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Alone but Alive:

Oh here I am standing,
A lost soul is landing.

The coldest December,
Can you still remember?

Do you even hear me?
There's no one around me!

Oh shadow that I see,
The void right behind me.

Yet still I am breathing;
Yet still I am feeling.

The coldest sensation,
Oh worthless creation!

Are you still crying?
Oh why are you lying - abandoned and cold

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Cold like what was left of soul,
Made of all the life you stole.
Walk divine but made of sin,
Worm of hatred squrim within.

Sin of lust and sin of pride,
Lash the tongue that last has lied.
Yours was silver with a promise,
Kiss of death and then you vomit.

Burning bile of ugly treason,
No one else can know the reason.
Left a soul behind to burn;
You are the reason I have turned...

On this cold and endless night...

When I'm finally pierced by the light...

And I awaken from this hell...

ALONE - BUT ALIVE!


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Alive and again oh do I dare?

To give this heart and to lay it bare.


When heaven cast its fated die -

Alone this soul was left to lie...





"Alone, but alive..."




-Chen Yuan Wen, 28th November 2012
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Author's Comment:

Alright mates,

I guess I should start with an apology. Originally there was supposed to be a humour release tonight, but it was...flat. Literally it was dead, so I went to see my buddy Jerome to help me turn it into a song. We managed to do a somewhat rap-like version of Yohoho and a Bottle of Rum (to be released tomorrow or the day after), but after we talked for awhile...well I created this.

The background to this is actually funny, see, I was helping someone close to me yesterday, only to have someone I once considered close abandon me completely. It hit me like a shock-wave I suppose, but I ignored it and tanked through yesterday. I guess the full impact really didn't hit me till Jerome started playing his guitar.

The lyrics fell out pretty naturally and I sort got into the whole groove of it by the second portion. Its kind of metal/rock sort of song. The first portion is sung in a high-pitched male rocker type voice, while the bold section is semi-rapped in a deep Amon Amarth type growl. Both sections are repeated once in the same order (but slightly faster) and then the final section is sung by the same voice as the first, but this is done in an almost Evanescence type style to finish off with the last phrase in quotes whispered toward the end of the track.

It was pretty cool to jam with Jerome and I think it really helped me deal with this issue. It really sucks when someone, whom you consider a friend, just decides that they should cut-you off (lol :icongotyeplz:) and it just feels pretty low to be abandoned without them even trying to talk to you or try to salvage something from it.

I'm the type of guy that goes the distance when he's capable of helping and I'm honest if I'm not able to, hence I don't make promises I can't keep. One promise that is frequently broken though is the whole 'we'll definitely be friends' thing. I feel that if you don't want to make the effort to be friends with someone, and if you can't handle them at both their worst and their best, then don't even make the promise in the first place.

People who do this sort of thing will always be around and it always hurts to be abandoned (and we're not even talking a relationship here thank god xD), but I firmly believe that they will get their just desserts. The ugliness of their personality will definitely come out for all to see and eventually they suffer the same fate they inflicted upon you (and in their case it might even be worse). At that point, I hope that they'll think back and remember what they did and maybe change for the better.

As for me, I'd like to say thanks. Thanks for the memories and for the pain, because now I can even do this type of poetry. Adios amigo, I won't be looking back.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:

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Okay I am going to start with the obvious: I love this piece. To me it strikes me as a song akin to something from Voltaire or Breaking Benjamin-Evil Angel and that kind of stuff has always appealed to me. But it's the sense of painful conviction at the end that really sells it for me:
Alone, but alive
Because even after all that you're still ticking and still breathing, I find that admirable. Being able to stand strong after enduring torments unfit for the demons of hell and punishment even the devil would cringe at, but look I'm still here.
Powerful words which I take to greatly, well done on making it through and here's to carrying on.
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BioError Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hello! I would like to tell you that I am indeed very fond of this piece. I can relate to it abit, and it's very nicely written and has great structure. 

I'm doing a poetry project at school in Language Arts. We have to collect 9 poems and one song. I was kindly wondering if maybe I could use your work as one of the 9? I would really appreciate it, and it would help me greatly. I really like it and would like to include it in the collection for my project. You will be getting all credit, and in no way shape or form will I try to claim it as my own. If you decide against it, that's fine too! ^-^

Thank you fr your time, I look forwar to your reply! c:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Professional Writer
haha, this response is so late so you probably can't use it, but thanks for considering it ^^

-Chenbeard the Pirate :iconwordofchen:
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kingmaxy Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Student Writer
fuckin cool,pretty beast
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Foxfire7772 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The feels man....Fave.
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brOKen-Mayhem17 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
I enjoyed this. Nice job :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye fer enjoyin' it me friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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brOKen-Mayhem17 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Welcome :)
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xFantasiix Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
amazing
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for enjoying this ^^

