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Can You Accept Me?:

I'll admit I've done my share of things
Of which I know I can never be proud
And I've tried my best to be a better man;
But I guess I can't right now

The mistakes I've made are pretty clear to me
It's not like I can just wipe a 'tat'
The symbols that go all around my body;
And the numbers on my back...

They're all reminders of who I used to be
What I used to do and how I used to live
But that man just isn't me anymore;
And I need a chance that only you can give

I guess what I really want to say is that:
I'm trying my hardest to change for better
And I need to know that you can forgive me
And so I'm sending you this letter

If it gets to you, then let me know
Reply to me and tell me clear
Can we still be a family?
Can I hope to have you near?

We've been through hell and I know I've done wrong
I never should have stayed just an angry kid
And now that we have one of our own;
I think I know that I need to quit

So please just give me a second chance
Just one more shot to be a real dad
I hope you can give me another try
And let me wash away my bad...

-Chen Yuan Wen, 15th July 2012
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Author's Comment:

Third Release for Random Week, Final Release tomorrow.

I believe that I really struggled with the idea of romance before, because I always thought of it in a very linear way. Boy x Girl

But if you take one step to go beyond that and think about what romance is at its core. It's really just about that feeling of love and joy in being with another person. They may not be perfect, but you do love them very much.

Hence, I wanted to put a little bit of a street spin on it. I didn't want it to be a perfect disney land prince loves princess kind of thing. Nah, I wanted it to feel real. To me, the streets were always real and so I decided to bring out this piece instead. While its common to see poems about 'This is how much I love him/her'. That's boring and paper cut, there are thousands like that out there. I wanted to do something a little different.

Now, me personally I should probably say that I've never been involved with gangs or anything like that, but I do have friends who were and I remember how we lost contact and all the stuff that they went through so I tried to put some of that in tonight's piece.

As far as romance goes, it's a start and I'm glad to finally be making headway on becoming a master Word Bender.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

Other Poems by Me:
Whispers of the Mad - [link]
A Parody of Romance - [link]
In Service to Morgana - [link]
She Waits For Me - [link]

Other Prose by Me:
Sanguine Chapter 1 - Release 4 - [link]
Pirate: The Legend of Chenbeard, Chapter 1 - Release 1 - [link]
Mercenary Chapter 1 - Release 1 - [link]
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:iconlolnyny:
lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
wonderful! sad...
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely. :heart:
I love the spin you put on it. It's interesting to read something that isn't just the typical roses and chocolate stuff.
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Intense, moving, touching, deep and very sincere!

a definite fave ..!!!!
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
This is Great. Amazing Job.
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sen22 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Sad, but very good.
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Mossstar10 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's amazing, as usual, but so... sad D:
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SamiKitty14 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
kind of sad sounding, though still an amazing piece. Great work ^.^
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George551 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
Heyo, I have featured this in an art feature thing I was advised to do...also there's a video of pikachu on acid which in itself is a good reason to click the link [link]
:) :) :)
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
This does seem very real, great job :).
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you very much for enjoying it. Just wanted to bring out the real ^^

-Chen
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kdawg09 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
I kinda find this poem to be very sad.
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:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha sorry, I put a little of my own emotion into that ^^

-Chen
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kdawg09 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
Don't apologize, a poem without emotion is just words on paper :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Now that I can agree with ^^

-Chen
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:iconkdawg09:
kdawg09 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
I really enjoyed it :)
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:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^

-Chen
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:iconkdawg09:
kdawg09 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
You're welcome :-)
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SoldiersWolf Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good stuff.
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Love It!
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klevry1 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a nice written poem with a lovely theme, well expressed and a good rhyme scheme. The story progresses smoothly and keeps the reader reading.

The only problem si with the meter at places, you can change them a bit to make them better for example,

"But I guess I cannot right now"

"And the numbers scribbled across my back"

the fifth stanza needs a little more work on it.

Keep it up! I really liked the poem :)
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:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Writer
Actually thank you so much for the feedback. I really appreciate it and I hope to improve my meter the next time I do something with rhymes.

