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It Came From The Dark:

Amongst the ashes, swirling from the darkness of the pit,

Emerged a hand, dragging a battered body across the rocks.

Blood leaked from the wounds so callously self-inflicted,

And teeth ground with a focused determination and seething anger.

It cared not for the warm rubies - staining the jagged rocks,

It cared not for the sensation of pain...

All that it remembered was a dream, An obsession -

One that drove it ever higher; ignoring all else!

Eventually it emerged from this shadowy hole, this dreary depth,

And in that moment, it learned of the truth.

For this creature, denied sunlight and warmth -

was me...





-Chen Yuan Wen, 11th December 2012
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Arrr me hearties,

I'm back from HELL indeed. The days before me trip back to singapore were like being put through the fire and roasted over a blistering inferno. I experienced much and plenty of tha' is gonna come out in me works.

As ye'll note, pirate accent is back, full explanation t' come in me journal later, but I realised basically tha' th' accent is part of the fun, even if it can be a little tough t' handle eh?

Now then, I'm about t' start me hyper release of all different types of poetry and this be but th' first of many t' come. I swear on me honour as CHENBEARD TH' PIRATE. I will blow yer minds with what I've seen of a modern hell...Dante, is a little behind th' times.

Enjoy this starter piece t' get yer tongues wet...more will come, soon enough...

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Alone but AliveAlone but Alive:

Oh here I am standing,
A lost soul is landing.

The coldest December,
Can you still remember?

Do you even hear me?
There's no one around me!

Oh shadow that I see,
The void right behind me.

Yet still I am breathing;
Yet still I am feeling.

The coldest sensation,
Oh worthless creation!

Are you still crying?
Oh why are you lying - abandoned and cold

-

Cold like what was left of soul,
Made of all the life you stole.
Walk divine but made of sin,
Worm of hatred squrim within.

Sin of lust and sin of pride,
Lash the tongue that last has lied.
Yours was silver with a promise,
Kiss of death and then you vomit.

Bu
You Have No Right To LiveYou Have No Right To Live:

Hey, what are you doing?
That's mine, now give it back.
You're stupid, you should just go die!

Okay, I'm sorry...

What, you failed again?
Just how much money do you think we're spending on this,
Do you think it just falls from the sky?
I can't believe you; and don't give me that look!
You better straighten up now you hear me
And if you keep looking like a dead fish,
I'm going to make you wish you were one.

I'm sorry...

Hey, being around you is driving me nuts,
You never want to do anything, you don't even care,
Why bother even breathing if you're going to act like you're dead!

I'm sorry!

You're
Pat
I Am A WriterI Am A Writer:

Gentlemen, today I speak to you
To convey an issue that has plagued the core of our community.
For so long have we been considered second-class;
To this day there are those who still believe that we are not artists.
But today is not about freedom, today is about honour,
Because there are many writers that still seek to shame us all...

I speak of those individuals, who take art from others.
Covers, photos, paintings, digital art, anime and manga.
It matters not where you draw your source from,
But every action impacts upon us as a community.
Why?

BECAUSE I AM A WRITER!

When I craft my works, when I write each and ev


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I. Introduction:

   I have noticed that many critics on DA tend to leave rather harsh and sometimes subjective critiques on the pages of the artists being critiqued. Their rationale for doing so is based on the concept that 'we shouldn't molly-coddle each other and instead "tell it like it is"'. However this type of critique reflects poorly on one who is critiquing as opposed to the one who is being critiqued and I will explain why throughout the course of this guide. In essence I hope to use this resource as a way of teaching potential critics how to properly focus their abilities and direct their critiques in a
Mercenary 1-1MERCENARY

Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty

Release One: Pages 1 - 3

THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a si
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It felt as if anyone reading this was in the shadows watching the happenings of the inviduals. Everything is layed out in incredibly folded detailed that no questions are answered but one. Which is who is the individual draging? That could leaves the readers hanging for a while wondering but never finding out who it is.

