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I don't know when it started.
When I'd gone a little off.
When my mind had gotten twisted,
And bubbled like a broth.


I don't know when it happened,
When I'd gone a little green.
When I'd turned a little rotten;
And dreamed a rotten dream.


And I don't know why it happened,
But this I know to say;
Twenty-two are buried here,
But twenty-three today...



...Now then, why don't we find some place nice and quiet (^_^)




- Chen Yuan Wen, Broken World Series, 19th December 2013


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Alright so this piece sort of deals with that aspect of creepy murder and I wanted to pt it in rhyme because...a person who is just WEIRD, often likes to find cute ways...of doing evil things.

This is an expression of that and although I am really tired after work today, you guys broke the limit for the previous poem, so I'm delivering this one as promised, within 1 to 2 days.

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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
Cute
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
LikI it. But it feels incomplete to me
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Professional Writer
haha, probably because you liked it so much that the end felt..like you needed more x'D

-Chen :iconwordofchen:
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Perhaps perhaps
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luckynr1 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Beautiful!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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ThePrincessesOfDeath Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Super sweet I think this is my new favorite poem Troll 
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KeanKennedy Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013   General Artist
haha this is awesome! :D
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DisturbingGreen Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
I didn't get if before reading descript, but I really like it! Wonderful.
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Ally-RedTulip Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, that's so beautiful!
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SweetNikky12 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Student Digital Artist
-SweetNikky12

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SweetNikky12 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Student Digital Artist
That's so touching!Really Sad 
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shadowjade14 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
OMG! beautiful!
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Vivacia18 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Hmm, as a lover of cute evil things, mayhap I should be concerned about my personality:XD:
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Geobukseon Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
Nice.  Just nice.
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
how do u mention someone? just type their icon?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Yup ^^ That's how you do it :3

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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SweetNikky12 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Student Digital Artist
are you sure?

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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer

in that case i'll get right to it!!! :D


btw, I love your poems so I Watched u.

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DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is fairly cute, I love it :)
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iceteakik Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Yay
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Ana-Saphar Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is ver great!
It's the first time I'm enjoying a poem in English, but it rythmes so well I didn't feel like I needed to understand perfectely the words to catch the meaning.
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it <3
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anunnaki888 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
there's a smile at the end so its happy poem? I don't understand
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Ooh I love this!! And Ilivd how you made it rhyme too!! Rhyming seems to make creepy things even creepier in my humble opinion... :meow: hahaha :D
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this alot.
Do you think you could check out my poem Twisted Fairytale?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Link me mate, I'll check it out for ya ^^

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it's actualy just in my gallery.
just go there and type in the title.
I have no idea how to set up a link.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Just copy and paste the url. That's how you link ^^

When you don't know, ask and then once you do know, you'll feel better :3

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
okay. could you just go to my gallery and look at the poem?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Please link me as I am very busy and do not have the time to browse. This is a common courtesy on deviant art. I have taught you the method, please apply it. Once you ask someone for a review, you must make every effort to ensure it is easy for them to view and assess.

If you do not learn to link and provide these small courtesies, you will be seen as rude my friend.

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
okay. Now you're being rude. Are you going to tell me what you thought of my poem or not?!
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
twisted fairytale


by ~ArtistOfDawn, Sep 9, 2013, 5:15:43 PM Literature / Poetry / Horror / Free Verse


Please tell me
what it is that is wrong
the dark patches on your heart
are they from hideing pain too long?
hurt inflicted by love and hate
by wound and healing
why do you stay in the shade underneath
this rotting apple tree
avoiding all
avoiding ME
hateing the light liveing in the dark
fighting for anyones love but never accepting what is offered
watching the roses you tried to grow in your world die
and wondering why
you wanted them to bloom into beautiful red
but now they are black and dead
the fantasy you bilt yourself is corrodeing
those friends you had imagined are running away for fear of
forever dissapearing
at night nightmares creap
disstruction following
inside them lies
blood
death
madness
and hands that want to hold onto you forever
an evil, distorted, and somewhat lovely, and captivating
version of that very world that is being eaten away
it may be beautiful and full of new friends and places to you
but it terrifies me
stop it
take it away
make it stop
go away
all of you
every thing
the blind cat with five legs and a two tipped tail
the laughing girl with her grim friend
the hatter who offers poison tea
the rabbit who immatates all it hears
chase away run away all of you are my fears
I don't want you
don't expect me to rule over your world of night
I'm tired of wakeing up in fright
I will however tell in spoken song
of all of you every thing you are, what you have done wether right or wrong
so tell me
girl under the tree with your hair turned white from time in the dark
why do you love your nightmarish friends so
and don't answer with the question
"Don't you?"
because I don't
the cat
he led me into a room full of dirty cages
the laughing girl and her grim friend
chased me through windeing purple halls
the hatter showed me his beautiful gardens, cute shop, and then tried to kill me
the rabbit repeted the screams of someone being shot in the next room
so no of corse I don't love them
now answer
why do you obbses over them?
"Because no one else will be my friend."
you answer and I almost feel sorry
"Some tea?"
asks a man with a melodic voice
I hesitate
have I not seen him befor?
no I suppose not
so I relax and the three of us drink
I hear some voices or so I think
"See that rabbit?"
you ask
"No"
I look to where you point
the man is laughing
at what I do not know
then you start in
I'm confused
but then I start
what is this?
"No...NO!"
something is in the tea!
I drop the cup and it shatters
as if that even matters
for this man this girl
this imagenary rabbit
they are the real ones that were disstorted by the dream
no not dream
warning
now it is to late and as light comes sneeking towards us
the red rose petals scatter acrossed the blanket we sat on
thus ending the dream forever

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here you go. I wasn't trying to be rude. It's just my computer is old and slow and I wasn't sure it would want to do this but it did.
So here it is.
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maironmatos Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Visceral, harrowing, beautiful!
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Creepy. I like it. 
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tsubaki-nanaseR08 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013   Artist
i love this poem. in a way, it speaks to me.
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caput-lupinum Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Ah, thank you for the dedication! :) I really appreciate it, especially coming from an author like you.
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Celestial22 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Chills....that is all.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
You're welcome mate ;3

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
This series is awesome!  Keep it up!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you friend, I appreciate it ^^

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
:aww:
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
o-o I shall not go anywhere with that person.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Best not to mate ;3

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
XD
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Child-of-Eire Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know why, but your cutesie creepy stuff is some of my favorite poetry lately. Thanks.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
It's always been a huge winner ^^

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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Child-of-Eire Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
indeed.
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lunarosehitachiin Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What was your inspiration from this? It's very well done.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you, it just popped into my mind as a good fit for part of the series :3

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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