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Can I Cut Yet?

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Can I Cut Yet?:

Hey, Hey Sadako
Hey...
I really want to cut something
can I, can I please?

This girl is talking to me, she seems rather nice
The colour of her eyes makes me think of fucking lice
I want to cut her, I want to cut her so bad!
but that seems to make Sadako really sad...

Okay, I guess I won't cut her

Hey, Hey Sadako
This teacher is really boring
I want to cut him, I WANT TO CUT HIM SO BAD!

I'm in class now, Sadako stands beside me
She points out a mistake I made in my notes
I start tearing at the paper while grinding my teeth
I want to show them my frustration, OH SO BAD!
but that seems to make Sadako really sad...

Okay, I guess I'll wait till I get home

HEY, HEY SADAKO!
My whole body is trembling, my hands are in shakes
The world is spinning and I'm sweating out cold
The box-cutter is in my hands and I hold it up high
I want to cut something, I want to cut something up so bad!
HEY HEY! CAN I CUT THIS, CAN I CUT THIS LUMP OF FLESH?
WHAT ABOUT MY CHEEKS, MY HANDS, CAN I CUT THOSE TOO?

Sadako stares as though I'm crazy mad
but I'm not bad, I'm not bad
She looks at me with pity and takes my cutter from me
She puts it in a place where I cannot see...

It's always the same, she's always there
she always looks like I've made her sad
Hey, Hey Sadako...
Why are you so sad?
is it because I didn't cut anything today?
I see, okay, I'll cut something tomorrow then
and maybe then, then...


-Chen Yuan Wen, 29th August 2012
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Author's Comment:

Recently, I've seen a lot of poetry that deals with emotional issues and self-harm. However, it seems to focus only on a particular angle of self-harm, that is to say, those that do it out of frustration and sorrow.

Yet, self-harm also exists in the form of mental instability. An addiction to pain and a distortion from reality, usually reflected in schizophrenia which can create both auditory and visual hallucinations.

In this case I chose to narrate from the point of someone who is obviously blending into society on the surface (because he'd just be seen as a weird kid) but on the inside is very disturbed.

Sadako is a mental representation of his own self-restraint, his sane self and her name is a contrast with the J-Horror entity.

In any case, I wanted to use this piece as an experiment for my new idea and to test out what happens when I break away from the usual four line format.

Enjoy ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Just before anyone raises the grammar and punctuation thing, I've heard it all before. I chose the particular grammar style to use the written word to its fullest form. Capitals, bold, italics, it's all a tool like different colours made to create a painting ^^

Other Poems by Me:
Overcome your Writer's Block Overcome your Writer's Block:

If you want to deal with writer's block
the plan is simple, tickty-tock
Give in to madness, go insane
search for words in the midst of rain

When you hit the wall on its painted face
with your fingers and knees you'll find a trace
The secret passage that will lead you through
or perhaps you might be eaten by a grue...

Oh well...

Back to the rhymes that I use to explain
If you try to go forward it will be in vain
So try a new direction, upward or down
Left or right maybe Charlie Brown?

There are no limits except in your mind
Now do a google search and what do you find?
A pond of ideas now stagnant a
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Where do I start?

First off, there isn’t really a steady flow nor a strict rhyme scheme.. but as we all know a steady fixed rhyme scheme isn’t always needed. Alas the flow however didn’t really do it for me.

You are somehow idolizing cutting/self-mutilation it sounds much like a psychopath and less than an actually person who is suffering and cuts for that reason, but more as if the person is a sadomasochist. Not sure if you tried to take the theme out of its dark and dreadful setting and create something humorous with it. But it didn’t really convey that way.
Though you've kind of nailed a disturbing side of the individual.

To me it sounded much more like ignorance, the fact you didn’t look at it hard enough, you did however portray the addiction, the love and need for it. So I’ll give you points for that.

All by all it’s a decent work, though I would have enjoyed a more steady flow and a bigger/better displayed context.