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They say your life flashes before your eyes when you die. Well, that didn't really happen to me. I remember it hurting; a searing pain in the back of my mind, and then it was all over...

I found myself floating, drifting high above the battlefield. My feet touched something that felt like an invisible glass floor, and soon I found that I was able to stand on it. It took awhile to get over my fear of heights, but once I did; I opened my eyes and just, watched, as the entire world carried on.

Funnily enough, I didn't feel much of anything at the time. I guess they tend to play it up in the movies. They always show that people remain angry, that people have feelings of wanting to do something or to accomplish something. But once you're gone, you don't actually feel much of that. 

Instead, I remember being calm. I was very calm after that final moment. I would poke my head every now and again, thinking that the skin would feel raw, but other than that; I was alright. I eventually started walking though, standing in one place can be pretty boring, and as I walked, I looked down at everything that was going on beneath me.

Hatred, war, people screaming. You see that stuff and you just feel sad. You don't feel angry, you don't hate. You just tend to wish that all the people down below didn't actually have to feel that way.

Now, of course, you can understand their feelings. I mean, when I was on the ground I was always angry. Every day of my life I was thinking: "This guy's the enemy, this guy's wrong, I hate this guy, I don't like this guy." But once you're gone, all that changes. You just realise it I guess, like you're waking up from a really bad dream. People - they aren't so different. Sure, that guy might not believe in the same God that I do and that other guy might not believe in a god at all. Yet, once you're away from everything, once you're away from all that noise that surrounds you, you tend to understand that, there's a kind of inner peace that all of us can feel. One that happens, only after you're free.

You don't think about the bad stuff any more. You don't feel that discomfort eating away at your chest. Instead, you look up and see this big giant ball of light; floating slowly in the air and it just wraps itself around you. And then, once you're inside that brilliant ball of light. You find out that everyone's the same.

It don't matter if you're black, it don't matter if you're white. It doesn't even matter if you're Muslim or Christian or a total Atheist. This isn't heaven; it's not a magical paradise. It's just a place where we all gather. There's stuff here if you want it, but I guess you tend to feel like you don't need it any more. Some people do the things they enjoy, others just watch the clouds go by. 

The main thing though, the one thing that sets this place apart from everywhere else though; is the fact that everybody just starts talking. You meet someone on a long winding road and you just start talking to them. Eventually more people gather and then everybody just starts talking. You don't think any of that irrelevant stuff before hand. It doesn't matter what they're wearing. You just walk up to them and talk, like being back in the playground when you were a kid.

You talk about all the things you liked, the kind of life that you had. You take all that fond stuff with you; high-school memories, the stupid shit you did with your friends. You share some stories and learn about other people. You see their lives for what they were. But you know what - nobody's unhappy. Everybody's always smiling, because even when you talk about the bad stuff, there's always someone there to listen to you.

I guess it's just a really warm place when you think of it like that. You don't crave any of the excitement that you did when you were on the ground. I mean, I been building a pretty big house of cards since I got here and I gotta say, it's gotten crazy big you know!

But sometimes you just can't help yourself, when you look back down on the ground. You see the world and you just - end up feeling sad I guess. You see the tears in everybody's eyes, the hatred that burns beneath the surface. You know they're upset, you know they're filling with all that negative emotion. You can feel it on your skin, but there's nothing you can do for them. You can try, nobody stops you from trying. But you learn to give up after your hands pass through them, after you shout your voice hoarse trying to tell them the truth. I guess that's as close as you can come to being sad in this place.

