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Disconnect Yourself [REMIX]:

Is it so easy to pull your wire
Out from the inside?
(The kiss of Cyanide)

You drank the poison
And lived a lie
(That you could not deny)

Weathering change
Your mind was like stone
But then it started to break...

Now drifting helplessly
You shattered like glass
Knowing that you're fake...

The empty shell, that you grew
Has started to come undone...

Piece by piece
You're breaking apart; and it weighs a ton!

The wire inside me
The blood in my veins
(A memory of an ancient pain)

Knowing that I
Am nothing but a fake
(The self you cast away)

Dreaming of times
When the world was simple
Not simply made of masks...

You lost yourself
When you took a sip
From the horrid poison glass...

So face yourself in the mirror
And look the person in the eye

Can you disconnect yourself from this vision
Or will you be the first to die?

"I dare you, to pull the wire..."

-Chen Yuan Wen ft. Rue (Relic-Angel), 14th March 2012
LINK TO ORIGINAL BASE: [link]

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Arrr maties, please feel free ta do one of the above (or all of the above if you like me enough). It's helping me in my career ^^

PERSONAL MESSAGE:

Arrr alright, this be me first remix. Courtesy of Rue :iconrelic-angel: and I'm rather pleased with the way it turned out.

As you can see from the original, I've gone into a more story-like aspect of the whole idea, which is what I tend to do with most works.

The disconnection of one from oneself can represent suicide, but not in a physical sense that leads to death but rather the death of a perceived personality or aspect of oneself that you perceive as tainted or destructive.

Overall it was extremely fun to work with this base and I give it a 4.5/5 star rating ^^

Please remember to view the original too (especially if you want to see what my work was derived from)

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:
Lilith My Queen - [link]
Such Beautiful People - [link]
You Can't Stop Me - [link]
Struggling at Life -[link]
I Am So Disturbed - [link]
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know this feeling so vividly... :tears: ... damn... how you've touched my heart with this... :blackrose: :cry:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I'm glad I managed ta touch yer heart ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: indeed you did... :giggle:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Bwahaha :3

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
but if it can come out, it can go back in where it came from, bring the electric thing (i don't know what it is called lol)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
It's called a defibrillator, but seriously, this was a serious poem :/

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconjackfireplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
i'm not serious anyway, :iconfeelingfreeplz: serious things make me lose hair...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, but I like ta be serious ^^

-Captain Chenbeard the Pirate :iconcaptainjackplz:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
i cant be serious, because when i am (rarely) noone takes me seriously
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chakramqueenCMS Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Me once read that the only scoundrel that could get away with being completely straightforward and honest and truthful all the time is either a poet or a comedian. Me sees a bit of both in ye mate.
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