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The lights are out and I'm feeling manic
My heart is thumping in a shivering panic.
It's like I'm hitting, my all time low;
How many more; do I have to go?

Hello, hello, can you hear me speak?
I'm afraid my voice is getting weak.
My screams and sounds are growing quiet;
I need those pills; I'm growing tired...

Without them I'm colourless, just an empty face
Oh no, oh no, I'm in a dirty place...
I don't know how and I don't know why;
But it's just so hard to say goodbye.

When you need a feeling, when you need a high;
It's really easy to tell the lie:
'I'm fine, I'm fine, it's just a trial!'
But you can't hear, your own denial...

"Hello, hello, how low will you go?"

-Chen Yuan Wen, 8th May 2012
Feeling pretty low, decided to get more practice for inspiration week.

Trying out something new with this piece. Instead of keeping to the theme of the inspiring song, I've decided to shape it the way I want it to portray my own theme.

This should therefore give off a different feel from 'Breaking Point'.

As always, if you guess the song this was inspired by you get a psychic cookie :3.

Hint: Their vocalist is dead.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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UnbearableME Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
very good :/
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CassieCros13 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
Nirvana is the band that inspired this...Smells Like Teen Spirit is the song! :heart: :la:

Anyways wonderfully written, and true. :heart: :clap:
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Duragonslaya Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^.^ I haven't been on this for a looooooooooooooooong time so I'm just now watching you. Your poems are great as always. :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Hey man, great to see you back :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Duragonslaya Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you. ^.^
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Shiatanni Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
creepy, but cool Cpatain!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye thank ye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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noorelven Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Dont know which band you are talking about :S the problem with myriad interests is that not one of them is developed to a higher level :S

It does give a different feel from Breaking Point. I liked that more than this one ! But it does go down the guilt spiral of an addict in very apt terms!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
This one was based off "Nirvana - Smells Like Teen Spirit" that's a song I really like :3

But that's the only one from them that I like xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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noorelven Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Ah I see!
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Manigran Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Another great work from you. Wow.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye me friend. I'm glad that ye continue ta enjoy me works ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Manigran Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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DeeryDeerth Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Just an awesome poem! :D
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye, thank ye Linda ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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DeeryDeerth Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! :D
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TexasDreamer01 Featured By Owner May 12, 2012
This is awesome. *is also listening to lacrimosa by immediate music*
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
haha, Evanescence? That's always good :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Getsuei-san Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Great job :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye so kindly, I'm very glad ye enjoyed it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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brokenrose80 Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
you did well expressing what it feels like at times to be in that grip...i hate when people say addiction is a disease when it is more like this crutch, this incredible need and pull that is emotional/physical/psychological...the addiction feeds the denial making it harder to break out...and we do feel lost in it loose our sense of self.. anywho well written
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr addicition is terrible, even I feel it's pangs sometimes, but my willpower keeps me strong ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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brokenrose80 Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
indeed...teh power of choice
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Aazdremzol Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Plz evaluate what manic means xD
I don't like the feel of dictionaries o3o
And also you make me want to write a little poetry so...thx for that I guess.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Manic means crazy :3

Yer welcome me friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Aazdremzol Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I might just use it. I am not crazy though. I just like crazy things. xD See ya...for now.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Remember to ask for permission before using anything ^^

Or else it's illegal xD


-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Aazdremzol Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I just meant the word XD
But don't worry about the permission thing. I will always go to you first o3o
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theGman0 Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist
:icongo-on-plz:great work as always
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye as always :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SerpentineAthena Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Student General Artist
Do you mean "feeling manic" or "feeling like a maniac"? Since "feeling maniac" isn't exactly correct.
(Sorry, grammar freak here!)
But otherwise, this is a great poem :)
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh thank you for pointing the error. The word was supposed to be "manic" not maniac xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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SerpentineAthena Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem :)
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uttercupbay Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
im about to cry! that was amazing!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr I'm glad ye loved me work hat much ^^ I hope more of me releases please ya :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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uttercupbay Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
arrr keep working on that feather and ink sir!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye I will ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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uttercupbay Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
arg!!!
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LolipopLuversEmoKity Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
I effing love this <3 Good job
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I'm very glad that ye liked me work ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Welcome
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TwiUnderSeeker Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
Another great job.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
ARrr thank ye, I'm very pleased that ye liked me work :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Spade9 Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
WOAHHHHH, *mind is freakin blown* you rock at poems duuuude!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly. I write more every week. In fact, this week is Dragon Week and I released the first piece tonight, so yer welcome ta come check it out ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Spade9 Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
dragon week, nifty! XD
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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WangWen12 Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
Beautiful poem, I like the way it flows.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Arrr thank ye, I'm very glad ye enjoyed me work =D

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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