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Cold Razors:

Let it pierce into my flesh
The cold metal of razors
and let me carve into my skin
a wonderous design of love

Love for the pain which I inflict upon myself
Love for the disgusting toxin which I bleed from deep within me
Love for all the people that remind me everyday of how pointless my existence is

Oh, I'm sorry, did you want to say something too?
Did you want to enjoy of this toxic waste?
This nauseating poisonous sulphurous odious mixture of noxious FUMES!

Ah, but you're one of the normal people aren't you
You can comb your hair without pain
You can dye it any colour you want
You can style it in any manner you please...
and yet you choose to complain?

Oh that's right, you can run too
You can run and jump and vault and swim and whatever else you feel like doing
You can enjoying the feeling of wind in your face without the need of
medication...

Ah, but that's alright, here let me sit and congratulate you
Let me pat you on the back for bringing glory to us all
Let me shake your hand and pretend that it is an honour
to have you standing on my back whilst I serve as your footstool

Is there anything else you need?
I would desperately like to please you
Especially since I'm so weak I need to live vicariously off your droppings

...
...
...

Between the two of us, I wonder who is the real fool?

-Chen Yuan Wen
Arrr maties,
First of, just t' be absolutely clear:
1) We love the olympics
2) Chen runs about 6km a day
3) He isn't disabled, don't ask xD

Alright, so this piece was one o' our rejects from 'REAL WEEK', I think it's pretty obvious t' see why since it's WAAAAY over the top and borderline psychotic.

When working with real week we wanted t' bring across real emotions and obviously with this piece, it came across as far too...one track, it didn't display emotion...just rage and further more it was pointless rage, so it was pretty much rejected as soon as it was produced. We didn't even edit it at the time, but Chen did fix up the spelling issues (though he left the strange format as is).

Hopefully it'll give ye a comparison for Chen's more genuinely emotional pieces...as opposed to this xD
P.S. even the title is shite

Hopefully ye enjoyed this and if ye want, check out some o' tha Captain's official work;

Breaking Free Breaking Free:

I sit here waiting, in the coldest of cells
Outside I hear them screaming for blood
I know that they mean to kill me soon
Yet somehow my spirit remains resolved and calm

As they march me to the gallows, wrapped in chains
I grin knowingly as they force me to kneel
Each and every man in the audience, waits for this moment
They know that something is about to change!

An eldritch wind ripples through the air
And I can feel it wrapping around my beating heart
It makes me feel like breaking the conventions:
The ones that I've torn apart...

And as they make me bow before the guillotine
I can feel a sense of unrivaled exc

A Shattered Illusion A Shattered Illusion:

A day that was born of the brightest light
Has now shattered like crystals in the sinking dark
Where once the spirit was unfettered and free
Now it weeps painfully in a cage of thorns

Blood is drawn from its tender flesh
And drips slowly down to mark the skin
A tattoo of pain forever remembered
By a ghost that lives within

There is emptiness in this void
A cold and lonely song of existence
A solemn note born from the sheer magnitude of the silence
That it deafens both the heart and mind

In the quiet serenity of utter despair
What is born from the lack of a sense of hope?
A cold determination to steal the f

Whispers of the Mad Whispers of the Mad:

Your lips remain painted with the scars of torment
Carved so as to split with every word of speech
The glass that slices through your softened flesh
Bears the marking we know as 'Vinashuka'

And now he lies beneath the falling sand
Drowning in a world that is sinking away
Though his feet will seek the stability of ground
He finds himself caught by 'Vinashuka'

A disturbing word that rings hollow at best
For it carries the tone of a tainted solitude
A heart that has been corrupted by physical pain
Can only scream 'Vinashuka!'

How does a man know when he has gone insane?
To descend into a world where logic is na


-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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ChocolateShortcake77 Aug 29, 2012
Lovely work.
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You hit a couple pet peeves of mine in this one. Writing about cutting just seems like attention-seeking to me, since anybody who really feels the level of self-loathing required to engage in self-harm would feel some level of shame and disgust with oneself, and be unlikely to share. (I know from first-hand experience.) Also, the phrase should be, 'all the people who remind me." You might want to reconsider the second to last line as well, since the word "droppings" is often used as a euphemism for excrement.

BTW, I know you're not doing the "breaking the limit" thing anymore, but I'd just like to note that the front page has been doing crazy things over the last 24hr. There'e been a lot of arbitrary shuffling, and there's currently no literature at all on the front page. It used to be that literature went in the same slot as DeviantArtSecret (I saw lit pieces get promoted to the front page at exactly the same time DAS expired off), so I'm wondering now if literature is now sharing a slot with a different category. It's very frustrating. All I know is, somebody has to stand up for literature.
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WordOfChen Aug 7, 2012  Professional Writer
This piece was rejected for those exact reasons and we're only releasing it now for 'fillers' which was stated in the author's comment.

I have spoken with Chen about the front page system, he says he will investigate further after his school workload has been settled to an appropriate level and when he begins making official releases again.

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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radikalModerate Aug 6, 2012   General Artist
that be pathetic droll spilt heavily upon corny flakes, the fool be I!




no just kiddin....
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WordOfChen Aug 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye so much fer readin' this piece and we hope ye enjoyed it, Chenbeard is currently bogged down with schoolwork, but we want ye t' know that yer readership is deeply appreciated. Thanks again ^^

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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Mossstar10 Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No emotion? I felt like crying for him!
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WordOfChen Aug 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye so much fer readin' this piece and we hope ye enjoyed it, Chenbeard is currently bogged down with schoolwork, but we want ye t' know that yer readership is deeply appreciated. Thanks again ^^

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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:iconsutsuki-sensei:
This may be one of his 'to hold us over' pieces but...wow, that had so much...feeling and emotion in it. That was just chilling and...brilliant. I'm actually at a loss for words.
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WordOfChen Aug 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye so much fer readin' this piece and we hope ye enjoyed it, Chenbeard is currently bogged down with schoolwork, but we want ye t' know that yer readership is deeply appreciated. Thanks again ^^

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
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