Sespenseful, a little nail bitting to make the impact so deep into most peoples beings it would seem. This piece kind of arises the fears of most human beings when it comes to the creature you describe. Its like the nightmare no human being wants to become,

which is why I think it created the biggest impact on me and any audience going to read your piece of artwork.
What do you think?
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Avast, there, Captain! I be the first to offer my humble opinion of yer poem. The shock element here is worthy of note. I really liked how you eluded to yerself throughout the verse and then "dropped a zinger" in the last line. Keen wit and good use of surprise. As usual you prove your metal as a poet. The narrative of the character in the effort is of good length. The poem can enter as horror or suspense too, as far as I could tell.
You appear to be as capable at free verse as at traditional forms. A really intriguing project and I am keyed up for the next one.
What do you think?
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
EPIC!!!! :D

I see Capn Chen is the incarnation of darkness :D means I am not alone :D
awesome :D
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Reading this, you can clearly see the mangled creature emerging from its hell hole and feel its wounds as though they were your own.
Thank you for yet another piercing work.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, aye :3 Me deepest thanks friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DragonKeeper92 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you have a lot of talent for this. I love poetry, i write a lot of it, and I mostly write sad ones, but i still love it. This poem really caught my eye, i love the details and the descriptions.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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KittySib Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoyin' this :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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KittySib Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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smokedragon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Excellent imagery throughout, particularly the fifth line. Nice work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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smokedragon Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
You're quite welcome :)
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AshitaUchiha Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
BEAUTIFUL.

I know it will probably never happen, but I'd like to collaborate with you one day. I feel like our styles would mesh really well, even though I'm sure your writing is superior to mine.

To put in the worst way possible, I'd like a sip of your inspiration.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Feel free t' send me something t' guest on. I do guest verses, kind of like how some singers have others come and sing a verse or two on their song. My strength is primarily in urban lyrics, but I can do almost anything ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AshitaUchiha Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
Cool beans! I'll try and write some poetry. :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Note me as yer ready ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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AshitaUchiha Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Okay. (: Thanks, man.
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luneta-star Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
me freaking gusta
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' this ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist
Welcome back cap! =D :squee:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Good t' be back xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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OrangeDisaster Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Very nice!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Chilling... I quite like it.
Funny, as I read this, Metallica was playing in the background from my radio XD (if you'venever heard them, they're an awesome classic metal/heavy rock band. A lot of creepy sort of sounding songs. XD)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
I remember Metallica, and I thank ye fer enjoyin' this, it was just a little warm-up. I should get serious after this xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
XD right on.You're very welcome. Thank you for your awsome poetry.
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Great work as always!:clap:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye me friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
You're very welcome!:hug:
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PJatOluv Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Scary.... O.o But I enjoyed reading it! :)

(lol, at first I thought "emerged" said "Ermahgerd"
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha, thank ye fer enjoyin' it lass :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fly-gonz Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
You're too poetic man..., you should be in math, not poetry.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Ah, sadly I'm in this field. What to do right? Isn't it sad ^^

That said, can't you make a comment with a bit more edge in it? This didn't even prickle me :/

Say something like, 'This poem is cardboard cut out and linear it was like you took a child's stencil and just filled in the blanks.' wait, that's flat too, hmm I don't know but I miss the edge to your words.

Please hit harder in future xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fly-gonz Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I thought you were in Business. I mean math, like, legitimate pure math.

I'm not trying to offend you or be one of those scathing critics that you find in the New York Times. My world (before I switched into Applied Mathematics) was the literary/philosophical academia. There, you can't say bad things about poems, well you can, but it's not recommended.

Your poetry is okay. Just avoid over-exaggerating. That's all.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
No no, I mean I actually miss those guys. I mean you know that feeing you get when someone hates on you and then it makes you angry so you try harder? I just don't get that anymore. The only person who writes something even mildly negative is you .___.

Where are the haters? and I don't mean the trolls with poor grammar, but where are the real flesh-shredding critiques. It's so sad that they give up once I reject them, especially considering the fact that their entire persona is based on rejection and hatred.

It's hard sometimes to get the blood boiling. If you don't have haters, you're doing something wrong and now I'm trying to find the problem and fix it if you know what I mean.

In the mean time, I just wish someone would really tear this up. Just doesn't feel the same without that sort of tearing y'know?

