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Beaten Black and Blue:

Broken and bloodied on the inside;
My world is coloured in shades of black.
But I've never understood the reason
For why I've got these scars on my back...

Cigarette burns are nothing new to my body
I took a lash from the whip just yesterday.
Why are you staring at me with those eyes again;
Is there something you'd like to say?

I've never been told to speak a word of my pain
And so I learned that I shouldn't speak...
'You'd better not say a single thing to her!'
Maybe I'm just scared and weak...

I often run to a place that's far away;
It's just a little corner inside my mind.
I've tried to forget it again and again
But it comes back to me all the time...

These people think that they know me
But a smile is just a mask to hide.
This is the crime that I keep a secret
Because it's locked away inside...

You'll never be able to help me
So don't give me your pity and tears.
Just tell me that you won't do the same thing
Because that is the worst of my fears...

I'm already past the critical point
It can't be worse in hell.
But please don't make me live again
I'd rather miss the morning bell...

"I just want to stop seeing others like me..."

-Chen Yuan Wen, 12th April 2012
AUTHOR'S COMMENT:

Alright this is the official opening of Vile Society week and I hope you all enjoy yourselves.

As promised, Vile Society will deal with several topics designed to make society feel...VILE in general...

Do you know what this piece is talking about?

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

OTHER POEMS BY ME:

What You Can't Remember - [link]
Happy Memories - [link]
Terror of the Red World - [link]
A Viking Reborn - [link]
Fury of the Frost Giants - [link]
Journey to Valhalla - [link]



OTHER LITERATURE BY ME:

SANGUINE Chapter 1 - 1 - [link]
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:iconlolnyny:
lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
So beautiful, I felt the same way, and sometimes I still...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye...

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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darknessoverme666 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
Great poem. Very powerful. Very emotional. My best friend is in a simialr situation. She thinks she is past the critical point, but she is not. Because I will support her. She is keeping me away, so she is alone. Please let me help you. Let me in. Nobody will understand like I do. I feel your pain. I always knew it was there. I have the scars inside and outside too my love. Please share your pain with me. I will listen. I will care. I will love you uncondionally.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye kindly. I'm very glad that you found meaning in this ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sincere apologies for taking so long to reply T^T
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LeonieAsteria Featured By Owner May 3, 2012
my favorite one <3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly. Hope ye enjoy the rest too ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Sincere apologies for taking so long to reply T^T
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klevry1 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awww child abuse is WRONG
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye I agree with ye there :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012
SHeeP does not understand, is it hallucinations? or nightmares, they cause self destruction?
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Awaitch Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012
Is it a child(a girl?) that been beaten/sexually abused by a father(mums partner?) like model? addressing society/friends and the future people in her life now grown up but with remaining scars?
Great btw :)
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Epic. Sounds like slavery, to me. But that's *almost* immaterial- because your words are so beautifully strung, that it'd be an insult to *not* tell you how magnificent this piece is- and it IS... :nod: :)
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ThespianGirl921 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Lovely poem! To me, this paints a picture of a slave who has gone through years of torment and punishment. Beautifully written. :)
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DeeryDeerth Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lovely poem, as always! :D
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brokenrose80 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this poem is me...
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Cliford-the-dog Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
Not sure if it's about abuse or self-harm because really it can apply to both. Beautiful.
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Shiatanni Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
I love the poem Captain, but if ever want some inspiration, you could could always reserch Freamantle prison in WA, I think that kind of history is right up your street this week ;)
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AmigoGirl14 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student
i freaking :love: it :)
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
This is Amazing.
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MyChEmIcAlRoMaNcE10 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
This was beautifully written but sad.
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Demon-Fire-Fox Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Very very well made. It really gives some extreme emotions. XD!
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Fatally3103 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Gives back the image of a person so beaten they're crawling, grasping at the ground, cackling....again
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Emerald-Glaceon Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this piece is about domestic abuse right? Sad thing is I'm sure this happend/happens to someone everyday. Iunderstand this (to a degree) But I can never fully understand it, every situation is different. Brom being beaten everyday to fearing for your life everyday, or being terrorized everyday. Humanity can truly be vile and cruel.
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
That was beautifu written and sad too. It's like a slave that doesn't care what happens to them so long as nobody else has to suffer. It's mangicent Chen. Really. I felt the sadness.
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Fantasy-WarriorX Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sorry, I meant to say that what the narrator goes through seems disturbing and it's what some of us can relate to.
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Fantasy-WarriorX Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this! It's so beautifully written . . . and I can feel the emotions coming off from this piece! These words feel so true and go very deep emotionally and psychologically, it's disturbing what the writer goes through and this is a poem that can appeal to everyone. Good job!
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dragon-drawer78 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I understand this, though I kind of wish I didn't >_>

Awesome job Captain :D very well written :clap:
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LovelessCrosseria Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist
really well written but sad, a true story
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ShatteredMoon96 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
its very sad but sadly i know how it is to be abused like that :(
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Wild-Wolf-Lilly Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
This is awfully sad, but full of emotion. Well written!
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Mooch13000 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Versus (im sorry i dont know wat the paragraphs are called) 4-6 describe me perfectly
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Lemon-Yelloww Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
That's another amazing one! =O Really sad, and so full of emotion!
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X24nekosan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is outstanding! XD
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Anna-Viktoria Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
SO GOOD!!! I LOVE THIS POEM! And it's so sad... :cries:
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lotuswild Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this is so sad
but very well written
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Albaharu Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Digital Artist
i like the vile society week <3
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JoltingAdlaiR Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
:S Sad .. Reminds me how some kids go through bully but never say their pain.
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bbearsgirl Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
im guessing it's talking about being abused both physically and mentally i like it it makes you think how many people are out there that that has been done to
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist
:icongo-on-plz:i think your talking about society....but i'm not sure
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ciscobuddy Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
This piece is about abuse. Very well written.
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ExileFallen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very moving! Great Work!
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DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Professional Writer
"Aye, know intimately what this poem speaks of. Wonderfully written Capetian, this poem spoke volumes for me personally. You have touched for me personally, many emotions I have felt being a person who has been a Silent One. Thank you for writing this. :iconblackheartplz:
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omg that is amazing!! how can u write so much passion and make it so beautiful?! i am so jealous! youi are so amazing!!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Abuse. So yes, a strong and brave poem.


The morning bell line...using the word 'miss' instead of 'not hear' perhaps??
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for the comment. I actually edited it and this is the first time I've taken a suggestion. That was an excellent pick-up on a flow mistake. I guess both my editor and I were too tired to pick that one up.

So thank you again ^^. As I don't actually have the life experience to do these poems. I am expanding my skill by using mental image training to get the right kind of feelings :3

To know that you picked up that error, means that you read through the whole thing. I tip my black fedora to you ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely writing that really has a unique voice and vibe. I commend you for the wonderful work :D
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gooeyshmooey Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Abuse...There is only so much you can do, but you can never erase the effect it's had on you. ?
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Ivylis Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Tis makes me think of a person so abused that he retreats from the world and builds a wall around himself and just won't let anyone in, even then the pain is still fresh and haunts him. He scoffs at sympathy and pity because he feels that those feelings are worthless and they didn't know what it was like to be him and it was not like they would remove the scars branded into his skin or the painful memories seared into his mind.

And I should think that if he were to witness someone else acting like his tormentor he'll lose control.

Well that's what I would infer...

Another good one Capt'n

-Kristine the Skyrunner of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Parody-of-Eve Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How deep. I can actually feel the tension in the poem. Impressive! :)
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escapeXyourXfate Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
I love it!
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