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Graduation Day:


They told us we would be alright...

We had fought with honour and won our titles.

We had overcome trials together -

Watching dozens of our siblings fall in the line of duty.

For this they had promised us, a wondrous welcome;

A bountiful world of adventure, with a myriad of paths.

All this, they said, awaited us in the stone cities.

Large metropolises, where the working folk resided...

There were hundreds of us, who made that journey.

Walking miles across the scorching desert,

Clinging to a hope of the fortunes beyond.

Yet what awaited us was not a promised land -

Nor was it a life based on the merit we had earned...

Instead we found ourselves quarantined,

Pitching tents of inexperience-

Huddling together for comfort and warmth;

As the great gates of employment stood eerily silent.




-Chen Yuan Wen, 18 June 2013
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Aye maties,

This be me latest release, dealin' with the troubles of unemployment amongst the youth who are graduatin' from university. (myself included xD)

Sadly, that is how the current system is .3. Please enjoy it fer th' time being

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As a semi-recent graduate and apprentice teacher who has already been laid off once and have as of yet found a stable opening in my field, I find this poem deeply meaningful. The metaphor of the adult world as a mythical promised land is quite accurate. This poem highlights the almost religious quality that the educational system has taken on: people suspect it is flawed when they are within it, but they are too afraid to escape it in case heaven is real. I enjoy the image the reader is left with of millions of the inexperience shanty town building up outside of the gates of employment.

The only part of this poem I don't care for is the line about siblings falling in the line of duty. Does this refer to those who have dropped out or students who have literally died along the way? Maybe older siblings or friends who had already fallen into debt due to lack of employment? I would have liked more clarification.
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This is very beautiful. Yet, very heartbreaking.
Because the world is cruel as we see it when we are out of school for good. We have to face debt, money, taxes, and others more. And we have no time for love and freedom nowadays. And even now, many of us are struggling to get what we always dreamed of.
But sometimes, there may be hope in all of us.
This is what I see in the poem. And this is the type that shows what happens in real life. As I said, this is the most beautiful poem. Ever. :D
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AlmostMyself Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Great metaphor!
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gizmoarena Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
great
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graveyardancing45 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Once again, I am left speechless. Beautiful
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DarkZelda15 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Glad to see you back! I wish I could've said this earlier, but I was on vacation. The imagery of them poem truly is amazing. While some may find jobs easily, it'll take blood, sweat, and tears for many others. Beautiful work, and I wish you good luck in finding a job!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Glad t' have ye back and enjoyin' me works lass :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Enemv33 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yut! Seems legit. In two years i'll be in a similar situation. Good luck with ye endeavors, Captain!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye, prepare yerself fer it if ye can ^^ We'll all be weatherin' this storm.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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hermafrodite Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
lol life is never perfict
im constinitly disapointed in life myself
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Ah well, all ye can do is suit up and join me fer a run. That's what I recommend t' everybody x3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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