-Captain Chen of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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crazy-aika Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
faints because of awesomeness
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KittySib Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This would definately be a pretty song! Sorry you lost a friend", but I hope things will look up soon! :tighthug:
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist
Woa... that must've hurt... Really nice piece...
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jwolfdemon Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Writer
powerful, I like it :D
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karmacursed Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great. Nothing else I can say about it. A testament to human will, struglle, and survival. Nice work. I really like where it picks up in the bold and tapers back down. Well done. :+fav:
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Patito92 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
I love it ♥
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noorelven Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
*sings in gotye style* :P Very well expressed.
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Krusnik03 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amg, the lyrics~ They just flow so well.
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20Tourniquet02 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Lovely!!!
It makes me want to sing it !!!:iconlachoirplz:
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aloafofbrad Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
very nice. expect some faving from me in the future; i've been doing nanowrimo and i haven't been checking deviantart so often, so i'm a little behind on your updates.
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LivingInMyThoughts Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Wow. I love this. A lot. The message behind it, the phrasing, structure... everything. I think this might be one of my favorite of your works.
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lulumorina Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am currently in the same situations and yes, it hurts so very much and yes this piece touched me to the core I cried for a bit. I'm very much like you (as described in your authors comments) and I'm glad you had someone to help you through the situation :) We all need someone to do that.

I love this piece, that's all I have left to say
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augumon05 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Chilling to the bone. much to correspond with within this piece as with most of your works. You have a fabulous talent. let's hope the world comes to appreciate it more.
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bioclasm Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really liked it; it felt powerful and real. It flowed really nicely, with excellent pacing.
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Dragon-Demygod Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Wonderful as ever, this is perhaps my favorite piece so far.
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Sun-Down14 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
That is deep man.
I love it
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very good, did you know?
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:thumbsup: I really like this one. There's a raw sense that alive is almost worse than being alone in this. There is a lot of power behind the statements, and I like how something's were bolded, others italicized. It reminds me of an old friend. We used to be best friends, and then she turned dark. She became a stranger I no longer could even stand sitting next to alone. I struck her off, and after I felt lonely, as if I'd lost part of myself. But I guess you can say I felt "I'm alive". I didn't fall to what she'd become, flowing into the popular stands with lies and fake laughter. I felt saved, but alone.

: ) Great job again!
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kaze-chan187 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I love tis poem! Thumbs Up!
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BlueDarkAngelWings Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
I love this one so much. :D
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This piece really and truly struck a cord within me. It's words contain power I have never known, the flow is beautiful, and the message is almost a physical blow.
Thank you for yet another soul-piercing work.
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Pietroschek Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fine!
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themeepynerd Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When I was reading it, I envisioned as a rock/metal type song ending like Evanescence--and I didn't even read the description.

Poem. Mind. Blown.
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angelofluv12 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. <3
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lolnyny Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
OMG! This is an awsome poem! Like sometimes we say that the words are very powerful, well this is a good exemple!
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seungjinc Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
do you remember? 21st night of Sepmtember
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the rhyming scheme. And I'm sorry about your loser friend. I've been down a similar road, so I really appreciate this poem. :)
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rickyrico Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
This is awesome!:dummy:
I might seem a bit amateur, but I love poems that rhyme!:la:
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
It seems like I'm not the only one working on a winter-esque piece. The work I'm doing is actually a writing exercise I'm doing for description!
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Okay, so Ihad to go back and rereadhis after reading your "author's comment" not sure why but i did. As for abandonment? I can certainly relate. From a parent to a once well relied on ex boyfriend. But anywho, great poem! You always seem to convey the perfect messages in your poetry.
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xXDragonKeeper321Xx Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow :wow: that's rlly good
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luneta-star Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your seriously the only poet that I follow and I havent regretted following you :)
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frumpysnuffleupigus Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WHY ARE YOU SO GOOD?! *worships at your feet* I love your poetry!!! (Is that a spelling mistake...?)
You are my poetry IDOL, you hear?! You better

Sorry, kinda crazy. Just got out of school for the day. But you got my point, right?
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Zephyras-Lied Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student General Artist
A very great poem, my favorite line is 'Alone, but alive.' It ready just sets the tone of the poem. I love the description, keep up the excellent work!
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i-am-a-retro-lass Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome. very descriptive of feelings of abandonment. i love it. xx
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Mireilles-epitaph Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing
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JijiBubbles Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
How amazing. Your writing style is so unique, I love it. <33 This piece is really really cool and I'd love to hear it sung. c:
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ananumber Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I like it so much
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RedTearRiding Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful!! :iconbwavoplz: Been feeling this lately... sucks, but I'll get through it.
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MintyMintamin Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A soul was left to burn,
A solemn witch,
Staked for treason,
Yet she lives on,
In a hallow body,
But her heart lies bare,
Impervious to toxin,
Venom, and poison,
The cold and the heat.
Her torn wraith still walks on,
Wished for revenge,
But has no heart to give in.
She lies awake,
Not torn by nightmares,
But rather to see if there was a reason,
Why she even dare be friends with you.
Maybe one day, the day you forget,
Your spirit and body, will be mauled apart,
Blood will be spilled, but who rather cares?
Not the the person,
You have made
Into the wraith,
That she has become. . .
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ExplosivePixel Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
O could not help it, I HAD to grab my guitar and start singing your lyrics before I could even finish reading it! I love it, I absolutely love it. I hope some day IŽll be able to write like that!
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