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What faith you have in this foetid world!

With its fat fingers wrapped gleefully around your neck.

The smile of demons caresses your soul.

As the knife of betrayal plunges into your back.

Still you smile, with your head so heavy.

You drag yourself up upon aching feet.

Vainly hoping you might still survive;

I'll be waiting until you accept your defeat...




HEAR THIS PIECE PERFORMED! - soundcloud.com/siddhartha-chen…

Alright everyone,

I'm so sorry I haven't had time to respond to your comments yet, I'll definitely do so either tomorrow or the day after. I got home from work late today and basically had no time to do much.

However, what I did work on is what some of you have been waiting for - Holy Man's Demon VOICE!

I did realise though, during the production process, that Holy Man, being a rapper, isn't suited to having a demon. So I have decided that WITHIN Holy Man, is a demon of Lust and Pride. This demon performs the spoken word pieces since it knows well what goes on in the minds of men. Holy Man will do his best to keep the demon Zibir in check, but the demon will break free more often than not.

As for the raps, they will be done in my natural rapping voice, maybe made a little cleaner is all. I have decided not to use the demonic echos for the raps since they do not fit the demonic style, rap (especially acid rap) needs to be raw and so I'll be using my raw vocals.

I hope you will enjoy the audio I did tonight however, even though the piece itself is just some sample stuff I wrote it in like 5 minutes x'D.

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Holy Man's mask design is in its first stages, probably going to take a look at materials next week :'3
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Nope, I refuse to go down! :)
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Shadowkat678 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Good wow? x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Shadowkat678 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely good wow.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Professional Writer
Epic ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Shadowkat678 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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Heart416 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
E....  Emotional.... OVERLOAD!!!!!!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks so much for enjoying it, let me know how the audio sounded ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Heart416 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
You're so welcome^^
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Kimberly-chan13 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you ^^ Hope you liked the audio, let me know if this voice is better or if the new one I posted is better :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Kimberly-chan13 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome!!
Yup I liked it alot!! It was awesome :D
I think both of them are amazing in their own way.. In my opinion both voices suit their part of the poetry but I like this one more :) Just what I think that is :3
Amazing work by the way :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
I see :'3 I'm leaning much more to the second one, but I'll try to improve it so that both are integrated x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Kimberly-chan13 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Best of wishes to you :D
Altough both of them are amazing as they are.. ;)
Good luck for your improvement..if it can be improved that is ;) its already perfect :clap: :3
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Orionnator Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
?
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
? ouo

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
This is really beautiful. :love: I am in awe... :wow: 

I really love the way this poem starts, it really draws the reader in... I love the darkness and symbolism within this piece. I find it very relate-able and it could be taken in many different ways, which is love. The recording makes it even more amazing. <3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly ^^ I'm glad that you enjoyed it and the audio recording, I've produced another sample for the demon's voice, it can be found on my latest deviation. I hope to compare the two and see which one ends up better :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
That's awesome, and you're welcome. :heart: 
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Nhizyr Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Ermahgerd, that voice is so British!

I really really like the audio, actually! The voice and echo fit very well and the intonation sounds like you have a lot of practice doing voiceacting, sounds professional even--  but, that is also my problem with it, it sounds like someone acting a role. Maybe that's what you are going for, I don't know, but I'd personally like it better if it sounded more natural, and less exaggerated stereotypically 'evil'.

I hope that's a useful comment! ;u; 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Lol yes I used a more british accent for it, but still not completely british.

I do a lot of different vocal roles, but mostly for dark characters. This time however it was a little forced, I had to deepen my voice to achieve the effect I wanted.

Instead, on my newest recording I've upped the distortion instead. Let me know which is betta ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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lyrics-and-fiction Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like your writing. Feel free to check out my group and join if it interests you. Would be much appreciated. 

keepcalm-and-writeon.deviantar…
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks but I can't join an rp group at the mo' ^^; No time what with payin' bills and writing poetry haha x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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lyrics-and-fiction Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's not a roleplay group it's just a place for you to submit your work as a way of getting more exposure. Either way I understand. :) 
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MysteryBandit Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I was going to say something formal
but I forgot
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha, well that's alright, hope you liked the audio ^^

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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SonicRedesigned Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
. . .    -_________________-
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
why the long face :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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SonicRedesigned Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Every time I get on here, you have some poem posted here, as if i care, and some-how it gets 30 comments, even at the most simplest of poems.

Also, putting your signature is kind of a douche thing. It makes you sound like a big shot, and I hate those. Seriously, do you want me to end a comment with my signature even though that you can clearly see my name and icon?
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~SonicRedesigned :iconsonicredesigned: < < <

I mean really?
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I bet it takes you five minutes to write this crap out, get multiple comments, (I don't know how people can be so "inspired" by words) While I take days into my drawings, and get no comments, sure I don't care about the comments, or the faves, but really, this is getting ridicules, every single day when I want to actually look at ART, this poetic "art" shows up. I'd like to see something that people have taken time into creating, not pointless words.

