Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
Battle Scars:

Sharp claws rake into my skin
as my blood bursts forth to splatter against the ground
The uneven breathing of my foe
tells me that he too is wounded and close to death

I can see his teeth, flecked with frothing saliva
foaming and spitting as he bellows his name
He charges into me, his frame crashing with mine
the impact has me reeling and I fall back against the stone

The ground feels cold
the icy chill seeping into my bones
the warmth of my blood escapes me
and I can feel myself beginning to fade

Up toward the sky I glance
praying that I might receive assistance
I pray that he who commands me, he who stands above
Will pity his servant and relieve me of this pain...

Yet, my prayers go unheard
Here I lie, slowly fading
slowly drifting into the grey ocean
as the voice that commands me utters my fate:

"Pikachu, use Thunderbolt NOW!"

-Chen Yuan Wen, Experimental Release
Tha Captain was playing around with tha idea o' pokemon and he wanted t' experiment with getting into tha thoughts o' tha pokemon, who in real life would be battling an' takin' serious wounds, so all o' that was put into perspective with a nice twist at tha end t' sort of say what it was about. Had t' place it under humour because, no where else t' put it really.

Enjoy and don't forget t' fave if ye liked ^^

-Co-captain Hayes :iconlugialuvr13:
Add a Comment:
 
:iconmandarijntjes:
mandarijntjes Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
pretty funny at first i had no idea it was about pokemon until i read the last sentence haha. like it!
Reply
:iconphoenixofwinterfell:
PhoenixOfWinterfell Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Student Writer
Wow... That is an awesome way of making a poem about Pokemon! To be truthful, I wasn't expecting that ending :D Great work!
Reply
:iconfeanor-the-dragon:
Feanor-the-Dragon Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I haven't been a poke fan in a looong while... but WOW! Did you spin it awesomely! I didn't see it coming through all of the epicness until the last line!
If pokemon were a book, written like this, I'd be obsessed with it! Very well played, my friend! :D
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like weeks late. So Sorry :c
Reply
:iconxyvette:
xyvette Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
THIZZ IZZ COOOLLLLL!!! EVERY LAST SENTENCE OF URS IS STUNNING AND UNEXPECTED!!! >W<
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconxyvette:
xyvette Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
is okay~ ;)~ i dun mind u reply late as long as you keep working on ur poetries~ :)
Reply
:iconsoulmech1:
Soulmech1 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
wow really nice twist who new pokemon had it so tough
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icontwiunderseeker:
TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
Great Job.
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconkrusnik03:
Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwww, poor Pikachu! QAQ
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconkrusnik03:
Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome, and that's alright. xD
Reply
:iconnoorelven:
noorelven Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
4th Stanza 4th line the first word should be "will" not "ill" or at least that is what I assume.
well done!
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD And the mistake is edited (like half a year later rofl)

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconnoorelven:
noorelven Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Better late than never :D
Reply
:iconninjagraffiti:
ninjagraffiti Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
that just made my day!!! im reading this, and then when it cant get any better... bam! freaking pokemon!!
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconmoxiemyths:
MoxieMyths Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
i love the imagery! I would love it if you would read some of my poetry and tell me what you think :)
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD You can send me a note if you want me to read some of your works. Link me to one or two and tell me what type of feedback you want

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icono0sheep0o:
o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Lol when I play Pokemon with every hit I flinch, yes I do care for them, but the ending, was epic
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD I don't flinch but...I'm cruel lol

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icono0sheep0o:
o0SHeeP0o Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
haha cruel you are, well its okay to be late, especially when exams are burning brain cells. XP
Reply
:iconcameronfedora:
CameronFedora Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Whoa...cool!
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icongeemassamart:
GeeMassamArt Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great 'punchline' :D completely threw me in a new direction in the end.
The first piece of lit. I've read on DA and I enjoyed it and it made me wanna re-read it.
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD I'm glad to have brought you into lit

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icongeemassamart:
GeeMassamArt Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha, it's all good! Remember, a pirate should never apologise! ;)
Reply
:iconmousemaster42:
MouseMaster42 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
that was unexpected. o.o But reading through a second time was really neat~
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconmousemaster42:
MouseMaster42 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student Digital Artist
S'not that bad. I've done worse in terms of procrastination. Thank you for taking the time to reply at all. :iconarigatouplz:
Reply
:icon20tourniquet02:
20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Nice way to describe a pokemon's feelings!:iconbwavoplz:
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icon20tourniquet02:
20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
You're very welcome!:)
It's better late than never!:XD:
Reply
:iconbrokenrose80:
brokenrose80 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
omg that last line....lmao...so unexpected...
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconirideamagicalladle:
IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ptttf I knew there was a good reason for Pikachu's existance! And now I know that reason it THUNDERBOLTS!:evillaugh:
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconirideamagicalladle:
IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw don't worry about :) your very busy with your life and plus your a very popular artist! I expect these things to take lomg bouts of time if any reply is even expected :D
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Professional Writer
They do, but I like t' clear all replies no matter how late :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

P.S. Aye, this reply is late...T3T me apologies
Reply
:iconirideamagicalladle:
IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Its ok, thank you for spending your time to make a reply! :icononionbowplz:
Reply
:iconmossstar10:
Mossstar10 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
.-. I didn't see THAT one coming.
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this my dear ^^

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:iconmossstar10:
Mossstar10 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's all good, Captain, I understand!
Reply
:icondrksorceress:
DrkSorceress Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
I did not see that coming XD Had to read it again :)
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Bwahaha, I see, thanks for enjoying it :3

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
:icondrksorceress:
DrkSorceress Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student Writer
That's ok XD You took the time to write one and that's all that matters
Reply
:iconhakkaobake:
hakkaobake Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I have to agree with LastHero13. Well done through and through.
Reply
:iconwordofchen:
WordOfChen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this xD

I'm sorry my thanks came so very late. I tend to be late on replies sometimes...for a long time

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
P.S. I know this is like months late. Oh god I fail (.x.)
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconwordofchen: More from WordOfChen


Featured in Collections

Work of Chen by noorelven

Storys by DannyOfX

New poems by BrutalBone


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
August 16, 2012
File Size
1.1 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
2,404
Favourites
148 (who?)
Comments
79
×