"Little bro, Mom, Dad. You don't have to cry, you don't have to hate the other person. He was just doing his duty, like I was doing mine. We crossed paths and then we separated. I went one way, he went the other. But I didn't vanish off to a distant land, I just came to this place ahead of you all. And I want you to know, that I'm going to be waiting. I'm going to be keeping these seats of ours warm, because I know, deep inside this heart of mine, that when the time is right, you'll be up here too. And the first thing I want us to do, is to just sit down at a table, like we never used to, and we'll talk. Because I know that I'll have about a million different things that I want to say to you all. But maybe I'll start with a long overdue, 'I love you'."
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Ladies and Gentlemen,

T'night we have another commish by :iconlayaamaranthi: - She's a lovely writer and has some good sketches which you should check out. Did I also mention she's an idea's fountain. Honestly, she's about 200% more creative and original than I am, so trust me, you need t' check her out xD

As fer th' story itself. She wanted me t' write a different perspective on that. I did that once, but I felt I could do it again with a different twist. Here, rather than the afterlife being paradise, it's more of a peaceful nirvana and that's something I've wanted t' portray for a long while. By removing destructive desire within a being, one can take joy in the simple things and because we don't suffer from a lack of food and water. Everything is much more calm and relaxed.

Anywho, I hope ye enjoyed it and if you too would like yer own poem or literature commissioned. Check out me journal and order one in usin' th' form.

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noorelven Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
WOW
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Ashbrie13 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Student General Artist
This is really well written and rather touching at that. 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Ashbrie13 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Np :3
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Krystallien Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not a person of words.

So I'm just gonna say that this is beautiful, I'm gonna save it on my laptop, so when I'm sad, or just want to read it, I can open it.

Good work! :3
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm very glad you enjoyed it that much :3

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morenamimds Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
I like to read outloud, feeling the words per say, and wanted to ask you to record it. Then I got to the bottom and you won off-hand :) i really dont know what to say... It reminded me of The Lovely Bones... I guess I have no words because you already said everything. Its utopical.. but I really wish I could transmit this peaceful loving message to other people. I get mad too, of course, I cant be calm, fulfilled and in peace with everything all the time, I wish I could.. I would just like to show people for a little moment that they can open their eyes, see everything around them, be grateful and just smile, let everything go, nothings permanent after all, so live without chains at least now and then. Its a way to shake off everything at least for a while.. and after the moment is gone, you'll keep smiling if you get into it.. into the everything that is and the nothing we are..

Sorry if i bothered you, I also write plus you touched a topic which is really important for me, either way i dont apply it much on myself.. we should listen more.. by this i mean to everything :)

Keep writing! this was the cherry of the cake of my day, Thank you very much. Take care & Greetings from a dreamer haha :3 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha tis not a bother my dear friend. Thank you for enjoying this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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ParanormalFeelings Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, it's beautiful, and also so true. I can't believe how people just keep hating each other just by being a little different :/

This reminded me of when people call death "the great equalizer".
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoying it :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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LadyLucianna Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student Writer
This is so poetic and beautiful. You really gave a full meaning of what the afterlife is about.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye m'friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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RavenDehartFox Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
The afterlife can be described in many unique ways, and this is one of them. Clap A well written piece that I'd admire, magnificent work. Hug 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Always glad t' do good work fer th' people x'3

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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Why do i like your idea of the afterlife better than everyone else's? Seriously.
Joking aside though, i really like the depth of this piece. It just... Makes me happy. I was scared to read this cause i was afraid it was gonna be all dark and stuff, but i'm glad it wasn't and that i decided to read it :) like i said, it makes me happy.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
But but...I be KNOWN fer me dark works x'D

That said, glad ye really enjoyed it m'dear ^^

As fer me ideas of afterlife...let's just say I've had a few peeks o3o

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
I know you're a dark writer haha but for some reason i was scared of reading this piece (i'm weird lol)
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Raunchyboy6 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I think this is very good.  I hope it's really like that.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
I hope so too m'friend. Always good t' hope fer a better tomorrow ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Frosco Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
This is beautiful. ;v;
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly m'friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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xXRebelMouseXx Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I shed a tear and almost started bawling because of this wonderful piece of art
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm very very glad that ye enjoyed it m'friend :3

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mermaidgirl013 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
this was absolutely amazing! it makes more sense to me than "heaven". like, when we die, are we supposed to be spoiled with anything and everything we want? i like the way this is portrayed instead