Now, time to be a complete dick and put my Avatar, and Username as if I'm an important person. (Who's actually wasting life everyday creating worded gimmicks. Anyone can rhyme, oh wait, half of this "art" doesn't even rhyme!)

- SonicRedesigned :iconsonicredesigned:
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papetto-manipyureta Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't be jealous.

Just try harder.
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TheLadyYuki Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
 If you really don't care for Chen's poetry, you're not who he writes it for.
But attacking him for constantly being on the front page just makes you sound jealous and bitter, regardless of how much you claim you don't care how many comments or faves your own art gets.
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moonfeather8 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"Also, putting your signature is kind of a douche thing. It makes you sound like a big shot,"

-Let the person do what they want! They aren't trying to act like a "big shot". It could be a habit, it could be something they have saved to do every time they comment. It's a personal choice, and bringing a random fact like this into a criticism was kind of a douche thing to do. :/


"I bet it takes you five minutes to write this crap out, get multiple comments, (I don't know how people can be so "inspired" by words)"

-Okay, even if the piece of work is short, it has the meaning still intact. A poem doesn't have to be a 3000 page essay to be considered inspirational. I can almost guaranty that this took more than five minutes to write out, unless the writer writes quickly with a single burst of inspiration. Even then, it might take more than five minutes. Writing takes more effort than you think, but you'll never know unless you put yourself in someone else's shoes.


"I'd like to see something that people have taken time into creating, not pointless words."

-Being honest, you sound like a complete asshole on this. It's basically saying that writing isn't art, when it was, is, and always will be. "Pointless words" make people's allowance. "Pointless words" let people express themselves, just like drawing a picture could do for certain people. Being a writer myself, this is pretty offensive.


"Anyone can rhyme, oh wait, half of this "art" doesn't even rhyme!"

-Poetry doesn't have to rhyme you uncultured swine!! Have you never been taught ANYTHING about the types of poetry? Rhyme and meter (you probably don't know what meter is, based on your knowledge of poetry from your comment, so I'll tell you. Meter is the "beat" or rhythm of a poem) make up the most common poetry people think of, with the rhyme schemes and others. Free Verse is literally just writing what's on your mind, letting the words flow from your pencil tip (or keyboard if you're writing on a computer). There are plenty of other types, but I won't bore you with anymore "pointless words"


Do some research on something before you go out and call it crap and make the artist feel like shit. You honestly have to go out of your way to get on here and type out a shitty fucking argument over something you are obviously so clueless about. If writing bugs you SO much, then get used to it, because books are poetry. Songs are poetry. You'll never be able to get rid of those. And if seeing poetry on deviantART annoys you so much, then DON'T LOOK AT IT. You can literally just use the tabs on the side to get the category you want sorted, without these "pointless words" on there. 


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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks for the defense, I appreciate it, but yeah I don't really care what people say. He's probably just having a bad day. More importantly, how's the audio on this piece, I really need feedback x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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moonfeather8 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem c:

And for the audio, it sounds really nice! The deepness of the voice and the slight echo fit the theme, but the voice sounds just a little forced, like it can't naturally go to that pitch. Other than that I think it's really good and I hope you continue writing these lovely poems and now the audio because that makes 'em even better nwn
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Hmm you're right, I shall try modifying the voice a bit for the next one

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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moonfeather8 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, sounds good c:
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MysteryBandit Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey buddy
Eat a snickers
Your acting douchy
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BL4Z1NG-SH4D0WS Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Poetry is artwork, just to let you know. And, some doesn't have to rhyme, it's called Free Verse, and it has a rhythm not a rhyme scheme.
I love the poetry this artist has Featured and I am actually glad that it isn't all drawings on the main page.
Please keep your rude comments to yourself, it hurts the owner of the artwork to see hate comments.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks for sticking up for me, but these guys are always around. I'd prefer to know if you liked the audio :'3 Since no one has commented on it yet x'D

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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BL4Z1NG-SH4D0WS Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I just hate people like this. I wish they'd just stop and mind their own business. And, I liked the audio as well! :) I listened to it right after reading the poem on here :) Good job!
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romantica12 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooohh... The voice of your alter ego sounded very haunting towards the content of this dark poem. *clap clap* Congratulations on the written material and vocal! :3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks x'D I'm glad you took the time to comment :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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romantica12 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so very welcome. :3 I'm happy to help! ^^ *huggle*
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha thanks again ^^ *huggles*

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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romantica12 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Mhm. ^^
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Ravenwingedgurl Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The excitement is building. Cant wait for it to be finished. XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Haha thanks :'3 I'll definitely show you when it's done. How did you like the audio on this piece? :'3

I am eager to know what people think of Zibir :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Ravenwingedgurl Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well I haven't listened to it yet but when I get the chance I'll tell you what I think okay? X)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks! Appreciate it :'3

-Chennie :iconwordofchen:
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Ravenwingedgurl Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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