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Kinokotaku Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh. Want me to be one of those negative-only people? I could do that. I just don't want to offend some random person I don't know. But really, should I start tearing your stuff apart?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Yeah go ahead little miss speaking english yet from Japan :3 Just to let you know I won't actually listen to anything you say, but it is nice to have a little hatred around. So feel free to throw what you can :3 I look forward to seeing how sharp you can be, only new pieces let's leave the old stuff as is

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fly-gonz Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
A lot of people are focused on helping you.

Maybe the problem is that it's deviantart. You're receiving a lot of mixed messages. A lot of people will scan your work and say it's great, they don't say what you did well or what you did badly. When "hater" critics come and provide some advice, it's hard to listen, because why mess with success?

And if you ignore a critic's advice, why should they come back?

The reason I still comment on your work is because a lot of my work was like yours. It seems to be very common among Asian writers. I would show it to a few friends and they'd all say it's great. But in University, I got exposed to poetry in a different light.

Nevertheless, it's kind of nice to see myself again in some of the work that you do.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Nah the advice critiques are fine, I only reject strictly based on the guidelines, but I do miss the trolls. I am always thankful for the helpful people, but a good troll keeps you on your toes and that me friend is quite irreplacable.

That said, why aren't you continuin' with yer writin', since you're studyin' it an' all ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Fly-gonz Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Haven't I told you? I switched to Mathematics.

I don't get inspiration too often. I write whenever I feel like it. It's nice that way. I feel writing is much better as a hobby.
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jwolfdemon Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
Masterpiece... dont care if it isn't original. it paints an amazing picture you're really great with using words of imagery.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
It was original in terms of the idea to twist it into myself, but the wording itself may be generic because it was designed that way. I always do a warm-up before doin' serious work. Can't just delve right back inta it right? xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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BarbaritaS Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Chilling indeed!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks fer enjoyin' this little warm-up exercise :3 Now t' get serious aye?

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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neko2631 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I'll be honest, I didn't like this at first, but it pulled me in. It's true the words and arrangements chosen are well-used ones, but there was something somewhat musical about the way they were put together as a whole. I found myself actually curious about where you were taking this (I'm a very picky reader, so that was nice). But I found the last line very disappointing and, if I may, rather trite. For me it turned this into something that could have been quite impactful and expressive into...well...something "emo."

But I wouldn't have written this review at all if there weren't something beautiful at the base of where it left me standing. So keep at it, says I. You could have some really great stuff to put out there, and I don't say that lightly.

Thank you for sharing. <3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Well if I may be allowed t' add me own personal interpretation t' this piece. What is more mysterious than the man himself discovering that he is the monster. T' those with the particular experiences this poem will easily speak t' them. T' those who haven't faced such a beast, they would see nothing more than a poorly written fantasy piece.

Such is the key of these types of poetic pieces I use fer warm-ups. They mean different things t' different people and it helps me get a feel for what me audience would like t' see from me. If they want something more challenging more gory or perhaps more mystical, then it would be my duty to deliver that no? Yet, how can one discern taste if one does not test it. I've found that many poets just write whatever comes to mind and that t' me is not the best way t' go.

Now o' course I could just be talkin' big, but let's see how th' next few pieces turn out then eh? :3 I look forward to seeing all of this unfold

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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neko2631 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
That is something I have faced in my life as well. But if we're looking at it from that perspective, then the issue would more be the point of view transition. You'd be describing a sort of blackout or loss of consciousness of self which, if that was what you intended, isn't made clear in the piece.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Why does it have to be a blackout of loss of consciousness? That's only suitable for Jackal and Hyde. The monster within you, can be displayed on the outside, but within the shadowy darkness of the pit you would be oblivious to your own defects, only once you've crawled out are you able to see everything now that you're bathed in the light of sun, and THAT is when the realisation happens. Which is how it was set up in this piece :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Very nice use of imagery and detail. Glad to see you're back, and I hope you enjoyed your time in Singapore. Can't wait to see more wonderful work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm am still in Singapore, I live here xD

Goin' back t' Australia for college once summer break ends, anyhow now that I'm done warmin' up, it be time t' get serious.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh, I'm sorry, had an idiot moment there XD
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