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Denial:

He stands before the mountains
and sighs, knowing that they reach toward the heavens
He begins his climb
his hands soon bloodied, his fingers digging into the hardened stone

He continues to drag himself
against the crags that scrape against his peeling skin
Unwilling to end his climb prematurely
though the rocks continue to slice into his flesh

Blood is drawn with a single desperate gasp
as pain rings out throughout his frame
His feet tremble and his hands grow numb
but still he continues to climb ever higher...

The winds threaten to throw him from the face of the mountain
and they slowly begin to waste him away
His body turns to dust and is scattered away amongst the clouds
But still he presses on!

Eventually, all that is left of this man
is a pair of hands clinging stubbornly to the rocks
and though the winds may blow, the man's spirit wills them on
Inch by painful inch they climb, undetered and utterly determined

For even if he lacks a body, even if he has nothing left
he shows his defiance and denies the taunts of those who said he couldn't rise
He denies the very winds that have blown him to pieces
and now he denies the coward inside of him, telling him to give in to this pain

I shall deny adversity, because I am!

-Chen Yuan Wen, 28th July 2012
Author's Comment:

Here is the second piece to before I start the journey through hell-set. I wanted to get more practice with working with emotions and imagery. Hopefully, you will all enjoy this while I continue warming-up.

Thank you to everyone (in advance) for all the support and love that you have given me

-Chen

Other Poems By Me:
Hope Hope:

She waits for him
at the gates that stood when even the world crumbled
She sighs
knowing that her own name will soon be forgotten

Where once she carried the weight of the world
now her strength is but the tiniest whisper
A single spark, left to crackle amongst the shades
until all is lost in the endless folds of time

It's getting colder
though she still continues to stand by the gates
She is getting older
and thus her memories must fade...

Angels gather to watch her in these final moments
and they bow their heads as a sign of respect
For even now, as the life leaves her body
Still she continues to wait...

-Chen Yuan Wen
Shot to Hell Shot to Hell:

You know, I should probably be angry about all this
I mean, I am dead after all...
Still, I suppose there could be worse things in life

Of course, it did hurt you know; when you shot me
Oh my god! I thought I've just been shot!
The bleeding wasn't the worst part of the ordeal though
Instead, the worst part of entire situation was the feeling of slowly dying
the feeling of losing the life inside your body...

Some might say that it feels like being buried in a blizzard
but for me, it was more like jumping head first into an icy sea
I couldn't move and I couldn't speak...
all I could do was to simply hang there limp and
Sudden Cruelty Sudden Cruelty:

He is a God, or so he believes
He judges others and puts them into stereotypes
Asian? No life! Hispanic? Brainless!

He thinks he has control over his world
A delusion which he has never been able to break
Me? I'm better than them, I'm smarter...

He sits alone in his room, ignoring the emptiness
He sits in front of his computer and passes judgement
Lol, you're wrong. You're stupid. Everything is stupid!

He laughs and smiles at his own cruelty;
He feels powerful and most certainly superior to all
But in the end, it's just a fantasy isn't it?

He curls up in his bed, thinking about tomorrow
Here, he's a king, but out


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This poem explains the exact nature of defiance itself. once, when i was younger, i had a dog. for months and months, my parents were saying she had to go. but i ignored them, entirley. i played with her, fed her, hugged her, and walked her as if everything was ok. it didn't actually hit me that she was gone, until she was gone. denial is certainly like a big, massive, scary mountain is in front of you, towering over you, leering, mocking you. it tells you tht you'll never succeed, that you are wrong in every way. strong willed and defiant, you climb that mountain. sometimes you reach the topp, others you fall to the bottom. but you never give up. i think everyone in their livs had denied something once in their life, and i love the way this poem describes even the weakest and silliest denials in the same ways as the serious things. well done.
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immortal-terror Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This reminds me greatly of the video for "Away From the Sun" by 3 Doors Down.
It's an amazing read. I love it.
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freaky208 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer tha feature ^^

