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Blood Crusade:

They rode upon the backs of thundering horses
for faith had unleashed a terrible beast
These men would offer their souls in service
to the dark unholy priests...

"To what end do we serve our Lord and Master
is justice not the ultimate form of faith?
Should we not stand and fight in his name
to cleanse the Earth of this heathen waste!"


It was these orators, chaplains of faith;
men of the cloth who bore a fire
They lit their brothers with impassioned speeches
fueled by their own desire...

They taught their followers that blood was faith
and devotion was found at the edge of a blade
"Blessed is the mind too small for doubt
for the faithful shall never be swayed..."


The men who accepted them, though pure at heart
would soon be eaten by Lust and Greed
For Wrath had become a norm of existence
and death became a Templar's creed...

But woe betide the man who slaughters
for his soul shall be forever stained
And no penance may ever remove this grief;
for his heart is already chained...


"In grief, in death, in eternal suffering; he joins the Lord of Flies..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 25th May 2012
AUTHOR'S COMMENT:

Arrr maties, t'night I return ta me scheme of rhymes and I do apologise fer tha confusion over tha past few days.

Me research consumed me and sadly tha poetry I produced was not of quality. In fact having broken meself with free verse, I actually found it difficult to grasp the rhymes today and had to go through much meditation and retweaking before this release was ready.

However, I am proud of me efforts and I hope that ye'll enjoy this piece. It is a little lighter on the darkness than I would normally go, but since the theme is "Bard Week". I intend to do a Dark Bard's portrayal of the Great Crusade.

Tomorrow, I will probably release something more light-hearted as a break from darkness might do everyone good ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:

The Secret of the Trees - [link]
Dragon Blood - [link]
The Great Drake - [link]
Rest My Sweetest Darling - [link]
Fear the Dragon Call - [link]
Our Word is Sacred - [link]

OTHER LITERATURE BY ME:

Knight Run 2 - [link]
Knight Run- [link]
SANGUINE Chapter 1 - 1 - [link]
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l33tn3rdz Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And as a result of this bloody slaughter in killing people who did nothing to us, they flew airplanes into our buildings a century later. If we had not done this then perhaps 9/11 may never have happened.
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Hard to rhyme, oh no, we must pull out the docter Seuss books quick! Lol, just kidding, I'm kinda hyper today. The rhymes and fluency were amazing, and this poem did send a small shiver down my spine. Good job as usual!
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kaleecee Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
I have featured this lovely piece in my journal. [link] :heart:
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Pagan-Moon-Dreamer Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I really like this one amonge the best you wrote yet because I reminds me on Christianity.
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CrypticCuriousity Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
Very nice word choice :). The way you portrayed the men's loyalty was great :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
whoa awesome!
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Little-Tin Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
1 word. Beautiful.
I love it, cap'n! ^.^
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Cryptickat8 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012   Writer
Hehe. It's dark but.. bouncy. I really liked the rhythm!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye, glad ye enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Cryptickat8 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012   Writer
Hehe ^^
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love the poem. Brilliant!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly, plenty more where that came from :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Likonan Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   Digital Artist
I got a poetic shiver of delight once I read "...and death became a Templar's creed...". The language here is so eloquent and wonderful!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Glad that ye liked it ^^. If you enjoy my style of work, feel free ta fave and come back anytime for updates :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Likonan Featured By Owner May 27, 2012   Digital Artist
You bet!:lol:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That last verse always gets me. XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, glad that it does, it's how me works are structured :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And the structure is very good. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye, but tonight won't have much of a structure xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I saw that. X)
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
"Lord of the Flies..."
Oh my gosh, that was definitely the best way to end this!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye thank ye, I'm very glad that ye enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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crysanthemum963 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
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MonicaArlene Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
This is absolutely phenomenal! It gives a vivid picture and it's very well thought out! Wonderful job!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly, if ye like me works, fave em when ye see em, it's a huge boost ta me. Ive written an appeal explaining why ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Chaleka Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect rhyme, message and rendition.the content is bursting with info,research is self evident.i've only got The Sadist for comparison, but your poems show your talent.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly. I'm honoured to receive such a compliment and if you'd like to read more, well more is to come tonight. I'll be releasing another piece in about 2 hours or so ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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mistressofdark92 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Ooo very interesting!
i really really liked this one!
Great job! :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye, another comin' in about 2 hours ;3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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mistressofdark92 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
I'll be checking that out as well :)
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Great job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Aethrios Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Certainly does fit into the time period, but I get a couple different vibes from this: it seems to be both a warning to those who would follow in their path, or just a warning in general, as well as the telling of a story. And, although this is just my opinion, the split focus seems to detract a little from the overall quality. It means it's less of either a story or a warning... but in either case, it certainly isn't a poor piece of work.

I don't mean to bash; only share an opinion. I still think it's quite a good piece of writing, but not quite as strong as it might be able to be. That being said, I wouldn't, under any circumstance, expect a revision.
Glad to see the return to the rhymes, looking forwards to your work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you and I do understand that, however it was primarily a story with the ending to serve as a warning which is why it switched inbetween. At the same time, it was a toss up between writing the fanciful happy stuff, the outright demonic stuff or something inbetween. Since I chose to write about the crusades I didn't want to make it another slash and gash type poem where I talk about the killing and blood spilling, which we all know happened.

So I decided to focus on the priests instead and the demonism behind that. Speaking of which I'll probably tackle one on the Lord of Flies soon xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Delrymple121 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant <3

It also helps that your poetry seems to dwell around a medieval-ish time period, which is always a favorite of mine. lol LOVED IT!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye I'll be doin' two more on the same topic, so I hope that you'll enjoy them as well ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my God, this poem has a very nice flow and rhyme ! I always like your words of chosen ! They are all great like usual ! :)
Keep on the good work my friend. And don't ever stop make me impressed.....
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye kindly me friend, I'll do me best

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good to hear that ! Your artworks are AMAZING !!! :clap:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye, just a little part of me heart ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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heavenlytouch Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aye aye captain ! :)
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DaxyJackson Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The poem had a beautiful flow and rhyme. I kept tripping over this stanza though:

"The men who accepted them, though pure at heart,
would soon be eaten by Lust and Greed
For Wrath had become a norm of existence
and death became a Templar's creed..."

I don't know if I was reading it incorrectly or if the rhythm is off. Otherwise, the poem was great. :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, I think that the problem is accent. When I wrote this entire piece I was strictly using a Death Metal growl to read the whole thing out and it flowed when I read it in that voice. Also the comma at the end of "though pure at heart" appears to be a mistake which might also have caused the problem, but no one pointed it out. So thank you very much. Generally there should be no punctuation at the end of a line unless it is a ;, ? or ...

Any other punctuation will throw the reader off I'm afraid ^^;

I shall fix the comma now and I thank you kindly for reading and enjoying my work ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DaxyJackson Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Might be the accent. I kept reading it like I normally would, and the stanza kept throwing me off. And does that mean I've been writing my poetry wrong, seeing as I sometimes end my lines with a period?

You're welcome. :)

On another note, everytime I read the description under one of your poems, I always read it with a Jack Sparrow accent. It's kinda weird. Thought I'd let you know. ;)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Is that so? Well then I'm proud to have a jack sparrow accent :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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hazelstripe Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
"Blessed is the mind to small for doubt, for the faithful can never be swayed." That was probably my favorite line! :) Good work!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you, it was intended to show the general idea behind the crusades. Quite a frightening thing I must say xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Bethebelle13 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think this piece is the best yet!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly. I'm very glad that you liked it and I hope you'll enjoy a lot more ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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GhoustlyVoice Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome :3
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