soul was consigned...

By blood we were sealed
By hatred defined!
We killed in her name
For this angel of mine.

Her wings were the darkest
They bore chains of steel.
Through darkness my wounds
And my scars she did heal.

In nightmares she whispered
They broke me in time.
She tore out my heart
And ripped out my mind.

All through the black winter
This one frosted night
The heavens did weep
For the death of the light...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 10th March 2012
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Arrr maties, please feel free ta do one of the above (or all of the above if you like me enough). It's helping me in my career ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Arrr maties, t'day I've decided to do a poem about Lilith. A figure of darkness and dread, she is a queen of evil and hence I have portrayed her as such.

The dark beauty, who took my soul away...

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Such Beautiful People - [link]
You Can't Stop Me - [link]
Struggling at Life -[link]
I Am So Disturbed - [link]
Sweet Bird in A Cage - [link]
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CephiraForest Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Darkly enticing. Really draws you in. Love it XD
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VLADMV Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Great...
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redmanna Featured By Owner May 6, 2012
This is a really nice poem. Lilith was portrayed as the queen of evil; although, she gives life, as she offers death. It is unfortunate that there are those who portray good as evil; in order to conceal their own jealous intentions...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye and I'm glad ye enjoyed it ^^. There are many sides to things in our worlds, but often individuals get fixated :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sorry for the late reply, I'm slowly clearing messages ^^;
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SamuelFuery Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful and powerful, sir. Well written!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much for reading and enjoying me works ^^. I'm glad ye liked it =D

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SamuelFuery Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem~ ^^
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Gabriel-Clerens Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"in sleep he sang to me, in dreams he came,
That voice which calls to me and speaks my name..."
The first thing to pop in my mind while reading this.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, really? Phantom of the Opera eh? I didn't think this was ANYTHING close O_O.

But wow, glad to know you liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
ooh..... but i have a story too :D (big mouth me)
when i was in primary school, i meaninglessly had hatred for anyone, for any apparent reason. maybe because i was just picky, anyway, i had visions in my head that i was walking up the stairs, i haven't even reached yet, and going into classrooms one by one and beautifully killing everyone, but after that, instead of being disturbed, my mind was cleansed, an after that my hatred for a lot died down, because there is no need to 'kill' them twice.

so i would not say that my visions were bad or good, the effect would be generally good, but the process was generally dangerous, but... that is how SHeeP became bouncy :D

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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student General Artist
..............I think I had a few dreams like that once.
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
yup it should be fun, i really was a bit sad it was a dream :L
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student General Artist
lol
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
i was like [yeeeeesssss kill them, make their heads into flowers, skin them alive, and let them die of blood loss....] but then it was just a dream
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
I feel a poem coming on from this message!!!!
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012
nah i am not poetic like captain
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Siren-Badru Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
...I made a poem out of our conversation there!!! =^..^= I used to dream that I was a person possessed by a bloodthirsty demon who would come out and kill everyone it could lay its hands on. -weirdly- i enjoyed it. it kinda scared me, but now I'm used to it- the scaryness of it NOT KILLING. I have not killed anything except for insects.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr cool :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
yeah to be helped by what people will think have the opposite effect
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
I see O___O

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
it's really mind cleansing
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ANDYB1979 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012
CHEN, I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS.
HOW DO I ADD IT TO MY FAVOURITES?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr all ya have ta do is look on the right hand side of the deviation, there is a button called add to favourites ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nice! It flows almost perfectly!
Nit-picking again, (please don't take any offence, I don't nit-pick if I don't like it) the last line 'For the death of light...' maybe have it 'For the death of the light...' instead? I think it lacks one beat.. I may be wrong, that's just how I read it.
Again, please don't take any offence, If I don't like someone's work, I don't point out this sort of stuff. And I really really really like your work. If it is becoming annoying, however, I shall stop when you ask me to.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
OH GOD, the way you read it is correct. I can't believe I missed a word and no one picked it up until now. BLAH! going to correct it

Thank you so much T^T

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
haha no problem, Chen. Glad I could be of some use :)
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Desolira Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Lilith is my mommy!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr is that so? Well I'm pleased ta meet her xD

If you liked me work, share it out ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Desolira Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
O-o How did you get so many pageviews in such a small amount of time? Mindblowing... X.X Anyway, thanks for the fav. I dont see too many of them.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
All boils down ta hard work me fine friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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HanerTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:U
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I hope that means ya liked it xD

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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HanerTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i had a braingasm...
so yes...
i liked it very much.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, in that case, share share share :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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HanerTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sure,sure,sure. :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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TIB-The-Signless Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I love this one!
Reminds me of Lilith from Borderlands...
Good job
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye =D. Very glad that you liked it and enjoyed it ^^

Please feel free ta help me share it out me fine friend =D

By the way, I remember you from my time at BPS xD

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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DokiDomo Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student Writer
This is really beautiful! :D I don't usually like random and passionate poetry, but this was wonderful. Great job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye very much. I'm very glad ye enjoyed this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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DokiDomo Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student Writer
No problem! :hug:
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KyraKilljoy Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
i love lilith <3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr glad that ye do. She be a fearsome creature ta behold.

Anywho, if ya like this piece enough, share it out ;3. That'll help boost me views =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Student Writer
I have to say, you've improved. There is one line that is bothering me, though, "Through darkness my wounds." It has great imagery and overall is a good line, but just seems a little out of context when compared to the rest of the poem. But other than that, good work; you're getting better. I look forward to seeing more of your work. :happybounce:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I'll work on improvin' that.

Thank ye for comin' by and takin' the time ta leave a comment. I truly appreciate it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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speckles2102 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ah! I love it already!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much :3

Please feel free ta share it out if ya like it enough =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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speckles2102 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
will do capt'n!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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dyronl Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012   Writer
Ah the queen of darkness, a tantalizer this one, good work my man ^_^
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