AWESOME JOB :D :D :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Well thing is, if we were spoiled in that sense...it'd be no different than heaven bein' a pass t' greed and hedonism (which is rejected in ALL spiritual texts) Therefore I like t' think it would be a calm place where one is free of that desire (emphasized in Buddhist ideology) x'D

Though I be a pirate, I be a spiritual man x'D

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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mermaidgirl013 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
yes! exactly! :D
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SerereFuim Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A very beautiful work. So peaceful, happy and sad. I enjoyed this piece very much.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye very much fer enjoyin' me works. I hope they'll continue t' please you ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TheMidnightWhisp Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn... The ending made me cry. Wonderful job on this. :') I really liked it.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Aye, I always love havin' an emotional twist at the end. It really helps the feels hit home eh? :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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EpicPieFace Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very deep and passionate. good piece of writing!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' it m'friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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EpicPieFace Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are most welcome.
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SilverPhoenix17 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I keep liking everything you write. Seriously amazing, my friend. Loved every bit of it. 
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you, I sincerely hope I continue t' produce works that ye'll enjoy ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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unnoticedhero Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Liked it very much, it includes everyone and almost spot on is how I feel about this world. I especially liked the part about the different religions, how does someone know if they have the right religion or not? They don't it's just based on faith and how you are brought up or what you decided to believe in (if any religions can qualify as "right"). An afterlife like this is great, everyone would get along, and see that all this anger isn't needed.

There's so much hatred in this world, but take all that away and you get great and calm moments, and not to mention no need to eat or sleep is like the perfect nirvana for me. Personally, this is what I hope the afterlife is, there are so many religions that fight and argue over things you have no way of knowing if it's true or not, people should be able to all move on and live(afterlive?) in peace. The one thing I didn't like was the part about not being able to reach out to people still living on earth, if I was dead I'd be doing everything in my power no matter what to stop all the anger if I'm not able to change the world before I die.

I apologize if this comment is controversial or offends anyone, it's just how I feel, I have a religion, but it's not my main focus in life (helping people is, and not in order to get somewhere, I help people for the sake of helping people). Things should be done so people can be happy, don't spend all your time trying to prove that where we die is better, or "you have to believe this and only this to get there",spend your time helping people with their problems and making the world right here and now better. Think about what I'm saying, and criticize me all you like, I just want this world to be a better place for everyone.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha, well yer perspective is a good one. Indeed I've often thought th' same thing. There is no correct afterlife written by one text or another. Instead, it's a different place and hopefully one that is free of the mortal shackles that cause the negativity between us ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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XIII-C Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
That was deep...
If you think about it this is sad but transmits a sense of joy and peace.
You did a very good job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly, I'm very glad ye enjoyed it m'friend ^^

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XIII-C Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
You're welcome :)
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Dustygirl22 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
I love the perspective and the moral of the story. I could really envision and feel it in my mind. REALLY good! ;)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye very much fer enjoyin' it, I'm glad ye liked it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Misty-CW Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Beautifully written, but your punctuation errors bugged me. That, however, is the only flaw in this work. It is beautiful!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Ah, sorry, I still be learnin' after all ;3

Please do point some of them out so I can take note fer me next release eh? ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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religiouscornrose237 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
This makes so much sense.
Seriously, it kind of depresses me, how logical this is. It makes me wonder why we can't all just get along. :/ Beautiful writing, and a great perspective on life after death...and life before death.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Well, problem is everybody tries t' prove they're right. But what if nobody's right and the alternative is peace. If we consider WHERE negativity stems from, we realise the core of it is ego and desire the fact that I (ego) want t' be recognised as being legitimate (desire). Ye remove both of those and suddenly, it no longer matters eh? ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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religiouscornrose237 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Very true. You make an excellent point.
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WhirlwindTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, I literally started crying at that last thing...

Very beautifully written and original, I kind of wish that this was true :hmm:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Well who's t' say it isn't ;3

We can always hold on t' hope. Can't we? ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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rik338 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
beautifull
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