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Eagle Girl:

She soars above clouds,
Beloved, wild, unrestrained.
Ended by envy.

- Chen Yuan Wen, 27th January 2013
Arrr maties,

I'll be away from DA fer a bit, I'm doin' some secret trainin'. It only gives me time to post haikus...but...well in this sort of setting ye tend t' think 'em up naturally. Even me pirate accent be flowin' naturally. Th' smell o' th' sea really brings out somethin' different in ya.

I'll be back soon enough ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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This piece of work displays a single, well focused idea and manages to convey it without being overt. Did not deviate from the core theme.
Very fresh and new in its approach to the idea and wonderfully singular in its style and execution.
This work shows a proper, valid technique and while using a haiku the author has managed to stay true to his own unique style. However, the punctuation is not entirely grammatically correct. This can be overlooked based on the authors many previous works and the use of this particular technique.
Very thought provoking not only because of the subtlety inherent in a haiku but also because of the subject matter. The affect of the jealous masses on a single free individual is striking.
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moonahmed Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist
end is always interesting.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Kehehe thanks ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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cloduy Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hi! You've been featured here: [link] hope you don't mind.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ReizYouUp Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Nice Haiku. Ya gotta love the short and sweet ones.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoyin' it me friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ReizYouUp Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
Thank ye fer makin' it.
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PikoRuu Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconenvyplz:?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Not quite xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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emilyanne125 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
Wonderful poem.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student General Artist
A very nice haiku, despite there's not many words, a story is still told. Keep up the excellent work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye me thanks ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student General Artist
No problem :)
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vocaloidanimefan Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow short but it is amazing!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye me friend ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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vocaloidanimefan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome friend ^-^
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013   General Artist
aarrr! ye wrote well laddie! :highfive:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Me deepest thanks :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SpiderLondon Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's a awesome haiku!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Me thanks fer enjoyin' it ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SpiderLondon Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome Cpt.
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CyTrek1 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
I like it. But as a writer, I like to know "why". Normally, it's important or symbolic when you italicize, but could you explain why the last line is italicized?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
To add emphasis ^^ and to show that this line is different from the other two.

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SamuelThomasRanger Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
I am not quite certain about the structure of this Haiku, and correct me if I'm wrong:
She-Soars-A-Bove-Cloud-s [6]
Be-Lo-Ved-Wild-Un-Re-Strain-Ed [8]
En-Ded-By-En-Vy [5]
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
[link]

Check the individual words.

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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JLNagel Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Clouds is 1 syllable, and Unrestrained is 3, making the counts correct.

The only contention would be that many people would pronounce it Be-Loved rather than Be-Love-Ed. The latter is the proper pronunciation though.
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BronyBeforePony Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
if you are anything, you are tenacious
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
You'd have to be a loser to give up after one or two bad comments =P

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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JaneDurr Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I usually think most haikus are pretentious and don't always have much meaning... But this is really well! There's actually even a small story in those three lines! More haikus from you please : D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Certainly, I probably will only have time to write haikus while completeing my training ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Soleospace Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
I KNEW THIS WAS A HAIKU BEFORE I READ THE DESCRIPTION.
PERSONAL. TRIUMPH.

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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
but but...the poem is listed as a haiku xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Soleospace Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
...I-It is?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Yes, obviously you have to put it in that category in the first place xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Soleospace Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
No... It was on the front page XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Yeaaah, but see that part below the title. On the front page it says 'Haiku&Eastern' xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Soleospace Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
WELL I OBVIOUSLY DIDN'T NOT NOTICE.



I'm really air-headed sometimes okay?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahahaha, epic ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ObsidianPunk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Hmm I've never been much of a fan of haikus, but this one has some meaning to it I suppose...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
A lot of people can't get them, but they are how they are xD

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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sarahowen97 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's amazing!
So much emotion packed into something so small...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
That's generally how they are ^^ Thank you for enjoying :3

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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angelgirlartist Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So short, but so pretty.
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