Peace and love ^^

-Chen
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :)
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teratabitha Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me of what happened between my parents, and than what happened between my father and I after that. The first half of this is amazing and I agree it doesn't seem like you have any issue writing romance works. This is all really well done. ^^
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012   General Artist
This was on the cusp of reaching the 24hr front page, but then it was shuffled behind less popular writings. The DA $taff has altered the sorting algorithm to keep literature from getting to the front page. They did the same thing with typography earlier, and through my communications with them, they've made it clear that they've done so to keep certain people from reaching the front page, to the detriment of hard-working artists like you. I know you like getting favorites, and not being able top reach the front page takes a lot of exposure (and therefore potential favorites) away from you.

If you want the exposure you used to get, contact the help desk and/or individual $taffers about this. If you can, get some of your watchers to do the same. The $taff needs to know that we don't want them to rig the system based on their personal biases and preferences.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Just an update, it appears to be specific people. In this case, me haha. Thank you for letting me know (I saw someone else reach front page already and only then was my piece allowed to go forward behind that persons). I just want to know why they have to dislike me specifically, it's a little sucky, but at least it's not literature as a whole that's being denied ^^

-Chen
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012   General Artist
Funny thing...they were doing the same thing on my piece A Real Masterpiece, so I added something in my description about it. I was still getting 8hr front page exposure, so I could use that to call attention to this issue. Within minutes, my deviation jumped way up in ranking, and I got on the 24hr front page shortly thereafter. (I also promptly removed my note from the description.) I've seen other weird things like that, too. I have to wonder if they changed something because of my commentary...

All I can say is that this sort of thing has been going on for a while, and it's getting really old. I can see why they would have something against me since I post so much controversial material, but I have no idea why they'd have anything against you. Whatever it is though, I wish somebody in charge would sort it out so the popular page is about your popularity with the audience rather than the site admins.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Yeah I know, your stuff is funny and I've seen your work numerous times as well ^^

Tonight I'll see what I can get the fans to do and see what I can do on my end. If I don't get a reply in 2 days from them, I will probably start getting everyone to appeal regardless because it shouldn't be happening at all.

I've always been a firm believer in being an entertainer rather than an artist, so my works (while not poetically conventional) are either about real emotion OR entertaining people with the kind of stories you won't get. Oh well :3, c'est la vie, I won't be discouraged even if they do pull this kind of stunt on me.

-Chen
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Is that so? Haha thanks for telling me this. I'll send in a message ^^

-Chen
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DerecktheDude Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
wow, such a touching poem. Inspires me to be a better man! :)
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slynoren Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
this really touched me....
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ChibiChick137 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Wow! Loved it! :heart: It was so heartfelt and touching!
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Fire-Link Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
One of those real things in life. How's things going?
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akai-yari Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Pretty dark and you succeeded in turning something so cliché and so ordinary as a man regretting his mistakes and asking a second chance to his love into a pretty interesting poem. It's intriging and inspiring.
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elli0777 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is so touching :*O
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LovinLife92 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
I really like this :D
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CameronFedora Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderful :)
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Myennaius13 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
love is such a complex thing that it will always be hard for anybody to fully explain. It is something that can cause people to do both wonderfully good things, and to also commit some of the darkest evils man is capable of.
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Suzanne101 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Artist
This was a wonderful poem. ^^ Probably one of my favorites by you so far! :3
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Jaqwetta7 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
its really good[link]
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xpanicattheps3x Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So beautiful c: I could just feel the emotion and ah it's lovely~
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ciscobuddy Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
I can relate to this quite well.
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Cyluho Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yometing different, but nevertheless great :)
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
That was beautiful Chen. You say say you have trouble writing romance pieces but this is amazing. I love it!
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brokenrose80 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
we all have things we arent too proud of, mistakes we made..they might be more subtle but are there.
i think this poem hits the reality better then all that fantasy flowery bs people think romance is.
love is about looking honestly at the other person, warts and all, and saying yeah this person isnt perfect
but this is the person i choose to be with, my compliment i can build a shelter to weather the storms of life with.
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DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
This brought tears to my eyes. It is so beautiful and real. Wonderful writing me Capetian. :clap: :rose:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you Angel, I appreciate the comment ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
You are welcome me Capetian.^^
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DannyOfX Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Nicely done Chen. What a realistic feeling in this poem.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks man, I was really trying to go for that vibe so I even switched the accent to how I normally speak xD.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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