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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freaky208 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :huggle:
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Getsuei-san Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Epic!
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
That's it you!
I'm adding you to my watch list 1_~
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist
wow! well written.
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Duragonslaya Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is truly fantastic!! Another really great poem!!
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Great Job.
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
yay ignorance is bliss (if i spelt it correctly) people who grow up too fast would not ever be happy, even when they're old and wish they were younger. LIVE IN THE MOMENT nothing is impossible, it is only just about how you do it, and what would happen after that :L just saying
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GoneKrazy Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have to compliment your originality in the use of the concept of denial. It's boring to read poem after story after whatever being only about the denial of something bad having happened/happening.
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Djbones98 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are an amazing poet xx love this x
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MikaDiva Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderful poem! Very inspiring and awesome :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
wOOt!
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Dracoan Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hope he makes it.
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theartsydoglover Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I love this poem! Very well written! :D
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DarkAngelLover101 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I wanted to write a critique but I can't put my love for this poem in a hundred words because it just completely wows me. I love how you described every detail. I can feel the struggle from the man. It flows very well, and I feel like I'm reading a story. Well done.
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AshMashTheFlash Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So is life. Brilliant!
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Riarri Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in here was amazing, and some incredible determination.
And, well, very strong denial. Good job~ And sorry I don't have much more to say.
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Awesome poem. It's really inspiring imagery :D.
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Myennaius13 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
I have a shirt that is something like this. It's a picture of a mouse with an eagle about to land on it with its talons, and there's wording at the top. 'The last great act of defiance'. That's because the little mouse is flipping off the bird. In a way, the man in this poem is doing the exact same thing for the exact same reason.
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The-Funkiest-Penguin Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That is a really good piece of poetry. ''Eventually, all that is left of this man
is a pair of hands clinging stubbornly to the rocks'' has got to be my favourite line!
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LPeebles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is excellent! But... do you mind my asking of how exactly you went through hell? Because I would know about that... My stepfather has been in the hospital for the past two and a half weeks, though he was home for one day before being rushed back to the hospital in an ambulance... he had internal bleeding in one of his arteries after he's had surgery(he has Crohn's disease and had to have a surgery to remove the "dead" parts of his small intestine...).
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Amazing!!!
I like how somebody's will may defy everything!:)
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Ana-The-Unknown Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That is one determined fellow,
watch him as he goes!
A true hero,
watch him fight his foes!

(I dunno, your writing inspired me today :) )
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, denial taken up to eleven. This poem shows that with determination, you can defy everything. Though it must've been painful to slowly get worn away. Amazing work! :)
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Dang, man. That is hardcore denial right there.
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psychowithawhistle Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Amazing~ <3
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Falrone Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Continue going forward no matter how you get hurt.
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nicely used symbols and imagery. There's always a story-like nature to your poems, that gives it that unique finish, no? ;)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, that's generally what I like to do with my works. Create a story ^^

-Chen
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Breathtaking. Really beautiful. Very uplifting.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it Jade ;3

-Chen
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Bravo~!! I felt like I was really there and I could almost feel his pain. :clap:
(but...that could be due to the fact that I've been having body aches for the past 48 hours) XD
Either way, I really enjoyed this!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Ouch O_O, how did you get body aches for 48 hours xD

-Chen
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A flu or something along those lines...
...Either that or I'm way more out of shape than I thought... :lonely:
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valwolfpaw Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Fantasteec!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it :3

-Chen
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valwolfpaw Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
I really loved it! :) Thank you for putting it up, really made me look at the words and think... which most people don't always get to do every day!
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
fantastic. absolutely wonderful. perfect.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoyed it ^^

-Chen
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
my pleasure. i hope your poetry gets recognized.

-Emily
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Well, what with everyone enjoying it so much, I think there should be no problems. Every reader is valuable and so I love to give thanks to those who stop by and leave kind words. It is the flame that keeps me warm, even when I feel like I should give in ^^

-Chen
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
:D
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UPlover Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This was very good!! You had very good descriptive words to show the imagery!! Great work!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you my friend, glad you enjoyed it ^^

-Chen
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