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She was beautiful.

And twas I who loved her...

I held her in these hands,
Like a warm blanket,
Comforting and kind.

But she was a bitter poison, toxic and deadly.

No antidote to her venom;
I wasted away with delirious eyes.

A coward they called her,
And it was the truth!.

But to save myself, I would have her bleed.
Her heart a raw panacea;
Crunched between my teeth...




-Chen Yuan Wen, 22nd July 2013
If ye enjoyed this piece, don't forget t' fave it eh? (^_^)/ Each fave means a lot to me.

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Aye maties,

T'night I'm releasin' a new style. Necromorphed Poetry.

If yer a gamer and ye've played the Dead Space series, ye'll know what necromorphs are. If ye don't, GOOGLE IT x'3

That said, Necromorph poetry is named such because its construction heavily parallels a necromorph infection. Essentially, ye take a poem (any poem really, t'night's was provided by me co-captain) and then ye transform it. The rules are as follows:

- The transformation has t' be morbid in nature. (necromorphs are "scary" I suppose)

- You must keep some of the original poem in there (like necromorphs retain features of the host)

- You cannot just change a few words, that be plagiarism! (get permission and make the work ye own!)

Once yer done, presto ye have a reanimated, necromorph poem.

Personally, I'm going t' be doing quite a lot of these as I really would like t' also work on prose and get things in order. This saves me time on comin' up with entirely new material and allows me th' chance t' see how crazy I can get with any given base.

If ye'd like t' sacrifice yer work t' me. Contact th' church o' unitology, because convergence is comin' and-

What was that? I swear I heard somethin'. I'm a little afraid t' turn t' me right, th' ghost o' Nicole might be there eh? haha! x'D

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

If ye'd like t' support me:

- Please donate t' me donation pool on th' front page. Thank ye kindly! Every point helps ^^
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SyGuy2013 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have not yet read this, but I am faving it so that I can clean out my envelope as it is in the thousands. I will read this when I can. If I like it, I will keep it faved, and let you know.
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
ooo i flinched at the end XD haha good work
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catsonacid Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful 
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wdnest Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
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lthornton Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
wow, this gave me chills.
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wdnest Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Stunning work.
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
I'm not the biggest fan of this particular poem, but I LOVE the idea!! I'll be waiting to see what else you come up with. 
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klar Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
'swhat ya get, datin for looks
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Laylez Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hah! It reminded me of deathspace and how hair-raising that game was. Great poem:D !!
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
This is hilarious, sometimes they have it coming, gossiping bitches!
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Floblob Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
This is really nice to read. It's very ambiguous ans flows nicely.
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themusicman314159 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
To feel that warm hear in your maw
Like your teeth the gates to hell
That pain you went through and saw
Was only the half of two unwell.

When two hearts beat in time
Every thing seems sublime
Until the tangles unwind
And nothing is on inside.

OH, and a necromancer joke: What do kings and necromancers have in common? A lot of CHESTS!!! Because of treasure chests and human chests! ... I need a job.
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timeless-forever Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
I love this! Well done :D

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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Hurrah, my dear friend is at his keyboard again. Three cheers!!!!!
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bloodmaker Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013

I understood it and liked it to a point, but then it got confusing after the delirious eyes part.

the subject loves her but it's a destructive love because she uses him, I don't get how she is a coward, and I don't get how he w0uld hurt her if he still loves her.

 

maybe a bit of symbolism would have been better there. Like the subject realizes she never loved him, and wishes he could take back control of his heart from her, but decides instead to steal her heart just as she did his, but in a more literal sense.

 

And if you wanted to keep the cannibalism part maybe he could eat her still beating heart whole, so their hearts would be together forever...

or something like that.

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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Well the title is 'I once loved', it was all in the past. So why would he feel love for her now?

'she' is considered a coward because poison was considered a coward's weapon. 

Poison often results in fever and hallucination -> delirious eyes.

Lastly, he eats her heart as a 'raw panacea', the idea behind it is mostly vengeance. He already knew there was no antidote to the venom.

This piece was not designed to be romantic or vengefully romantic x'3

Hope this explanation helps.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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bloodmaker Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013

Ah I see where you were coming from now.

Thanks for helping me understand. :d

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Kittahi Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
to honor her in every way :iconlazybloodplz:
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MotleyCrueAndMCRFan Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
She's a coward because she might use him then tries to run away from that fact by leading him on or something? Perhaps she also doesn't take the blame for anything and puts it all on the one who loves her. 

He would hurt her, because perhaps he is fed up with her or he wants revenge for how he was hurt. 

That's just my view based on a relationship I had just like this of where I felt I was used but I still loved her endlessly; still do. Everyone called her a coward because she took no fault and put it all on me. When we fought, I also wished I could just physically knock the sense into her and the facts; despite my love for her.

With love, it's all very confusing and it can also hold hate and anger all the same.
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bloodmaker Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
true
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Animelover138 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very pretty. It sounds nice
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoying it x'3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Animelover138 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, it was very beautifully written
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MaxxToron Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So you took a real poem and made it about zombies...?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Technically it's not about zombies but rather cannibalism in a sense, but aye, the idea is t' corrupt a normal poem :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MaxxToron Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ARRRRRRRRRR...... I see matey! :iconblackbeardplz:
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letmechooseaname Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Every single poem that you submit seem to be even better than the previous ones, I applaud you ^.^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye, but plenty more t' be done x'3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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liltreede Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
*grimaces* Is it really love if you chose yourself?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Isn't that why th' title itself is past tense? "I Once Loved" essentially the love was past x'3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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liltreede Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
I just think its sort of strange to say you ever really loved someone you not only let die, but killed?

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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Hehe, ye probably haven't been in th' type o' relationship that makes ye drink rum every night x'3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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liltreede Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Oh, I have.
I guess I usually realized that I was more in love with the relationship then the person after most of those, though
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Professional Writer
That can be the case fer some individuals. Love and hate are always connected and depending on th' type o' person, it can shift between th' two rather easily. Of course not everyone goes completely off the deep end, I would say that tha' be an extreme case x'3

O' course I love t' work with extremes since it's much more dramatic that way. Makes fer better works yah?

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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dancingdawn62 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this. :) It's really good.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Me thanks fer enjoyin' this :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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dancingdawn62 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yer welcome. :)
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ClockworkKitty Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
o)______(o

i love this
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Ye'll enjoy what's t' come then x'3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ClockworkKitty Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
Lookin' forward, captian.
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this style- it's very interesting 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye :3 The only problem was keeping some of the original within it x'3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Wslas0salsW Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Somewhere between awesome and beautiful
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks friend ^^ Glad ye liked it :3

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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