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Disconnect Yourself [REMIX]:

Is it so easy to pull your wire
Out from the inside?
(The kiss of Cyanide)

You drank the poison
And lived a lie
(That you could not deny)

Weathering change
Your mind was like stone
But then it started to break...

Now drifting helplessly
You shattered like glass
Knowing that you're fake...

The empty shell, that you grew
Has started to come undone...

Piece by piece
You're breaking apart; and it weighs a ton!

The wire inside me
The blood in my veins
(A memory of an ancient pain)

Knowing that I
Am nothing but a fake
(The self you cast away)

Dreaming of times
When the world was simple
Not simply made of masks...

You lost yourself
When you took a sip
From the horrid poison glass...

So face yourself in the mirror
And look the person in the eye

Can you disconnect yourself from this vision
Or will you be the first to die?

"I dare you, to pull the wire..."

-Chen Yuan Wen ft. Rue (Relic-Angel), 14th March 2012
LINK TO ORIGINAL BASE: [link]

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Arrr maties, please feel free ta do one of the above (or all of the above if you like me enough). It's helping me in my career ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Arrr alright, this be me first remix. Courtesy of Rue :iconrelic-angel: and I'm rather pleased with the way it turned out.

As you can see from the original, I've gone into a more story-like aspect of the whole idea, which is what I tend to do with most works.

The disconnection of one from oneself can represent suicide, but not in a physical sense that leads to death but rather the death of a perceived personality or aspect of oneself that you perceive as tainted or destructive.

Overall it was extremely fun to work with this base and I give it a 4.5/5 star rating ^^

Please remember to view the original too (especially if you want to see what my work was derived from)

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Lilith My Queen - [link]
Such Beautiful People - [link]
You Can't Stop Me - [link]
Struggling at Life -[link]
I Am So Disturbed - [link]
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know this feeling so vividly... :tears: ... damn... how you've touched my heart with this... :blackrose: :cry:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I'm glad I managed ta touch yer heart ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: indeed you did... :giggle:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Bwahaha :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
but if it can come out, it can go back in where it came from, bring the electric thing (i don't know what it is called lol)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
It's called a defibrillator, but seriously, this was a serious poem :/

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
i'm not serious anyway, :iconfeelingfreeplz: serious things make me lose hair...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, but I like ta be serious ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
i cant be serious, because when i am (rarely) noone takes me seriously
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Me once read that the only scoundrel that could get away with being completely straightforward and honest and truthful all the time is either a poet or a comedian. Me sees a bit of both in ye mate.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Professional Writer
ARrr haha, glad ta be a good scoundrel then ;3

Share me work out if ye can Cara. Spreadin' the influence be tha way ta go =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
Yer a good scoundrel indeed. :XD:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Professional Writer
As are you Cara :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012
Oh ye not know the half o' it.
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Kalen-Bloodstone Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So I see you like being a pirate . . .
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr indeed, I do be enjoyin' tha accent ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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Kinexuru Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Instead of a 4.5/5 rating, I'd give it a 5/5 rating. :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Hyar har, I rarely give bases a 5/5 xD

Mostly because that would indicate perfection which is an impossibility xD

Anyway, I hope ye enjoyed the remix and please feel free ta share it out Ai ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Kinexuru Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, I guess that would be true. x3 I still be thinkin' it's a great remix though. ^^
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr definitely :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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DeeryDeerth Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Such an awesome poem! :dance:

The remix (and the original) is great! I love the rhymes and the meaning of the poem!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye very much Linda.

You know the sharing drill hohoho :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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DeeryDeerth Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! :meow:

I do, I do. :D

~Linda.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Hyar har :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student Writer
Niiiice!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much fer readin' and enjoyin' me friend.

Don't ferget ta drop me a share and like me new facebook page if ya want ta follow me there.

The link be in me journal :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student Writer
I don't have facebook, if i did i would.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thanks anyway :3

Glad to have you here, that's what matters (>^_^)>

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student Writer
Awww! :blush:
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klevry1 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow! awesome!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly Olivia. I'm very glad ye enjoyed me work ^^

Please feel free ta share it out as usual. We must boost the ratings! xD

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconpoliticsplz:
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A1r2i3e4l5 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
Very powerful and very nice. I really like it!!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much fer enjoyin' me work ^^

Thank you for always stopping by and reading them =D

Please feel free to drop me a share ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconpoliticsplz:
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HanerTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D i read this with a steady beat. dun dunna da na, dun dun dun, xD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr glad that ye liked it ^^

It can be read with a steady beat but the beat is a secret xD

Please feel free to share it out and help me boost my ratings a little ;3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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HanerTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sure! :D
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Khaosange1 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This absolutely astounding! :heart: Very powerful words!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so much fer enjoyin' and readin' me works ^^

I'm very glad that ye liked it =D

Please feel free ta share it out, it'll help me reach a larger audience ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Khaosange1 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh I will! :meow: It's so wonderful, it deserves a larger audience! :heart:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
ARrr thank ye so much =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Khaosange1 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconeweplz: No problem! :heart:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE IT! :iconbigheartplz:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye Rue, I hope I did yer original justice. I tried to incorporate some of your fantastic ideas of identity crisis and a few other subjects ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^_^

You captured exactly what I was thinking at the time I was writing that poem down on padded paper. In fact, me thinks ye is better with putting words together. ^^;
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr very glad ta hear it Rue ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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RioQuin Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This completely resonated with the character I'm creating at this moment. o.o
Spooky, and very very amazing.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye very much. I'm very glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

I hope ye'll view the original to see how I derived it

And please feel free to share me poem out if you liked it enough =D

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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OutsideFate Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student Digital Artist
"Piece by piece
You're breaking apart; and it weighs a ton!"

Doesn't stuff generally become lighter when they crumble apart?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr yer right about that, but that is the contrast I'm bringing to the forehead. Think not in literal terms but rather, if you were losing your sense of self, I think the emotional burden would weigh quite a bit on your mind ;3

Anywho, thanks fer readin' ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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