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The lights are out and I'm feeling manic
My heart is thumping in a shivering panic.
It's like I'm hitting, my all time low;
How many more; do I have to go?

Hello, hello, can you hear me speak?
I'm afraid my voice is getting weak.
My screams and sounds are growing quiet;
I need those pills; I'm growing tired...

Without them I'm colourless, just an empty face
Oh no, oh no, I'm in a dirty place...
I don't know how and I don't know why;
But it's just so hard to say goodbye.

When you need a feeling, when you need a high;
It's really easy to tell the lie:
'I'm fine, I'm fine, it's just a trial!'
But you can't hear, your own denial...

"Hello, hello, how low will you go?"

-Chen Yuan Wen, 8th May 2012
Feeling pretty low, decided to get more practice for inspiration week.

Trying out something new with this piece. Instead of keeping to the theme of the inspiring song, I've decided to shape it the way I want it to portray my own theme.

This should therefore give off a different feel from 'Breaking Point'.

As always, if you guess the song this was inspired by you get a psychic cookie :3.

Hint: Their vocalist is dead.

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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CassieCros13 Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
Nirvana is the band that inspired this...Smells Like Teen Spirit is the song! :heart: :la:

Anyways wonderfully written, and true. :heart: :clap:
WordOfChen Jan 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' this piece ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Duragonslaya Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^.^ I haven't been on this for a looooooooooooooooong time so I'm just now watching you. Your poems are great as always. :D
WordOfChen Jul 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Hey man, great to see you back :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Duragonslaya Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you. ^.^
creepy, but cool Cpatain!
WordOfChen May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Aye thank ye ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
Dont know which band you are talking about :S the problem with myriad interests is that not one of them is developed to a higher level :S

It does give a different feel from Breaking Point. I liked that more than this one ! But it does go down the guilt spiral of an addict in very apt terms!
WordOfChen May 25, 2012  Professional Writer
This one was based off "Nirvana - Smells Like Teen Spirit" that's a song I really like :3

But that's the only one from them that I like xD

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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